Deep Waters

April 6, 2009
The intensity of his ocean blue eyes shocked me...i couldnt move or think...let alone breathe.I felt the word rush out of my mouth...too fast,too quickly to even believe that i was actually saying it..."Forever"

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Veritytrue said...
Oct. 14, 2009 at 11:26 pm
Great start! I can totally see this as an intro to a story! I would definately expand on this if I were you. Good job!
tgir85 replied...
Oct. 21, 2009 at 3:59 pm
thanks i will make the intro better^^ kudos!
TigerLynn said...
Oct. 13, 2009 at 6:52 pm
I like it, but obviously it would be better if it was longer. But it is already pretty good and you should definetly put some thought into it and then continue writing! ME LIKEEY
writtendesires said...
Jul. 6, 2009 at 6:50 pm
You know what, Just put it on love to read it(=
tgir85 said...
Jun. 30, 2009 at 11:07 pm
thank you ! thank you ! for responding! i have an even better romance short story though if u want to hear that1....itll take e awhile to put it on here though..but its really good
lizbeth L. said...
Jun. 29, 2009 at 6:30 am
Honestly, im a sucker for the romance stories. i think this sounds good...keep going at it, i want to see what happens next. go ahead keep writing it.
tgir85 said...
Jun. 6, 2009 at 10:14 pm
tgir85 said...
May 11, 2009 at 9:32 pm
please comment when u read this!!!! i realize its short and only the start of the story but i strongly appreciate comments
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