Prologue

April 5, 2010
By JeanGrey GOLD, Mason City, Iowa
JeanGrey GOLD, Mason City, Iowa
10 articles 0 photos 258 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I am so clever that sometimes I don't understand a single word of what I am saying."-Oscar Wilde


Prologue

Alek ran through the square at top speed. He dodged the people and bikes, darted between cars, and dashed down alleyways hoping he would lose her in the bustle of the crowd. Finally, out of breath he squeezed into a small hole in a door behind a few trashcans, breathing heavily and wishing she had lost sight of him. He heard her feet slapping against the pavement as she ran into the alley in which he had hid. He then heard silence as she stopped, inspecting the gloom before her, hunting for him.

“Alek,” She called. She sounded just as winded as he was, and livid. “I know you stole it. I want it back!” Alek held his breath, pleading with the gods that she would look past him. His heart was pounding so loudly that he was sure she would find him despite the gloom of the alley and the noises of New York.

“You know what you took from me. You know I will find you.” Her voice lowered, almost soft and calm, but he knew it was a mind trick; she was trying to get him to fear her enough to give himself up. He knew her well enough to know that was a bad idea.

Alek resolved to crawl deeper into what seemed to be an apartment building, abandoned obvious. He held in his sneezes for fear of her hearing, but this was difficult. The dust in the atmosphere was thick.
“Alek” her voice but a whisper now, “I will find you.” She was right outside the hole now. “You know, I know it, so if you would just come out of hiding. Save me the time and energy of having to look for you. It is all in your best interest.” Alek hated her. He felt a chill shoot down his spine as he heard her dragging her elongated nails against the brick of the wall outside the building.

“Alek, this is my last warning.” She intoned slowly. “You will give me what I want. If you don’t, you know you will suffer.” Alek now began to squirm. She knows where I am. She can see me. She will kill me. Oh, God do not let me die. Not to a witch like her.

“Boo."


The author's comments:
I am not sure about a name for this novel yet. I haven't gotten past the prologue yet. I shall submit this in parts and I believe comments from readers should inspire me to keep going. Thanks.

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JeanGrey GOLD said...
on Aug. 12 2010 at 4:11 pm
JeanGrey GOLD, Mason City, Iowa
10 articles 0 photos 258 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I am so clever that sometimes I don't understand a single word of what I am saying."-Oscar Wilde

I am afraid I have replied to late then...

JeanGrey GOLD said...
on Aug. 12 2010 at 4:10 pm
JeanGrey GOLD, Mason City, Iowa
10 articles 0 photos 258 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I am so clever that sometimes I don't understand a single word of what I am saying."-Oscar Wilde

Thanks, and sure :)

_Mags_ SILVER said...
on Jul. 31 2010 at 7:19 pm
_Mags_ SILVER, Somewhere, North Carolina
9 articles 7 photos 436 comments

Favorite Quote:
- I stare danger in the face and giggle
- Never argue with an idiot, people might not know the difference
-R.A.P (Retards Attempting Poetry)
-Tip Cologne ryhmes with alone

i loved it. you have a lot of talent. And if you're having trouble finding a title, what i do is try to find word that is a big part of the story.

btw-can you check out some of my stuff?


on Jul. 1 2010 at 12:46 am
Supernova7 GOLD, Redford, Texas
16 articles 6 photos 394 comments

Favorite Quote:
Let me cry my tears let me live in sorrow as long as you promise to be with me tomorrow
By Me:)

Hey jean I really need ur help please please please find me when you log on. Good job btw.

