Falling in love

October 28, 2012
By amelia.estaire SILVER, Osceola, Indiana
amelia.estaire SILVER, Osceola, Indiana
7 articles 0 photos 30 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I take real people and put them in extraordinary situations." - Robert Cormier


Falling in love.
How inaccurate that statement is. For me, it’s more like drowning in love, and if I am truthfully “falling in love” I hope he has enough strength to catch me. How is it my fault that I have fallen in love involuntarily? Maybe it’s because of his dark, curly hair, or the way he smirks slightly more to the left, showing off his dimples. His emerald green eyes are defiantly a factor as to why I am so attracted to him. But most of all, he sees through my thick façade of happiness. This thick veil of fake joy constantly seems to choke me, However, I convinced myself with this illusion, and I tried to ignore my sadness that is gnawing away inside me.
When I met him, he simply asked me my name. I answered
“Jenna,.” as he replied.
“Peter.” I remember how he looked right through my illusion. He told me that I was beautiful. Without explaining his strange comment, he turned and walked away from me. Leaving my heart racing and my low self-esteem slithering up, never have I been called beautiful.

The next day he approached me again, handing me a rose. It’s petals as red as blood, and its thorns pricked my hand as I tightened my grip around it.
“A rose is considered one of the most beautiful flowers, yet its thorns prevent anything getting too close.” He whispered, his voice husky, but as smooth as butter. I looked down at the rose, and somehow, it made me smile.
It was the tiniest of smirks. My lips barley moved, yet it was real. I looked up to thank him, but he disappeared.

For the third day, he progressed towards me, his hand outstretched to mine, I expected something to be in his sturdy hands, yet there was nothing.

“Would you like to go with me?” He asked. The statement could mean anything. I once thought that no one could actually love someone like me, so I trained myself to not love others. The mere thought of love made my stomach churn, because I knew that love were only in stories, it was meant for someone else to have. My instincts told me to say no, and accept my reality, which had no room for him.
Yet my fantasy did,
my fantasy of being loved.
Making my decision, I firmly placed my hand in his.
Fully knowing, that I was falling.


The author's comments:
I hope people will realize that everyone is lovable, and someone out there loves you or will love you.

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on Nov. 12 2012 at 5:00 pm
amelia.estaire SILVER, Osceola, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
"I take real people and put them in extraordinary situations." - Robert Cormier

Thank you! :)

on Nov. 12 2012 at 10:01 am
@ReasonsForJoy GOLD, Hingham, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
"Hate? Hate is easy. But love... Love is hard."

I really liked your story it had a different writing style like it could have been a poem. Thank you for commenting on my story I'm an awful speller too.

on Nov. 8 2012 at 6:27 pm
amelia.estaire SILVER, Osceola, Indiana
7 articles 0 photos 30 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I take real people and put them in extraordinary situations." - Robert Cormier

Thank you, and thanks for the constructive criticism :)

on Nov. 8 2012 at 8:01 am
Lady_Teribithea GOLD, LaPorte, Colorado
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This was pretty good, but yeah, the spelling and little bit of cliche could use some work. I liked it a lot though.

on Nov. 7 2012 at 10:18 pm
amelia.estaire SILVER, Osceola, Indiana
7 articles 0 photos 30 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I take real people and put them in extraordinary situations." - Robert Cormier

Thanks!...Ya, i am terrible at spelling. :)

CammyS SILVER said...
on Nov. 7 2012 at 4:52 pm
CammyS SILVER, Papillion, Nebraska
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Favorite Quote:
No passion in the world is equal to the passion to alter someone else's draft.
H. G. Wells
Don't say the old lady screamed. Bring her on and let her scream.
Mark Twain

There are a couple spelling errors ("defiantly" is one of them. I bet you meant "definetly" right? Also, you said "barley" (a grain) instead of barely, which I'm guessing is what you meant) but other than that this was a really good piece. I liked how she resisted loving him, but not in a cliche, overused way. Great work! 

on Nov. 5 2012 at 7:14 pm
amelia.estaire SILVER, Osceola, Indiana
7 articles 0 photos 30 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I take real people and put them in extraordinary situations." - Robert Cormier

Well, thanks! ya, I tried to focus a lot on how she portrayed herself. :)

on Nov. 5 2012 at 7:13 pm
amelia.estaire SILVER, Osceola, Indiana
7 articles 0 photos 30 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I take real people and put them in extraordinary situations." - Robert Cormier

Thank you and ya, I agree. :)

on Nov. 5 2012 at 7:13 pm
amelia.estaire SILVER, Osceola, Indiana
7 articles 0 photos 30 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I take real people and put them in extraordinary situations." - Robert Cormier

Thank you and ya, I agree. :)

on Nov. 5 2012 at 5:54 pm
_alexandravw SILVER, North Stonington, Connecticut
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Favorite Quote:
Sometimes it's okay if the only thing you're doing is breathing.

i love this, the voice you've given her.. wonderful!

on Nov. 5 2012 at 4:31 pm
CitricAcidRain BRONZE, Sligo, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Time heals almost everything. Give the time, some time.

That really beautiful! The only critique I would have is, you went a bit cliché on the rose, you know 'it's petals as red as blood.' I prefer a comparison that is very original :) But, thats only my opinion. Keep writing!

on Nov. 4 2012 at 3:04 pm
amelia.estaire SILVER, Osceola, Indiana
7 articles 0 photos 30 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I take real people and put them in extraordinary situations." - Robert Cormier

Thanks! :)

on Nov. 4 2012 at 2:57 pm
GuardianoftheStars GOLD, Shongaloo, Louisiana
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Favorite Quote:
"Let's tell young people the best books are yet to be written; the best painting, the best government, the best of everything is yet to be done by them."
-John Erslcine

This is a very beautiful peice. IT was fresh and sweet and I really enjoyed reading it. :)


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