Love and Happiness

April 1, 2009
By mcf108 BRONZE, Garland, Texas
mcf108 BRONZE, Garland, Texas
3 articles 2 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
Just Keep swimming

“Hey baby”
“Hey you” We said greeting each other when I got in to my boyfriend Aden’s car.
Aden is the love of my life. I love every thing about him, his long black hair, his beautiful blue eyes. He’s the most perfect boyfriend ever. But he did have his downers like he always did drugs, and stole stuff. I knew I was making a bad choice by being with him it was just that he was so sweet, and he always knew how to keep me smiling.
We were on are way to a biggest party of the year. It was just two week till graduation. I was excited because all I wanted to do was spend the rest of my life with him.
When we finally got to the party. We got split up I stayed with me friends Kayle and Halye they were twins they both had long black hair but Kayle had green eyes and Halye had blue eyes. That was how I told them apart. I was worried the whole party because I couldn’t find Aden.I was supposed to drive him home. When the party was over I finally found Aden sleeping in the passenger’s seat of his car.

“Huh! Where we at?” Aden asked when I opened the door. I put the keys the agnation, and turned the keys. After ten minutes Aden fell back asleep. I started to fall asleep while I was driving. Then I herd a car honk at me. I swerved over as I screamed. Then we fell off over the bridge in to the Mississippi river. When I woke up there was a bright white light.

“What? where am I?” I said in a confused tone. I looked around for Aden and he was no where to be found. “Where’s Aden” I said in a scared tone.

“He’s in an other place now” a squeaky voice said out of no where.

“What? Who said that?” I yelled out.

“Me, hi I’m Oliver, your guardian angel.” He was small, almost like a new born baby he had big brown eyes and a halo on the top of his head with a white dress. And short blond hair.

“Hey?” I said confused. “What do you mean by guardian angel?” I asked

“Well you died in a car wreck last night with Aden.” Oliver answered back.

“Did Aden dye to” I asked curiously.


“Then why isn’t he here?”

“Well we sent his to the under world.”

“You mean hell?”


“Ooo okay”

But we haven’t figured out what to do with you because, for the most part you were good, but you still went out with Aden even after you knew he did a lot of bad thing in his life time” Oliver explained to me.

“Ooo,” I said kinda disappointed in myself.

“So where gonna let you decide where you go. Hell or Heavan?”

“So in other word I have to choose between love and happiness?”

“Well when you put it that way yes”

“Okay well, can you give me a little while to think about this?”

“Sure” Oliver said as he left me.

I went over the pro’s and con’s of both places. Heaven had lots of happiness but no Aden. Hell Aden, but not much happiness. But I was still stuck even after I went over the pros and cons of the two places. I knew I was lost with out Aden in my life and I wanted to spend the rest of my life with him but I still needed happiness to. But Aden’s love was all I need to be happy. After a while I made my decision. Then I just sat there and waited for Oliver

So did you make your decision, or do you need more time to think about it?” Oliver said when he walked in to the room.

“Yeah I made my decision”

“Okay lets here it” Oliver said with a smile.

“I choose…… to be with Aden”

“So you choose Hell?”

“Yes….. Yes I did.”

“Okay well if that’s the way you want it here you go.”

Then Oliver pulled a lever and I drooped down to the under world. When I got there Aden was right there to greet me. I was all ready happy just to see him standing there. I had nothing to say I was just happy to be with him again.

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This article has 10 comments.

on Jan. 7 2012 at 12:22 pm
NKsunshine BRONZE, Palatine, Illinois
1 article 0 photos 77 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I don't need easy, I just need possible!" ~Bethany Hamilton

The story was rushed and the concept was flat. I think if you add details this story would have been more engaging. The plot has potential--keep writing (:

on May. 1 2011 at 7:12 am
Your dialogue was rushed, and so was the rest of the story. Try putting in some imagery, like how the air tasted at the party, or how she heard someone screaming as they fell. It is a good story, but I, personally, hate the ending. Sacrificing an eternity of happiness for something that sounds like just another teenage crush. Other than those, it was just flat. Work on it, a lot. You still have potential, just with the idea to think this up, but it needs a lot of work. :) Keep writing!

on Sep. 23 2010 at 4:49 pm
yogagurl BRONZE, Marathon, Florida
2 articles 0 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
"A true friend is somene who knows the song in your heart and can sing it back to you when you have forgotten the words."

kinda confusing and also like she didnt even care that she and bf were dead becasue of her. kinda weird but good story

cookieNF said...
on Aug. 31 2010 at 5:46 am
story was nice... but no good vocabulary and there were some other errors too....

on Jun. 5 2010 at 6:37 am
BeYOUtiful_13 BRONZE, Tinley Park, Illinois
4 articles 1 photo 98 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Imperfection is beauty, madness is genius and it's better to be absolutely ridiculous than absolutely boring.”
~Marilyn Monroe

It wasn't really confusing. I thought it made sense.thats me though. Slso nice decision. not! but for her lover than probably right choice.

on May. 14 2010 at 7:15 pm
allisonl97 BRONZE, =), Wisconsin
2 articles 0 photos 47 comments

Favorite Quote:
I dont really have a fav quote

I dont think that the character in the story made the right choice...sure she wanted to be with her boyfriend...but he sounded like a pretty bad person...and if it really was hell...the devil wouldnt let you see someone like that

on Apr. 3 2010 at 8:34 pm
MsRocker SILVER, Blahblahblah, Other
5 articles 2 photos 22 comments

Favorite Quote:
be strong now because things will get better it might be stormy now but it cant rain forver

it was kinda confusing but it was good. but why would she choose hell over heaven! if youre in heaven then ur gunna be happy! lmao i wouldnt pick an evil boyfriend over God, but thats just my pick =D

on Feb. 15 2010 at 9:32 am
mandymac BRONZE, Naples, Florida
2 articles 2 photos 15 comments

Favorite Quote:
Do what you can, with what you have, where you are.

Good story, but work on your sentence structure. It makes the reading much more pleasurable when it flows.

mcf108 BRONZE said...
on Jan. 3 2010 at 7:11 pm
mcf108 BRONZE, Garland, Texas
3 articles 2 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
Just Keep swimming

thanks and i know there's probably a lot of errors i didn't check it all that much but thanks

lexi<3 GOLD said...
on Oct. 28 2009 at 6:01 pm
lexi<3 GOLD, Spaulding, South Dakota
15 articles 7 photos 43 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life isn't about waiting for the storm to pass, it's about learning to dance in the rain.

i like this entry a lot, but it is a bit blunt and it has a lot of spelling errors. i absolutely loveeee the story line though! its fab. besides the grammatical issues, i think this is amazing and you should always keep writing!


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