Falling in love

October 28, 2012
Falling in love.
How inaccurate that statement is. For me, it’s more like drowning in love, and if I am truthfully “falling in love” I hope he has enough strength to catch me. How is it my fault that I have fallen in love involuntarily? Maybe it’s because of his dark, curly hair, or the way he smirks slightly more to the left, showing off his dimples. His emerald green eyes are defiantly a factor as to why I am so attracted to him. But most of all, he sees through my thick façade of happiness. This thick veil of fake joy constantly seems to choke me, However, I convinced myself with this illusion, and I tried to ignore my sadness that is gnawing away inside me.
When I met him, he simply asked me my name. I answered
“Jenna,.” as he replied.
“Peter.” I remember how he looked right through my illusion. He told me that I was beautiful. Without explaining his strange comment, he turned and walked away from me. Leaving my heart racing and my low self-esteem slithering up, never have I been called beautiful.

The next day he approached me again, handing me a rose. It’s petals as red as blood, and its thorns pricked my hand as I tightened my grip around it.
“A rose is considered one of the most beautiful flowers, yet its thorns prevent anything getting too close.” He whispered, his voice husky, but as smooth as butter. I looked down at the rose, and somehow, it made me smile.
It was the tiniest of smirks. My lips barley moved, yet it was real. I looked up to thank him, but he disappeared.

For the third day, he progressed towards me, his hand outstretched to mine, I expected something to be in his sturdy hands, yet there was nothing.

“Would you like to go with me?” He asked. The statement could mean anything. I once thought that no one could actually love someone like me, so I trained myself to not love others. The mere thought of love made my stomach churn, because I knew that love were only in stories, it was meant for someone else to have. My instincts told me to say no, and accept my reality, which had no room for him.
Yet my fantasy did,
my fantasy of being loved.
Making my decision, I firmly placed my hand in his.
Fully knowing, that I was falling.

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ljbeautiful said...
Nov. 12, 2012 at 10:01 am
I really liked your story it had a different writing style like it could have been a poem. Thank you for commenting on my story I'm an awful speller too.
a.e.always replied...
Nov. 12, 2012 at 5:00 pm
Thank you! :)
Lady_Teribithea said...
Nov. 8, 2012 at 8:01 am
This was pretty good, but yeah, the spelling and little bit of cliche could use some work. I liked it a lot though.
a.e.always replied...
Nov. 8, 2012 at 6:27 pm
Thank you, and thanks for the constructive criticism :)
CammyS said...
Nov. 7, 2012 at 4:52 pm
There are a couple spelling errors ("defiantly" is one of them. I bet you meant "definetly" right? Also, you said "barley" (a grain) instead of barely, which I'm guessing is what you meant) but other than that this was a really good piece. I liked how she resisted loving him, but not in a cliche, overused way. Great work! 
a.e.always replied...
Nov. 7, 2012 at 10:18 pm
Thanks!...Ya, i am terrible at spelling. :)
allyxvalley This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Nov. 5, 2012 at 5:54 pm
i love this, the voice you've given her.. wonderful!
a.e.always replied...
Nov. 5, 2012 at 7:14 pm
Well, thanks! ya, I tried to focus a lot on how she portrayed herself. :)
CitricAcidRain said...
Nov. 5, 2012 at 4:31 pm
That really beautiful! The only critique I would have is, you went a bit cliché on the rose, you know 'it's petals as red as blood.' I prefer a comparison that is very original :) But, thats only my opinion. Keep writing!
a.e.always replied...
Nov. 5, 2012 at 7:13 pm
Thank you and ya, I agree. :)
a.e.always replied...
Nov. 5, 2012 at 7:13 pm
Thank you and ya, I agree. :)
guardianofthestars This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Nov. 4, 2012 at 2:57 pm
This is a very beautiful peice. IT was fresh and sweet and I really enjoyed reading it. :)
a.e.always replied...
Nov. 4, 2012 at 3:04 pm
Thanks! :)
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