Terrible Lovely

December 26, 2012
By Apollo77 PLATINUM, Brunswick, Ohio
Apollo77 PLATINUM, Brunswick, Ohio
20 articles 0 photos 103 comments

Favorite Quote:
"All you have to do is write one true sentence. Write the truest sentence that you know.”
"Madame, all stories, if continued far enough, end in death, and he is no true-story teller who would keep that from you."
-Ernest Hemingway


I know that you always use to love the rain. I don't remember much about you, And i don't even remember this bit much, but when the sky gets grey and water pours from the clouds, i can't help but see your face. And i hear your voice whispering my name.

It is raining today. A good hurricane type storm. And i didn't want to forget and don't know how long the rain will keep up so i decided to write it down. But i wanted to say that I'm sorry.

Remember when we were kids. I only had one friend. I know that i only had one friend and there were only thirty kids in our class anyway. And i remember that you were very popular. You knew everyone but me and everyone including you ignored me when i sat by myself and played by myself.

Remember in high school. When i took all of the AP classes and you took AP classes, but we were never in them together. We didn't even know each other, really. But in the hallway between periods we always passed each other and i would look and see that you where never looking.

Then i was so excited to leave that awful school and go to Boston, because i was smart and i was active and i got into a good school far away from home. And then remember when i saw you moving into your dorm and i dropped my book and ran until i got to my dorm. And then the same thing happened the next day except that you followed me.

Remember how often you followed me back to my dorm until i finally agreed to talk to you and i pretended to not remember you.

It seems like a sick joke now.

Remember Christmas at your parents' Apartment and i remembered that i was smart but you were so much smarter for going to Boston. And remember the little box and the big ring and remember that i said no and you pretended not to care.

I don't remember what happened next except that i was crying and it was raining a big hurricane type storm like tonight. i know that you were driving and that you screamed and then i don't remember anything except that it was sunny when the doctor told me you died.

I don't remember what i ate for breakfast two hours ago, and i can't remember why i moved back to Ohio after Christmas all those years ago. But I've never forgotten for a second to be so awfully sad.

When it rains i see you when we where in grade school, smart and popular and beautiful. And when you were sixteen and smarter and cooler and more beautiful. And then when you were mine, and perfect. And I'm sorry that I can't remember why I love you or the places in between. I'm sorry that every other day of my life I only know that there is a reason be sad, both terrible and so beautiful. My terrible lovely.



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on Feb. 6 2013 at 11:20 pm
WhenItRains21 GOLD, Magnolia, Texas
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Wow. Beautiful. I'm seriously nearly in tears. This is gorgeous. The emotion is shines through perfectly. By about the halfway point, I was so into the story I didn't even notice the "i' anymore.  I especially love the end. Those last three words. Wonderful job.

on Jan. 26 2013 at 11:27 am
FizzyL25 SILVER, Lasne, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Writint is the only thing that, when I do it, I don't feel like I should be doing something else.

I loved it, the emotions come through great.  It's a great read! Like it's already been said, the i's kind of bothered me, but that's all.

on Jan. 15 2013 at 9:26 am
E.J.Mathews GOLD, International Falls, Minnesota
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Wow! That was amazing. It was beautiful, sad, and perfect! You did an outstanding job!

on Jan. 14 2013 at 3:58 pm
Apollo77 PLATINUM, Brunswick, Ohio
20 articles 0 photos 103 comments

Favorite Quote:
"All you have to do is write one true sentence. Write the truest sentence that you know.”
"Madame, all stories, if continued far enough, end in death, and he is no true-story teller who would keep that from you."
-Ernest Hemingway

thanks so much! I didn't realize that paragraph was muddy, but now you mention it I know what you mean, oops!

on Jan. 13 2013 at 2:17 pm
marchbutterfly GOLD, Orange, New Jersey
18 articles 0 photos 12 comments

Favorite Quote:
"When you play God, you get screwed."

