SMOOTH CRIMINAL

August 5, 2009
By rueebee21 SILVER, El Paso, Texas
rueebee21 SILVER, El Paso, Texas
6 articles 0 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Adapt and overcome" - Coach Massey


Your heart’s beating , you’re running for your life.


BOOM BOOM POW!!!!!
A gun shot in mid air!
You look behind yourself in fright


BOOM BOOM POW!!!!!
You fall onto the freezing rock hard street. Then you start to feel something blazing hot run down your back. You hear footsteps and chains dangling heading your way. You’re in way too much pain to look to find out who it is. You can’t help it but as you hear these footsteps get closer and closer to you. Questions like WHAT TO DO?? WHAT TO SAY?? Start to speculate inside your mind as you set well into panic mode. All out of the blue you take notice of some one laughing…evil laughing though. Finally, a tall mysterious man starts to terrorize you even more by his deep dark cold voice as he speaks saying, ”YOU’VE BEEN HIT BY A SMOOTH CRIMINAL.” He laughs his wicked laughs…he walks away to let you fade away into the night.

The author's comments:
this poem or short story has inspired me to the max. Smooth Ciminal is one o my favorite short stories that i love to read over and over again just fo the fun of it.The way i came up with it was just simply listening to a beat that put the extreme to put it on paper instead of just imagining it. My passion for writing has grown ever since i writing in a journal.

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on Mar. 11 2011 at 3:38 pm
Basketball23 SILVER, Pine Grove, Pennsylvania
8 articles 13 photos 488 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I'm living in a shell with no soul" -Three Days Grace (World So Cold)
"Time still turns the pages of the book it's burned" -Avenged Sevenfold (So Far Away)

Hmmm...interesting...

on Nov. 1 2010 at 10:34 am
vampiresrock GOLD, Cornish, New Hampshire
12 articles 0 photos 92 comments

Favorite Quote:
When life gives you oranges, make grape juice and sit back and let the world wounder how the hell you just did that.

Micheal Jackson...nice way to re-write his words for Smooth Criminal...creative....but not orginal....sorry

on Oct. 15 2010 at 4:45 pm
blackmist BRONZE, Houston, Texas
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There's a song called Smooth Criminal- same title, same story, some of the words are even the same. Not very original.

on Jul. 21 2010 at 8:05 pm
OfficialApprover PLATINUM, Orefield, Pennsylvania
48 articles 0 photos 1754 comments

Favorite Quote:
Grab life by the balls. -Slobberknocker
We cannot change the cards we're dealt just how we play the hand
Experience is what you get when you didn't get what you wanted
It's pretty easy to be smart when you're parroting smart people
-Randy Pausch

Wow...that was creepy and mysterious, very interesting and different.  Nice job.

on Oct. 9 2009 at 5:03 pm
hannahbee7 DIAMOND, Boca Raton, Florida
67 articles 1 photo 65 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You know you’re a writer if your friend tells you a heartbreaking story and your first reaction is – wow, that would make an incredible plot for a novel. You know you’re a smart writer if you manage to keep that reaction to yourself."

Wow this was really cool and different! I like it

on Oct. 3 2009 at 6:51 pm
rueebee21 SILVER, El Paso, Texas
6 articles 0 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Adapt and overcome" - Coach Massey

hey ppl

comment

myy poem

plz(: and i'll comment yours.!

on Sep. 21 2009 at 10:16 pm
booklover618 GOLD, Harlingen, Texas
10 articles 0 photos 6 comments
whoa. this kinda reminds me of my story Horror From Behind.

its cool, good job!

LaylaViolet said...
on Sep. 17 2009 at 11:58 am
Whoa, I absolutely loved it. Reminded me of Black Eyed Peas; did you get the BOOM BOOM POW from there? Check out my stories too--I loved this one!




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