The Faery Child- Part 1

February 15, 2010
By Celair_Phoenix SILVER, Hue, Other
Celair_Phoenix SILVER, Hue, Other
5 articles 3 photos 16 comments

Favorite Quote:
"All that glitters is not gold
Not all those who wanders are lost."

The wind hurried through the streets, picking up leaves as it went. It wandered into the woods where the little river gushed by. For the people living in that secluded town, the woods were simply were, like the flies buzzing around the honey jar. It would have been all for the better then, that none knew of the secret hidden within the leafy boughs.


“It's not fair!”

“Ellie, please, calm down. Look on the bright side, at least you don't have to share a room with your brother anymore-”

“I don't care! Why did you have to move us away from daddy? I want to go back home!”

“How many times do I have to tell you Ellie? Your father and I are divorced, and now this is our home.”

Ella sniffed, ignored the comforting arm her mom extended, spun on her heels and left the kitchen, careful to slam the door. She maneuvered through the boxes stacked haphazardly in the corridor and open the door.

Instead of the busy, bustling city that usually greeted her, all she saw was an never ending field of green and gold. Her mother had wanted to move back to her childhood home, and she had even managed to find a place near grandma and grandpa. She had smiled cheerfully then, packing the boxes.

“It's so beautiful in the country,” she said “I used to wake up to hear birds singing.”

Bird singing... right! thought Ella. She had woken to the sounds which resembled an overly confident rooster boasting to a hen. I hate it here. She thought. It was not the same as in the city, where the tall skyscrapers had sheltered the streets below. Here, the clouds and the grass stretched for miles around, giving the feeling of complete isolation.

She got up, and lost in her own miserable thoughts, wandered around the neighborhood. It was only when the branch of a pine brushed against her shoulder did she look up to see, that she had walked into the heart of the forest.

“Are you lost?”

She looked up, and gave a startled yelp. Sitting on the branch over head, his head cocked to one side like a sparrow, was an elf!

The author's comments:
I got the inspiration for this story from rereading the Lord of the Rings. Although this story doesn't Mary-goes-to-Middle-Earth theme, I wanted to explore the concept of the elves more. They seemed to be so aloof and stuffy in the Lord of the Rings and I wanted to give them a bit more character. Please comment, I would like to improve this story.

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This article has 7 comments.

on Mar. 27 2010 at 9:22 am
Celair_Phoenix SILVER, Hue, Other
5 articles 3 photos 16 comments

Favorite Quote:
"All that glitters is not gold
Not all those who wanders are lost."

part 2 is up if you would like to read it

on Mar. 21 2010 at 9:29 am
Oh my goodness. I was so upset when it ended and I couldn't read more. The beginning is a little choppy and could be cleaned up a bit, but other than that it's amazing. I see some serious potential. Please check some of my stuff out as well. Thanks.

on Mar. 20 2010 at 10:52 pm
Toru_no_Tenshi BRONZE, Seattle, Washington
1 article 0 photos 1 comment

Favorite Quote:
"Those who hate most fervently must have once loved deeply. Those who want to deny the world must have once embraced what they now set on fire." [Unknown]

Nice story, the plot is vaguely there but I think that's clever on your part, to intrigue readers' imagination. You always write better than me on these descriptive types...:D

on Feb. 24 2010 at 2:18 am
Celair_Phoenix SILVER, Hue, Other
5 articles 3 photos 16 comments

Favorite Quote:
"All that glitters is not gold
Not all those who wanders are lost."

Thanks! :) Yeah I know... I did this when I was drunk on caffeine and up late. (New Years) but I could see what you guys mean by 'watch for grammar issues.

on Feb. 23 2010 at 6:14 pm
PaperPlanes BRONZE, Henderson, Nevada
3 articles 0 photos 29 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Everything has beauty, but not everyone can see it." -Confuscious

Hey, nice story! I thought it was pretty good overall. Just make sure you watch out for some convention errors. I thought a few words were also missing. If there's anything you might want to consider doing next time, I think it would be nice if you described more in depth of how the character feels about moving away, other than the obvious fact she hates her new home. This way, it'll be easier for readers to develop a sort of connection with the main character. All in all, wonderful story. :)

on Feb. 23 2010 at 3:58 pm
love2love17 GOLD, Springfield, Missouri
13 articles 0 photos 26 comments

Favorite Quote:
You only live once, but if you do it right, once is enough. -Mae West

Very clever writing that captures the reader's attention! Watch for grammar, but overall very great!

on Feb. 23 2010 at 6:13 am
LihuaEmily SILVER, North Kingstown, Rhode Island
7 articles 3 photos 199 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It is said that there's no such thing as a free lunch. But the universe is the ultimate free lunch." -Alan Guth

I have become interested in thee characters ... and the writing is very solid. Great job.


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