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Chipped Paintwork.

July 1, 2012
By Saffz BRONZE, Wales, Other
Saffz BRONZE, Wales, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"What would it take to be satisfied with my appearance?
Everything and yet, nothing."
Beautiful Stranger by Hope Donahue.


“Guess who? “
An ice cold shiver ran down my spine as I felt warm strong hands gripping my hip bones. I tilt my head down, gazing at the gleaming wet tarmac, the smoke tumbling into the darkened sky; anywhere but into those misguided eyes.
“I’ve missed you,” His breath was hot on my neck as he let the words drip of his tongue, wind down my arms and into my clasped hands. I let them fall to the ground, straining to hear the splash as they hit the floor.
Nothing.
Nothing but the soft pelt of rain, and his heavy breathing.
His hands creep forwards, my skin tingling with forbidden pleasure. Here I was, Samantha Mitchell in the arms of her sister’s fiancé. It was wrong, it was filthy and forbidden. But it was so desirable! That feeling when he talks, I can’t breathe. When he looks at me, the air forcing its way down my throat, intoxicating and lying heavy on my chest. I was usually strong, fierce and this was unimaginable. But he’d reduced me to this. Even the thought, made me want to cry out in shame.
I close my eyes as he eases his hands through the contours of my waist and onto my shoulders. Ever so gently, he tries to steer me towards the familiar shadow of his parked car.
I keep my feet firm and don’t budge.
I feel his grip tighten, clawing into my collar bones as he applies stronger force.
Again, I refuse to move.
“Sam, is there a problem?” He sounds soft, but I hear the menace in his voice; He expects a reply.
I bite my lip. I am silent.
“Samantha,” He prompts. “Get in the car.”
“I can’t do this any more” I whisper.
“What?” He’s angry, his grip is crushing on my shoulders, his chest rising and falling sharply in annoyance against my back.
I pull from his grip and face him.
“I can’t do it. The lying, the guilt, It’s all too much. We have to stop.” I plead.
He slaps me. The sting burning into my cold cheek. I stare at him; Horrified and hurt.
“God damn it Sam!” The anger rose in his voice, He hissed at me “I’ve risked everything for this. All the sacrifice, all the lies, and now you tell me you cant do it?”
He shoves me and I cower in fear. I thought he was going to hurt me, his fists were clenched and he leaned over my trembling figure.
“Don’t come near me again, two faced cow.” He spits at me and strides to his car, he opens the unlocked door and the engine revs. He slams the door and the car roars straight towards me, he swerves to avoid me and stops by my side. He stretches his arm out and grabs my shoulder, forcing me down to his level.
“You got that? Don’t come near me again.”
And with that hissed remark, he pulls away. Standing motionless, I watch the car drive away. I watch with out blinking until the car becomes a white blur of smashed head lights and chipped paintwork. The car has vanished from sight before I even realise the tears streaming down my face.



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on Jul. 29 2012 at 8:00 pm
FlameSeeker373 SILVER, Richmond, Texas
6 articles 3 photos 18 comments

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"...Magic is just science that we don't understand yet..."


















Arthur C. Clark

That was good! I liked it. Keep writing!! :)

on Jul. 22 2012 at 9:44 pm
Allicat001 SILVER, Waukesha, Wisconsin
6 articles 0 photos 170 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Love is not someone you can live with, love is someone you can't live without."

"Always stand up for what's right even if that means you're standing alone."

Very descriptive and nicely paced, great job!

on Jul. 22 2012 at 8:59 pm
KatelynnGilbert0 BRONZE, Palm Desert, California
3 articles 0 photos 58 comments

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"The only thing holding you back is yourself."

A very good piece, you could continue with her facing her sister after exposing the fiancee for the dirtbag he is.

on Jul. 22 2012 at 1:29 pm
JoPepper PLATINUM, Annandale, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"Freedom is the ability to not care what the other person thinks."

"Not all those who wander are lost" --JRR Tolkien

"When you are listening to music it is better to cover your eyes than your ears." --Jose' Bergamin

I really want to read more! I thought it was good! definitely keep writing! xD

on Jul. 22 2012 at 10:49 am
TheGirlWhoAteTheWorld BRONZE, Newport, Pennsylvania
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Very good job with this! The story isn't rushed and it leaves you wanting more at the end! Awesome job! :) 

4/5 


on Jul. 22 2012 at 12:34 am
PhoenixCrossing GOLD, Tinley Park, Illinois
14 articles 0 photos 178 comments
Aah this reminds me of Pretty Little Liars! I think it was well written and straight to the point but not rushed. Nice job. The beginning was perfectly descriptive and the ending makes me curious enough to want a know a little more.