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Paranoid-or Not?

Something is following me. Not a someone but something. I have felt it for several months now. Eyes following my every move. I feel them now. They are probably watching every word I am typing, but I don’t care. I need to tell someone. If I told anyone else they would think I was completely mental. I used to think it was a man, a weird stalker. Now I wish it was a man. I feel it. I swear I saw a shadow once. And I promise you it wasn’t a man’s shadow. It had wings. But they weren’t angel’s wings. They were black and purple with tattered holes. They were somehow very beautiful. They reminded me of something, I just don’t know what. Once I saw birds outside my window at midnight. Silhouetted against the full moon in the clear night sky. I told my mom, and she told me no birds flew so low at night and to go back to bed. I went but I never fell asleep that night. I watched the window. Once when staying home alone, I heard a loud thump from the back bedroom. I stiffened and decided to grab my cell and laptop. I never once walked into the hallway or any of the bedrooms. It took me days to finally get asleep in my own room again. I have gotten calls with mysterious words on them. A different language. One I don’t recognize. It’s deleted when I show others. I keep a journal of all my weird experiences. But one day I came home and it was gone. Later I found several pages of it pinned to my closet door, and some in my locker at school. Never had I dared to write about my experiences again- until the most recent one. I had a dream of a lady. A beautiful young lady carrying me in a blanket. I was an infant. She was muttering in some other language. The language in the messages. She looked down at me, tears in her eyes, and passed me to someone else. Then the dream ended. But not before I saw a little wing behind her back. A purple and black mysterious, beautiful wing. I decided it was a memory, but of what?

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JacelynThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jan. 9, 2012 at 1:36 pm:
I thought it was pretty good. Your thoughts are kind of jumbled but it was a pretty good story.
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ManekiNeko said...
Nov. 4, 2011 at 10:27 am:
Awkward. It doesn't flow very well. It feels forced.
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QuickDreamer said...
Dec. 31, 2010 at 7:38 am:
it was ok, but you jumped around from thing to thing without a description, i think you kinda tried a little to hard in trying to make it dark
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Ieneco said...
Dec. 11, 2010 at 10:19 pm:
this was amazing!!!!!!! it stressed me out so much. I really wish it were a novel! Keep up the great work!
Boota replied...
Apr. 29, 2012 at 1:55 pm :

i totally agree.


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S M Wells said...
Dec. 10, 2010 at 7:43 am:
I realy like this. And I don't think it needs any additional story with it. As it is it gives room for the reader to use there imagination. I like to think, sense in fiction all thoughts are free. That it means the caricture was the child of an anciant Goddess and was put hear for a specail purpous. It dosen't matter that there weren't real Goddissess. And yes. I probably speld that wrong.
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i_sold_my_soul_to_books said...
Dec. 9, 2010 at 10:50 pm:
I really liked this one! I like your style and I'm totally hooked on it. I was curious though, when you said you saw a shadow and then proceeded to describe the color of the wings. Is the shadow purple or was that a sort of typo. Anyways please right more!
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JakeDamon said...
Dec. 9, 2010 at 9:18 pm:
This is really good. I am officially creeped out. In a definite good way. Keep it up...
WriterWithWings replied...
Dec. 9, 2010 at 9:30 pm :
 Haha, as long as it's in a good way! Thank you! :)
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Underhill said...
Dec. 9, 2010 at 8:14 pm:
Wow . . . the whole first half was just creepy.  Awesome creepy.  Nothing about the piece is bad, but I lo-o-ove the whole beginning.  Chills!  Hee hee.
WriterWithWings replied...
Dec. 9, 2010 at 9:32 pm :
Hahaha :) Thank you!!!
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hrf1434 said...
Sept. 12, 2010 at 2:33 pm:

please write more. 


WriterWithWings replied...
Dec. 9, 2010 at 9:31 pm :
I'm tryin', truly I am :)
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SEAmir said...
Feb. 26, 2010 at 2:06 am:
You should change the title and change some things in the story. I like it, don't get me wrong, but it could use some work. Actually, to be honest, I love it. I'd love to read some more. And I have some ideas on what you should do with it. :) If you're interested, lemme know!
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MultiCultureWriter said...
Dec. 18, 2009 at 8:34 pm:
I really need some ideas! HELP!
tor10jax replied...
Jan. 13, 2010 at 10:19 am :
I looove what you wrote. There's a lot you could do with this and I could come up with some things to help. Do you want it to be a novel or a short story? Who is your target audience?
hrf1434 replied...
Sept. 12, 2010 at 2:35 pm :
mabey the winged lady is her real mother whom has to give her up for adoption and now the mother has come back to find her long lost child
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<3Tessa(: said...
Dec. 17, 2009 at 9:43 pm:
More!! I want more!! lol I love this!
MultiCultureWriter replied...
Dec. 25, 2009 at 2:48 pm :
Any ideas for this "more" that you want? I have no clue how to finish this!
J. Rae replied...
Aug. 21, 2010 at 11:14 am :

Hmmm... how about you write from 3rd  person in the next part. Maybe she accidentally takes a wrong turn from not paying attention on her way home, and finds herself at a dead end. Then the purpled winged lady walks towards her. Maybe she is just gaurding her from some evil that is coming very soon, and the main character is really her daughter. And the purpled winged lady is part of this species that is sort of half human, and turns into what she is now at a certain age. So the main cha... (more »)

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