A Barren World

June 12, 2011

A cold stone palace sat alone in a barren and icy world. Dust permeated every nook and cranny, clothing the remnants of a lost age.

Bright silks had faded. The glass chandeliers lay in ruins upon the floor. Intricately illuminated books cracked and disintegrated. There was nobody to put food on the beautiful porcelain nor fill the goblets with sweet wine.

Only one life remained in this empty place, though I use a loose definition of “life”. He sits upon his grubby throne, shouting to his long deceased servants. A tarnished crown sat atop his filthy head, and the halls echoed with mad laughter.


The author's comments:
I wrote this out of boredom. I'm not sure if I'll expand on it or not.

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on Sep. 17 2011 at 12:31 am
Love.Hate.Passion., Spring Valley, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
~Hope. Faith. Love~
~Be proud of who you are.You are all unique in a different way.~
~I WILL NOT fade into oblivion , and become less than
a distant memory.~

This is great !

 I loved your description and how crazy the man is. It would be great if you continued this!


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on Aug. 30 2011 at 1:11 pm
msp49 BRONZE, Middletown, Connecticut
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Not really into these types of things, but I'd like to hear more. The writing style and possible plot had me thinking, and I actually admire this piece, unfinished or not.

on Aug. 10 2011 at 3:42 pm
BrightBurningCampeador PLATINUM, Portland, Oregon
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No just insane.

on Aug. 9 2011 at 10:13 pm
divingforreality GOLD, Fontana, California
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I'd love for you to continue.

Is he supposed to be skitzophrenic?


on Aug. 3 2011 at 4:31 pm
JoPepper PLATINUM, Annandale, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"Freedom is the ability to not care what the other person thinks."

"Not all those who wander are lost" --JRR Tolkien

"When you are listening to music it is better to cover your eyes than your ears." --Jose' Bergamin

You should definetely expand this!!!!  It was pretty good, I liked the describtion!!!! ;)

on Jul. 14 2011 at 7:49 pm
BrightBurningCampeador PLATINUM, Portland, Oregon
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I might do that, though I'm not sure what the plot would be.

OceanFey GOLD said...
on Jul. 14 2011 at 2:32 pm
OceanFey GOLD, North Potomac, Maryland
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Favorite Quote:
It is easy to hate and it is difficult to love. This is how the whole scheme of things works. All good things are difficult to achieve; and bad things are very easy to get. - Confucius

You should expand this story when you have time :)

on Jul. 14 2011 at 11:40 am
redhairCat PLATINUM, Pebble Beach, California
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Favorite Quote:
"I can do anything!"

Interesting! It definitely makes me think. You could apply that story to many other aspects of life. Great job!

on Jul. 1 2011 at 5:03 pm
Silent_Artist SILVER, Selma, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"One day I'm gonna run away and never come back and when I come back I'm gonna be the knife master" - Jimmy The Rev Sullivan. Not much of a deep meaning but it makes me laugh.

Besides the mistake you pointed out I enjoyed it. 

on Jun. 29 2011 at 2:10 pm
BrightBurningCampeador PLATINUM, Portland, Oregon
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Oops, I just realized I messed up the tense of one of my verbs. Oh well.




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