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Vignette of a Cloud


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Hi, I’m Betty. The cloud who holds up the castle. You know what though? I can’t stand it, I have to hold up a couple of Giants and a huge castle. My work is way too demanding! Okay, so I’m supposed to be a foggy, moist, lightweight cloud. But instead I just sit there all day holding up everything. Its just not fair, all the other clouds get to float freely way high in the sky. The only reason I did this job was because I thought it would be easy. But I guess it changed. I’m not what I’m supposed to be. I’m not creamy colored any more, I’m red because I’ve been working too hard, and I’m so tired. Every once in a while I see a beautiful cloud drift on by. But, right here and right now it’s just me, all alone.



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BandGeekAndProudThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 3 at 7:22 pm:
Very nice. Inspired by Les Mis?
 
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transparantspirit434This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 15, 2013 at 12:51 pm:
I loved this creative change of perspective; how the cloud feels about holding up the castle. This was written well, not over-the-top for it's subject, and it amused me. In a good way. Keep it up!
 
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Quartermaster This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 28, 2013 at 12:45 am:
I really liked your subtle use of imagery (I'm red) to both describe how the cloud feels and what time of day it is (either sunset or sunrise). Killing two birds with one stone and doing it subtly; impressive. 
 
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