The Vampire Detective

July 10, 2009
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He sat up at his desk and yawned. Midday. He had been working over seventy-two hours into this case. Murder. Murder most foul. It was always murder most foul these days. His name was Lucas Revenant. He was a Private Detective, hired by people in the Magical Community who wanted mysteries solved. He thought vampires got a bad rap, seeing as most vampires now drank blood that was donated to blood banks and that they only needed about two glasses a day. He smiled a breakthrough. He had found what he had wanted.

“Jonathan Lycaeon” he repeated the word on the page and found himself with the final piece he needed. He had no accent, he had lived in so many places for so many years that his voice had turned in a global accent. One that anyone could understand. The door opened and a girl stepped in. She was tall and thin. With blue eyes and black hair. She wore a rain coat with a hood. He stood he wore a black suit and tie with a white shirt. He had emerald green eyes and black hair with pale skin and wore black Fedora hat with a pinched front.

“Lucas Revenant?” she asked. He casually nodded. “My name is Melody Piper and I’m here to ask you for a favour.

“A favour, hmm…Well, no since I’m presently employed on a case” he replied.

“Tsch, I’m not asking…I am ordering” she growled.

“I’m not intimidated…surprisingly” he sarcastically muttered.

“Ah, Detective” muttered a small man as he entered. Korean, definitely Korean. He had a small beard and no hair. He wore a suit with no tie and brandished a samurai sword.

“Who the hell are you!” barked the girl.

“I am Yu” he answered.

“You are me?”

“No I am Mi” shouted a tall man with a machine gun. Before he could fire Detective Revenant grabbed her arm and jumped out the floor to ceiling window. He pulled a device out with his left hand as he held her with his right. He pressed a button and his office exploded.

“Joy” he muttered sarcastically as they landed.

“Detective” welcomed Jonathon Lycaeon as they landed. He was a medium sized man of medium build. He tapped his silver walking cane and guards grabbed the detective and the girl, bound them and locked them in the car’s boot, which had an air supplying machine.

“Oh great” Melody muttered. “Kidnapped.”

“Actually this is great” the detective laughed.

“How so?” Melody asked.

“Because now I can do this” he said and pulled a gun from his sleeve. He had somehow cut his bindings and that look he had was not one of peaceful escape…

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SilverDragon said...
Feb. 7, 2011 at 4:06 pm
Great story, but I think that you could combine some of the shorter sentences with commas. I look forward to seeing more!
Playsportmarine replied...
Oct. 7, 2011 at 1:23 pm
Good job! :D
elfen_girl said...
Oct. 20, 2010 at 1:09 pm

lol totally loved it cant waite to read more

(loved the yu mi thing.)

Mahlyenki_Dyavol said...
Sept. 27, 2010 at 1:10 pm
Very nice, Centerous! Would you mind checking over some of my work, with your writer genious?
Robsessed said...
Jul. 2, 2010 at 12:43 am
not bad, is there more to come? it kind of reminds me of the show Moonlight that was unfortunately canceled after one season.
MusicIsLife013 said...
May 19, 2010 at 3:30 pm
soo good! Check out some of my work, please :)
SageSin said...
May 11, 2010 at 9:34 am
prisingly interesting though i kinda wish there was more vampire so this lady she have an influence on this vamp? lol its alot of fun to read just through something in there that hasent been used pwease as for your descriptions they are good but idk if they are in the right places LOVE THE CREATIVITY ///,..,^ FANG SAYS: Detectives are scarrryyyy
MetalChickRock said...
May 2, 2010 at 8:44 pm
This was awesome! I loved it from start to end. Good write!
CharlotteC said...
Apr. 14, 2010 at 12:06 pm
Pasky said...
Jan. 27, 2010 at 6:02 pm
Cool as my ninja!
Ceneteros2804 replied...
Jan. 27, 2010 at 6:07 pm
Thanks Pasky!
brand*new*eyes said...
Jan. 16, 2010 at 11:33 am
AnnonymousFate said...
Jan. 7, 2010 at 6:10 pm
Hahaha I love the Yu and Mi part. I couldn't stop laughing. This is really good though. Please check out some of my stuff too. Particularly "Just a Guy" thanks!
MelodyofAthena said...
Oct. 28, 2009 at 2:14 am
OK Ceneteros, seriously this rocked! I have read all the parts and I cannot wait for the next one! Vampires forever!!!!
Ceneteros2804 replied...
Oct. 28, 2009 at 2:26 am
Thanks Mel! I received your oher comment too! It is a possibility.
Bones replied...
Jan. 7, 2010 at 1:47 pm
nice story my friend
Ceneteros2804 replied...
Jan. 7, 2010 at 6:05 pm
Thanks Bones, the commets i get really make my day.
Lector S. said...
Sept. 21, 2009 at 6:10 pm
So good!!!!! PLEASE PLEASE write more about this story, its off to a great start!
Ceneteros2804 replied...
Sept. 22, 2009 at 3:25 am
Thanks Lector, I am submitting part two tonight and part three soon after. I was waiting for someone to show some intrest first though.
Lector S. replied...
Sept. 22, 2009 at 5:05 pm
Can't wait to read them!
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