Icarus This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine.

June 1, 2010
I am free! The feeling is incredible, like nothing I have experienced before. I have nothing to compare it to, except what a bird must feel: the height, the wide blue sky all around, the dark ocean below. The freedom. At this moment, I would gladly give anything to fly like a bird forever. I never want to land.

I fly in great looping circles and experiment by tipping my arms left and right. I fly lower and lower, skimming my hand in the water. My father shouts to me, warning me of the dangers: the mist will dampen the feathers in my wings, and they will go limp. I laugh from sheer ­delight, but obey and return to him.

The sun is hot on my back and the breeze holds me aloft in a cocoon of warmth. I am content for the first time since Minos imprisoned us in the labyrinth. The heat above entices me, and I climb a little higher. My father does not notice, so I fly even higher. The sun grows warmer. It is wonderful. Down on earth, it is so cold. But up here, I am warmer than I have ever been. I float on the breeze, resting my arms.

I hear my father shouting my name, and I look down. He has a look of terror on his face, but I do not know why.

Suddenly, I find myself slipping lower, away from the heat. I flap my wings, hoping to rise again, but I can not. The sun has melted the wax that hold my wings together. I continue to fall; there is nothing I can do.

I rush past my father in a freefall, and he shouts my name. I reach out to him and he grips my fingers, but I slip from his grasp. I am frightened. The ocean swells up beneath me, larger and larger. It looms closer.

In a second I am swallowed up. The last thing I see is my father looking down in terrible sadness, calling my name. But the ocean snatches his voice away from me, and I see no more.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.

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Miniterror said...
Feb. 12, 2013 at 6:40 pm
I believe it's a very good piece, but it is not original enough for me. I prefer something completly original, something that will capture my imagination for the first time.
Nathan D. replied...
Feb. 12, 2013 at 9:13 pm
I agree. It should capture my mind and I shouldn't know what's going to happen.
Epiclyawesome said...
Mar. 15, 2012 at 10:24 pm
Wow, this is an amazing peice. I'm sort of a mythology nut, so it's cool to see some of that on this site. You're an amazing writer. Hey, I know it's a little annoying, but could someone rate and comment my story? It's called the Story of the Demons, and I would really appreciate it if you read it. Thanks
MikeWilhelm said...
Nov. 26, 2011 at 11:25 pm
Absolutly beautiful
oneword said...
Aug. 31, 2011 at 2:36 pm
This poem is epic
sweetiepye16 said...
Aug. 30, 2011 at 5:23 pm
It's wonderful how well your able to retell the story with such amazing detail. I love it!
4everyoung15 said...
Aug. 8, 2011 at 11:32 pm

I 4got 2 say Im a mythology freak ;D


4everyoung15 said...
Aug. 8, 2011 at 11:30 pm

its amazing how you use greek mythology to make an interesting story with ur touch!!! when i started reading of the feathers i wuz thinking it was the story of Icarus and his father being liberated from the maze..... no wonder it got chosen for the magazine!!! Excellent job I felt like I was flying for a second there ;D


writerfreak21231This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Aug. 8, 2011 at 11:14 am
Very nice! wow that was sooo kewl! I very nice piece of work! great job! I just posted a new story i wrote called: Alien invasion series book one: the caller. If any of u had time please go check it out and post feedback and comments. It would be much appreciated! Thanks! and keep writing everyone! :)(:
crazywriter662 said...
May 26, 2011 at 2:43 pm
I really liked this peice, and I'd love to see another, maybe in the point of veiw of Dadelus (Sorry if I spelled it wrong . . .)
elfen_girl said...
Oct. 17, 2010 at 2:04 pm

i totally loned this, u can really help people tp empathise with the whole story.

(i was almost crying lol)


Oct. 13, 2010 at 10:52 pm
I love this!
Megaphone1927 said...
Jun. 11, 2010 at 10:15 pm

This is really impressive, I've never heard a retelling of this story so vivid. Even though it is a little sad, I think the last two paragraphs are the best. It isn't over descriptive and cheesy like alot of thing on this sight are.

 but I have a question.

How long did it take the editor people to read your thing and post it online? I've submitted 2 or 3 things, but it's takin' forever.

.rauha replied...
Sept. 10, 2010 at 5:55 pm
It was published online because they put it in one of their print magazines. I didn't submit it online, I mailed it in. I'm sorry I can't be of more help.
BlindSamurai replied...
Sept. 12, 2010 at 5:32 pm

When you mail in, what adress do you send the story too? Sorry, I'm a little confused about that.

And will you have a higher chance of getting published if you physically mail your work as opposed to sending it in online?

Kandyz said...
Jun. 3, 2010 at 5:56 am
awesome job at retellling=]
.rauha replied...
Sept. 10, 2010 at 5:55 pm
Thank you very much. :)
Thesilentraven This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 2, 2010 at 3:24 pm

This was a thrilling retelling of the story of Icarus. I loved the description of flying but was broken-hearted when Icarus fell into the ocean (although I already knew his end).

I have dreamed many times about flying, but I never get far off the ground.

RachelL replied...
Jun. 8, 2010 at 7:18 pm

Yes, I do too (the dreams). I'm glad you liked my retelling, and I'm glad (sort of) that you were so sad at the end...it means that I successfully conveyed the emotions that I wanted to. :)

I am so happy that this made it into the magazine!


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