JeanGrey GOLD said...
on May. 27 2010 at 1:13 am
JeanGrey GOLD, Mason City, Iowa
10 articles 0 photos 258 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I am so clever that sometimes I don't understand a single word of what I am saying."-Oscar Wilde

Thanks bud :) 

JeanGrey GOLD said...
on May. 27 2010 at 1:13 am
JeanGrey GOLD, Mason City, Iowa
10 articles 0 photos 258 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I am so clever that sometimes I don't understand a single word of what I am saying."-Oscar Wilde

Haha thanks :)

RiaRen SILVER said...
on May. 25 2010 at 10:25 pm
RiaRen SILVER, New Bothwell, Other
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OH MY GOODNESS!!! ... THAT was amazing!! you are an incredibley amazingly, awesomely good writer!! i can't believe this is the prologue.... GREAT JOB!!! i love it :)

on May. 11 2010 at 11:54 am
SilentSerenity BRONZE, Brookfield, Ohio
3 articles 1 photo 19 comments

Favorite Quote:
"A word to the wise isn't nessesary, its the stupid ones that need the advice."
Bill Cosby

I loved it T, cant wait for the next part.

JeanGrey GOLD said...
on May. 5 2010 at 10:39 am
JeanGrey GOLD, Mason City, Iowa
10 articles 0 photos 258 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I am so clever that sometimes I don't understand a single word of what I am saying."-Oscar Wilde

*sigh* "Boo" means she found him. Duh lol and thanks for the critique. :)

Thorn BRONZE said...
on May. 4 2010 at 6:23 pm
Thorn BRONZE, Baltimore, Maryland
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What's next???? Really good, can't wait. Also, I loved the descriptions. What does "boo" have to do with anything??

JeanGrey GOLD said...
on Apr. 28 2010 at 4:37 pm
JeanGrey GOLD, Mason City, Iowa
10 articles 0 photos 258 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I am so clever that sometimes I don't understand a single word of what I am saying."-Oscar Wilde

lol no, this is to be my first one hopefully :)

OhSnapple GOLD said...
on Apr. 28 2010 at 2:34 pm
OhSnapple GOLD, Concord, New Hampshire
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This is really good - it something that i would read. Have you ever finished a novel???

on Apr. 25 2010 at 2:37 pm
ultrabookworm BRONZE, Equestria, Kentucky
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Definitely, Jean. This is the first time ever looked at your work, and you're really good. Post the first chapter!

JeanGrey GOLD said...
on Apr. 18 2010 at 3:48 am
JeanGrey GOLD, Mason City, Iowa
10 articles 0 photos 258 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I am so clever that sometimes I don't understand a single word of what I am saying."-Oscar Wilde

lol working on it :) thanks for the encouragement, it means alot to me, you are an awesome writer :)

on Apr. 18 2010 at 3:44 am
Ceneteros2804 PLATINUM, Griffith, Other
20 articles 0 photos 52 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Great spirits have always found violent opposition from mediocre minds.' Albert Einstein

'Why write about reality, we all know how that story ends' Me

This most certainly needs another part written.

on Apr. 12 2010 at 6:03 pm
all_boys_hate_me BRONZE, Miamisburg, Ohio
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This was really good T

_NoAir_ BRONZE said...
on Apr. 12 2010 at 5:58 pm
_NoAir_ BRONZE, Toronto, Other
4 articles 1 photo 463 comments

Favorite Quote:
There are as many ways to live as there are people in this world. Each one deserves a closer look.


–Golly (Harriet The Spy)

Oh thank you!

JeanGrey GOLD said...
on Apr. 12 2010 at 5:58 pm
JeanGrey GOLD, Mason City, Iowa
10 articles 0 photos 258 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I am so clever that sometimes I don't understand a single word of what I am saying."-Oscar Wilde

okay :) I will submit it soon :)

on Apr. 12 2010 at 5:55 pm
...PensiveGurl... PLATINUM, Aurora, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
You get ideas from daydreaming. You get ideas from being bored. You get ideas all the time. The only difference between writers and other people is we notice when we're doing it- Neil Gaiman.
Who are you to be who you are?-Le'Na Pernell

next part! next part! next part!

>.<


JeanGrey GOLD said...
on Apr. 12 2010 at 8:53 am
JeanGrey GOLD, Mason City, Iowa
10 articles 0 photos 258 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I am so clever that sometimes I don't understand a single word of what I am saying."-Oscar Wilde

lol okay ;) I will try. Thanks for the comments, they really motivate me to keep with this one story :)




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