The Beginning...

April 24, 2011
By AussiMusicLover BRONZE, Central Coast, Other
AussiMusicLover BRONZE, Central Coast, Other
4 articles 1 photo 42 comments

Favorite Quote:
When you are in Love you can't fall asleep because reality is better than your dreams
The hottest love has the coldest end.
Love begins with a smile, grows with a kiss, and ends with a teardrop
Falling in love is awfully simple, but falling out of love is simply awful.


“And that’s 10 points for me!!” Mum yells out.
“No Way!!” I say counting the scrabble pieces on the board, laughing. Dad was working hard again on his work papers. “Dad, why don’t you join us? It would be so much more fun!” He looks up at me and smiles,
“Ok Kiddo.” Dad hops off the couch and joins us on the floor, a twinkle in his eyes. I thought that that twinkle would be of pleasure, but it was fear.
“Dad…?” I ask worried.
“Yea?” He smiles at me. “Everything alright?”
“Um… Yea, you?” I ask him, concerned.
“Peachy.” He nearly got me with that amazing, fatherly smile. But I saw the look in his eyes, still full of fear.
“Great” I say, going along with whatever was going on. “I’m gonna get the Ice-cream, ‘kay?”
“Yum, how bout the double chocolate with choc chips?” Mum replies eager for ice-cream.
“On it!” I jump up and head to the kitchen. I still couldn’t shake the weariness out of me from the look in dad’s eyes. I had only seen him have that look the night before Granma passed away. And that made me wonder what was REALLY going on.
Reaching into the un-necessarily, oversized freezer I grab the double chocolate, choc chip ice-cream, and then head over to grab three spoons.
At first I thought it was my own eyes, playing stupid tricks on me again. But then the whole house went pitch black. I scream… Well I try to. But it didn’t come out because someone else screamed for me. I knew that scream. That was my mum!
“MUM!!” I scream out to the pitch black house. “DAD, answer me!!” I navigate myself away from the kitchen into the lounge-room, ice-cream still in hand. “Mum? Dad?” I whisper.
In the corner of my eye I see something cross the window. I knew it wasn’t my eyes playing tricks on me, this time. No Way. The front door slams and I jump. “MUM!! DAD!!” I scream it out now. I was scared. “SOMEONE?!” I wasn’t scared anymore. I was petrified.
I walk, alone, to go get a candle from the kitchen. Dad had trained me to move around the house in pitch black. I thought it was silly back then, when he put a blindfold over my eyes and tell me where to go. But now I was grateful.
I grab the largest candle that we had and light it with a match. As soon as I see the orange-gold light from the warm candle I start to relax and think things through. I look up into the kitchen. And Scream, loud. The shadows surround me, in a circle. I scream again. And again, and again, and again. And just like that, the world went black.


The author's comments:
Hey Guys, Soooo this is a pro-louge to a story im writing <3 Soo Any feedback good or bad would be appreciated, even if you have some ideas i'd be glad to put them in :)

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on Jun. 17 2011 at 3:02 am
AussiMusicLover BRONZE, Central Coast, Other
4 articles 1 photo 42 comments

Favorite Quote:
When you are in Love you can't fall asleep because reality is better than your dreams
The hottest love has the coldest end.
Love begins with a smile, grows with a kiss, and ends with a teardrop
Falling in love is awfully simple, but falling out of love is simply awful.

Haha Thanks, Yes i am writing more of it though it might not be a while yet because of school and testing. So i will get more up soon hopefully!!

 


on Jun. 16 2011 at 12:44 pm
superkoala BRONZE, Little Valley, New York
4 articles 1 photo 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I am so clever that sometimes I don't understand a single word of what I am saying."
~Oscar Wilde

wow... i wonder what happens next please write more :)

on May. 7 2011 at 2:49 am
AussiMusicLover BRONZE, Central Coast, Other
4 articles 1 photo 42 comments

Favorite Quote:
When you are in Love you can't fall asleep because reality is better than your dreams
The hottest love has the coldest end.
Love begins with a smile, grows with a kiss, and ends with a teardrop
Falling in love is awfully simple, but falling out of love is simply awful.

Haha Why Thankyou :D Your a great reader :) If thats what you call it ... haha ;)

lyssa28 BRONZE said...
on May. 6 2011 at 6:43 pm
lyssa28 BRONZE, Las Vegas, Nevada
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no problem :D ur a gr8 writer

on May. 6 2011 at 6:24 pm
AussiMusicLover BRONZE, Central Coast, Other
4 articles 1 photo 42 comments

Favorite Quote:
When you are in Love you can't fall asleep because reality is better than your dreams
The hottest love has the coldest end.
Love begins with a smile, grows with a kiss, and ends with a teardrop
Falling in love is awfully simple, but falling out of love is simply awful.

Awesome :D Thats a great idea :) hahah thanks ;) 

lyssa28 BRONZE said...
on May. 6 2011 at 1:43 pm
lyssa28 BRONZE, Las Vegas, Nevada
2 articles 0 photos 89 comments
hmm, you could continue it by making her "wake up" in a completely different surrounding or something like that. How you ended it was amazing though

on May. 1 2011 at 2:13 am
AussiMusicLover BRONZE, Central Coast, Other
4 articles 1 photo 42 comments

Favorite Quote:
When you are in Love you can't fall asleep because reality is better than your dreams
The hottest love has the coldest end.
Love begins with a smile, grows with a kiss, and ends with a teardrop
Falling in love is awfully simple, but falling out of love is simply awful.

Thanksyou! :D Have any idea's on how i should continue it? I'd be glad to put it in if you like :D

lyssa28 BRONZE said...
on Apr. 29 2011 at 8:11 pm
lyssa28 BRONZE, Las Vegas, Nevada
2 articles 0 photos 89 comments
this was awesome


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