The Vampire Detective

July 10, 2009
By Ceneteros2804 PLATINUM, Griffith, Other
Ceneteros2804 PLATINUM, Griffith, Other
20 articles 0 photos 52 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Great spirits have always found violent opposition from mediocre minds.' Albert Einstein

'Why write about reality, we all know how that story ends' Me


He sat up at his desk and yawned. Midday. He had been working over seventy-two hours into this case. Murder. Murder most foul. It was always murder most foul these days. His name was Lucas Revenant. He was a Private Detective, hired by people in the Magical Community who wanted mysteries solved. He thought vampires got a bad rap, seeing as most vampires now drank blood that was donated to blood banks and that they only needed about two glasses a day. He smiled a breakthrough. He had found what he had wanted.

“Jonathan Lycaeon” he repeated the word on the page and found himself with the final piece he needed. He had no accent, he had lived in so many places for so many years that his voice had turned in a global accent. One that anyone could understand. The door opened and a girl stepped in. She was tall and thin. With blue eyes and black hair. She wore a rain coat with a hood. He stood he wore a black suit and tie with a white shirt. He had emerald green eyes and black hair with pale skin and wore black Fedora hat with a pinched front.

“Lucas Revenant?” she asked. He casually nodded. “My name is Melody Piper and I’m here to ask you for a favour.

“A favour, hmm…Well, no since I’m presently employed on a case” he replied.

“Tsch, I’m not asking…I am ordering” she growled.

“I’m not intimidated…surprisingly” he sarcastically muttered.

“Ah, Detective” muttered a small man as he entered. Korean, definitely Korean. He had a small beard and no hair. He wore a suit with no tie and brandished a samurai sword.

“Who the hell are you!” barked the girl.

“I am Yu” he answered.

“You are me?”

“No I am Mi” shouted a tall man with a machine gun. Before he could fire Detective Revenant grabbed her arm and jumped out the floor to ceiling window. He pulled a device out with his left hand as he held her with his right. He pressed a button and his office exploded.

“Joy” he muttered sarcastically as they landed.

“Detective” welcomed Jonathon Lycaeon as they landed. He was a medium sized man of medium build. He tapped his silver walking cane and guards grabbed the detective and the girl, bound them and locked them in the car’s boot, which had an air supplying machine.

“Oh great” Melody muttered. “Kidnapped.”

“Actually this is great” the detective laughed.

“How so?” Melody asked.

“Because now I can do this” he said and pulled a gun from his sleeve. He had somehow cut his bindings and that look he had was not one of peaceful escape…

The author's comments:
This was written as a salute to vampire detectives everywhere...Jokes aside you should read my other work Shimazu!

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on Oct. 7 2011 at 1:23 pm
Good job! :D

on Feb. 7 2011 at 4:06 pm
SilverDragon GOLD, Needham, Massachusetts
12 articles 0 photos 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Pick one, take two" by A. Mesnik

Great story, but I think that you could combine some of the shorter sentences with commas. I look forward to seeing more!

on Oct. 20 2010 at 1:09 pm
elfen_girl BRONZE, Wilmslow, Other
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Favorite Quote:
K.I.S.S - Keep it simple stupid

lol totally loved it cant waite to read more

(loved the yu mi thing.)


on Sep. 27 2010 at 1:10 pm
SilentSerenity BRONZE, Brookfield, Ohio
3 articles 1 photo 19 comments

Favorite Quote:
"A word to the wise isn't nessesary, its the stupid ones that need the advice."
Bill Cosby

Very nice, Centerous! Would you mind checking over some of my work, with your writer genious?

on Jul. 2 2010 at 12:43 am
Robsessed PLATINUM, McKinney, Texas
36 articles 14 photos 214 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I may be changed by what happens to me, but I refuse to be reduced by it." - Maya Angelou

"Did you know 'I told you so' has a brother, Jacob?" she asked cutting me off. "His name is 'Shut the hell up.'" - Bella Swan, Breaking Dawn

not bad, is there more to come? it kind of reminds me of the show Moonlight that was unfortunately canceled after one season.

on May. 19 2010 at 3:30 pm
MusicIsLife013 SILVER, New York, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"Light, like the flutter of wings, feel your hollow voice rushing into me
As you're longing to sing" -AFI

"Here we go again, I kinda wanna be more than friends, so take it easy on me I'm afraid you're never satisfied." -Neon Trees

soo good! Check out some of my work, please :)

on May. 11 2010 at 5:00 pm
Ceneteros2804 PLATINUM, Griffith, Other
20 articles 0 photos 52 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Great spirits have always found violent opposition from mediocre minds.' Albert Einstein

'Why write about reality, we all know how that story ends' Me

Part Seven is on the site. As well as my new story 'Wraith.'

