Watching (revised)

September 24, 2010
By PussnBoots GOLD, Tomahawk, Wisconsin
PussnBoots GOLD, Tomahawk, Wisconsin
12 articles 0 photos 138 comments

Favorite Quote:
"When life hands you lemons, make apple juice. Then sit back and watch the world wonder how you did it." -Unknown
"The world is my pineapple. I just have to figure out a way past the prickly parts." -Me


She stares out the window at the cold scene before her. Outside, nothing moves in the misty trees lining the dirve. The world outside is a muffled place, with low gray clouds blocking out the sun.

Behind her, a cheery fire crackles in its hearth. Fluffy blankets are piled on the thick carpet in front of it, looking as if they'd been dumped off cold shoulders. A novel lies forgotten on the floor, a mug of hot chocolate on the mahogany table now cool and stagnant.

She is oblivious to the cozy room behind her as she sits on the chilly windowsill. Frost paints patterns on the corner of the glass pane, lightly buffeted by the vague white puffs of her breath. Her feet are bare, and subtle shudders shake her body.

But her haunted eyes never move from the swirling mists.


The author's comments:
This is basically the same as the first one, with some touch-ups, thanks to the help of some simon criticism. :)
Hopefully, this one's better. ;)

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on Oct. 3 2010 at 3:12 pm
PussnBoots GOLD, Tomahawk, Wisconsin
12 articles 0 photos 138 comments

Favorite Quote:
"When life hands you lemons, make apple juice. Then sit back and watch the world wonder how you did it." -Unknown
"The world is my pineapple. I just have to figure out a way past the prickly parts." -Me

Now, why would I let an opportunity to torture you pass???? xD Just kidding... kinda. ;D

on Oct. 2 2010 at 4:54 pm
AliceForever BRONZE, Someplace, Wisconsin
1 article 6 photos 36 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Sometimes it takes a crazy person to see the truth. If so, I'm a freaking lunatic."- Stephen Colbert

"YOU CAN'T STOP THIS TRAIN!" My friend and illustrator, CK

Shut it...

 


on Oct. 1 2010 at 5:21 pm
PussnBoots GOLD, Tomahawk, Wisconsin
12 articles 0 photos 138 comments

Favorite Quote:
"When life hands you lemons, make apple juice. Then sit back and watch the world wonder how you did it." -Unknown
"The world is my pineapple. I just have to figure out a way past the prickly parts." -Me

Thanks, my sista! (nah nah nah nah nah, I got you on here, HA!)

on Oct. 1 2010 at 5:19 pm
AliceForever BRONZE, Someplace, Wisconsin
1 article 6 photos 36 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Sometimes it takes a crazy person to see the truth. If so, I'm a freaking lunatic."- Stephen Colbert

"YOU CAN'T STOP THIS TRAIN!" My friend and illustrator, CK

Lovely, like always, my sista.


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