This was very very well written filled with lots of emotion. It was easy to empathize with the narrator. I also thought the whole bitter sweet tone was fitting. The only criticism I have is that there were a couple of grammatical errors but not anything too bad. 

on Jan. 12 2013 at 4:53 pm
KenyaLove41 GOLD, Dallas, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"Day, n. A period of twenty-four hours, mostly misspent." ~Ambrose Bierce
"Nothing is Impossible, the word itself says 'I'm Possible!'" ~ Audrey Hepburn
"Good writing is only bad writing revised"~ Unknown

I loved the overall emotion of the peice and the way you compare everything to the rain. I suggest that you maybe add a little bit more back ground information and expand the story more but other than that every thing was fine.(:

on Jan. 12 2013 at 8:11 am
BeccyFxx BRONZE, Harrogate, Other
2 articles 2 photos 21 comments
Your writing is so powerful and emotional. I thought it was great but got a little bit confuzed in the third last paragraph. I loved the way it was written. Keep writing!! :)

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on Jan. 10 2013 at 6:25 pm
Honour SILVER, New London, Connecticut
9 articles 0 photos 181 comments

Favorite Quote:
Greater love has no man than this, that a man lay down his life for his friends. ~John 15:13

"Give me liberty or give me death!" ~Patrick Henry

Be brave and steadfast; have no fear or dread of them, for it is the Lord, your God, who marches with you; he will never fail you or forsake you. ~ Deuteronomy 31:6

"I prefer dangerous freedom over peaceful slavery" ~ Thomas Jefferson

Good job, Guardian covered what I noticed the lower case 'i's.  But other than that good job!!!

on Jan. 10 2013 at 6:23 pm
Claudia.VII BRONZE, N/A, California
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Favorite Quote:
\"Let them eat cake.\" -Marie Antoinette.
\"Genius is born-- not paid.\" -Oscar Wilde.
\"Press the button, we\'ll do the rest.\" -George Eastman
\"If you\'re going through hell, keep on going.\" - Winston Churchill

The piece is brief, but it gets to the point, and I like that. The plot gets somewhat muddled in the middle due to the narrator's sort of choppy sentences, but that could just be this story's charm. Anyways, great job and keep up the good work. :)

on Jan. 9 2013 at 5:52 pm
Apollo77 PLATINUM, Brunswick, Ohio
20 articles 0 photos 103 comments

Favorite Quote:
"All you have to do is write one true sentence. Write the truest sentence that you know.”
"Madame, all stories, if continued far enough, end in death, and he is no true-story teller who would keep that from you."
-Ernest Hemingway

Thank you, glad you like it!

on Jan. 9 2013 at 5:51 pm
Apollo77 PLATINUM, Brunswick, Ohio
20 articles 0 photos 103 comments

Favorite Quote:
"All you have to do is write one true sentence. Write the truest sentence that you know.”
"Madame, all stories, if continued far enough, end in death, and he is no true-story teller who would keep that from you."
-Ernest Hemingway

thanks a lot!

on Jan. 9 2013 at 5:50 pm
Apollo77 PLATINUM, Brunswick, Ohio
20 articles 0 photos 103 comments

Favorite Quote:
"All you have to do is write one true sentence. Write the truest sentence that you know.”
"Madame, all stories, if continued far enough, end in death, and he is no true-story teller who would keep that from you."
-Ernest Hemingway

I know about the "i"s, the autamatic caps on my computer got turned off...probably should have gone back and checked that! Thanks alot though!

on Jan. 9 2013 at 1:34 pm
GuardianoftheStars GOLD, Shongaloo, Louisiana
17 articles 0 photos 495 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Let's tell young people the best books are yet to be written; the best painting, the best government, the best of everything is yet to be done by them."
-John Erslcine

This was good! The only complaint I have is the lower case 'i's but other than that it was a good read!!

on Jan. 9 2013 at 10:19 am
In_Love_with_Writing GOLD, Easton, Pennsylvania
12 articles 0 photos 389 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I can do all things through Christ who strengthens me." Phillipians 4:13

Very gorgeous! It was very sweet :)

on Jan. 8 2013 at 7:11 pm
Stella_Val_Illicia GOLD, Salt Lake City, Utah
13 articles 0 photos 248 comments

Favorite Quote:
"In the beginning, the universe was created. This has made a lot of people angry and been widely regarded as a bad idea."
--Douglas Adams

This really captures wonderful emotion! I only would say to capitalize your "i"s in the piece so that it sounds more authentic, but your writing is beautiful!


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