SageSin GOLD said...
on May. 11 2010 at 9:34 am
SageSin GOLD, Oaklawn, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
"Accept everything about yourself. I mean everything. You are you, and that is the beginning and the end; No apologies, no regrets."

prisingly interesting though i kinda wish there was more vampire so this lady she have an influence on this vamp? lol its alot of fun to read just through something in there that hasent been used pwease as for your descriptions they are good but idk if they are in the right places LOVE THE CREATIVITY ///,..,^ FANG SAYS: Detectives are scarrryyyy

-Missy- BRONZE said...
on May. 2 2010 at 8:44 pm
-Missy- BRONZE, Ahhh, South Dakota
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This was awesome! I loved it from start to end. Good write!

on Apr. 14 2010 at 12:06 pm
--LoveHappens--, Fairfield, Connecticut
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Favorite Quote:
"A friend is someone who knows you, but loves you anyway"

GREAT START VERY EXCITING

JeanGrey GOLD said...
on Apr. 5 2010 at 8:06 am
JeanGrey GOLD, Mason City, Iowa
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Favorite Quote:
"I am so clever that sometimes I don't understand a single word of what I am saying."-Oscar Wilde

hahahahahhahahah the Yu Mi part was so funny....I like the cavalier attitude of Lucas. Good stuff :) I shall read on!

on Jan. 27 2010 at 6:07 pm
Ceneteros2804 PLATINUM, Griffith, Other
20 articles 0 photos 52 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Great spirits have always found violent opposition from mediocre minds.' Albert Einstein

'Why write about reality, we all know how that story ends' Me

Thanks Pasky!

Pasky SILVER said...
on Jan. 27 2010 at 6:02 pm
Pasky SILVER, Kerang, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"Let he that would move the world, first move himself" Socrates
"Tell me a truth and I'll listen, tell me a fact and I'll learn, but tell me a story and it will live in my heart forever." Indian Proverb

Cool as my ninja!

on Jan. 16 2010 at 11:33 am
brand*new*eyes SILVER, Saint Louis, Missouri
6 articles 0 photos 35 comments

Favorite Quote:
Misguided ghosts
Traveling endlessly
The ones we trusted the most
Pushed us far away
(paramore)

sweetoes!!!!

on Jan. 11 2010 at 10:08 pm
Ceneteros2804 PLATINUM, Griffith, Other
20 articles 0 photos 52 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Great spirits have always found violent opposition from mediocre minds.' Albert Einstein

'Why write about reality, we all know how that story ends' Me

Just to tell you...Part Six has arrived!

on Jan. 7 2010 at 6:10 pm
Hahaha I love the Yu and Mi part. I couldn't stop laughing. This is really good though. Please check out some of my stuff too. Particularly "Just a Guy" thanks!

on Jan. 7 2010 at 6:05 pm
Ceneteros2804 PLATINUM, Griffith, Other
20 articles 0 photos 52 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Great spirits have always found violent opposition from mediocre minds.' Albert Einstein

'Why write about reality, we all know how that story ends' Me

Thanks Bones, the commets i get really make my day.

Bones said...
on Jan. 7 2010 at 1:47 pm
nice story my friend

on Jan. 3 2010 at 4:48 pm
brand*new*eyes SILVER, Saint Louis, Missouri
6 articles 0 photos 35 comments

Favorite Quote:
Misguided ghosts
Traveling endlessly
The ones we trusted the most
Pushed us far away
(paramore)

woow didnt see that one coming, gueess ill have to read part two, huh?

mari14 SILVER said...
on Dec. 16 2009 at 7:21 pm
mari14 SILVER, MI, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
"Love or oxygen, you need both to live and pump your heart." -By Mari

yeah vampires are everywhere but I like them so its cool. I think you have a lot of talent.




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