It is unfair. She longs to be free of what constrains her, to taste the forbidden fruit. He is the serpent, and she is curious. Unknowingly he tempts her, proffering the apple she so longs to taste. But she can’t. She cannot shatter the Eden she lives in, for it all that she knows. Taking the fruit he offers, savoring it, will cast her into a world without shelter and love. And unlike Eve, there will be no Adam to guide her.
Betrayal
TheBlackRoseNice narration, I like the way you write the story.
htrae22i like it i loved how you used historical references to give alot of people something to connecct to
wow...i like it. its just like the bible!
bloglettei think that the forbidden fruit thing is a little cliche you should try rewording it to make it your own
uthinkyourcoolerthanme23
Wow, this absolutely fantastic! Probably one of the best things I've read on this site. Five stars! Great work.
WOW i loved this!! you are so talented to get your idea, and emotion, and mood all across in so few words!! bravo!! :D
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