Deep Waters

April 6, 2009
By tgir85 GOLD, Katy, Texas
tgir85 GOLD, Katy, Texas
13 articles 0 photos 81 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I only put you through that test to see if you would keep the faith or give up..."


The intensity of his ocean blue eyes shocked me...i couldnt move or think...let alone breathe.I felt the word rush out of my mouth...too fast,too quickly to even believe that i was actually saying it..."Forever"


The author's comments:
what inspired me to write this was simply my imagination... i just came up with this out of the top of my head...please comment when you read so i can know if its any good and tell me what you like about it the most and if i should continue writing it. THANKS!!!

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tgir85 GOLD said...
on Oct. 21 2009 at 3:59 pm
tgir85 GOLD, Katy, Texas
13 articles 0 photos 81 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I only put you through that test to see if you would keep the faith or give up..."

thanks i will make the intro better^^ kudos!

on Oct. 14 2009 at 11:26 pm
Veritytrue SILVER, LaVista, Nebraska
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Great start! I can totally see this as an intro to a story! I would definately expand on this if I were you. Good job!

TigerLynn GOLD said...
on Oct. 13 2009 at 6:52 pm
TigerLynn GOLD, Maysville, Kentucky
10 articles 0 photos 111 comments

Favorite Quote:
"She walks in beauty,
Like the night of cloudless climes and starry skies;
And all that's best of dark and bright
Meet in her aspect and her eyes."
--Byron

I like it, but obviously it would be better if it was longer. But it is already pretty good and you should definetly put some thought into it and then continue writing! ME LIKEEY

on Jul. 6 2009 at 6:50 pm
Lifesbutadream BRONZE, Hesperia, California
4 articles 2 photos 22 comments

Favorite Quote:
Change is just a new begining

You know what, Just put it on here....id love to read it(=

tgir85 GOLD said...
on Jun. 30 2009 at 11:07 pm
tgir85 GOLD, Katy, Texas
13 articles 0 photos 81 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I only put you through that test to see if you would keep the faith or give up..."

thank you ! thank you ! for responding! i have an even better romance short story though if u want to hear that1....itll take e awhile to put it on here though..but its really good

on Jun. 29 2009 at 6:30 am
Lifesbutadream BRONZE, Hesperia, California
4 articles 2 photos 22 comments

Favorite Quote:
Change is just a new begining

Honestly, im a sucker for the romance stories. i think this sounds good...keep going at it, i want to see what happens next. go ahead keep writing it.

tgir85 GOLD said...
on Jun. 6 2009 at 10:14 pm
tgir85 GOLD, Katy, Texas
13 articles 0 photos 81 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I only put you through that test to see if you would keep the faith or give up..."

PLEASE COMMENT

tgir85 GOLD said...
on May. 11 2009 at 9:32 pm
tgir85 GOLD, Katy, Texas
13 articles 0 photos 81 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I only put you through that test to see if you would keep the faith or give up..."

please comment when u read this!!!! i realize its short and only the start of the story but i strongly appreciate comments


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