Do you love me?

June 24, 2010
By OfficialApprover PLATINUM, Orefield, Pennsylvania
OfficialApprover PLATINUM, Orefield, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
Grab life by the balls. -Slobberknocker
We cannot change the cards we're dealt just how we play the hand
Experience is what you get when you didn't get what you wanted
It's pretty easy to be smart when you're parroting smart people
-Randy Pausch


“I love you.” he states over the phone, his rich angel’s voice hesitant and tender. He can make it sound like anything.

Oh, you love me now? You shouted at me, called me an idiot, a b****. That was love? When you left me waiting in that fancy dress that I’d bought all for you, at that expensive restaurant I’d had to spend a fortune in gas on to reach—left me waiting there pathetically all night while you cavorted around with some other woman. You call that love? I confronted you—you struck me. I can still feel the flash of pain across my face though it is days later. So this is your idea of love.

“Do you love me?” he whispers brokenly. Did he just ask me that? Did that son of a b**** just ask me that? After all he’s done, he has the nerve to ask me if I love him. I have the nerve to consider the question. My once-dreamy hazel eyes gaze through curling lashes at sights only I can see.

You, holding me in your strong, secure arms. Running your fingers through my dark, curly brown hair. Stroking my prominent, milky-white cheekbone. Whispering sweet secrets in my ear. Kissing my full red lips so gently and emotionally that my head swam for days. Do I love you?

“Yes,” I said dully. “Yes I do.” Wonderful. Did I really have to say that? Now he’ll think I’ve forgiven him.

“Will you give me another chance?” he asks, full of apprehension. Give him another chance? Another chance to carefully mend my heart, only to rip it to shreds? He must be joking.

But who am I fooling? I know the monster that beautiful exterior conceals. I know the infidelity, the lies, the cruelty. And I love him. I love him, I miss him, I want to be with him.

I’ve always prided myself on being a sensible girl. Intelligent, logical, always making the right choice. Right now, my heart and mind were grappling for the right to make this oh-so-important choice. They fought as viciously as a pair of wild dogs, but in the end, I proved myself correct. The mind won out. Self-preservation won out. Love lost.

“No,” I say curtly, and slam the phone down definitively, only to slowly slide down the wall until my head rests in my lap, salty drops splashing onto my crossed legs, sobs echoing throughout the desolate building. I made the right choice. I know I did. Then why does it hurt so much?


The author's comments:
I don't write a lot of short stories, but I love Taylor Swift songs, and one of my favorite ones inspired me. Guess which.

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on Oct. 23 2012 at 3:43 pm
angel_of_silence PLATINUM, Cotulla, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
“The boy never cried again, and he never forgot what he'd learned: that to love is to destroy, and that to be loved is to be the one destroyed.” -Jace Wayland City of Bones

This wa awsome, i love how you kept it real

on Oct. 23 2012 at 8:42 am
Wordartist SILVER, Grand Rapids, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"If you judge a fish by its ability to climb a tree it will live its whole thinking its stupid." -Albert Einstein

one simple word to describe such a piece: AMAZING!

on Oct. 23 2012 at 2:54 am
JuliaRuby SILVER, Melbourne, Other
8 articles 0 photos 17 comments

Favorite Quote:
Shoot for the moon. Even if you miss, you will land among the stars
By Les Brown

loved it. well done

on May. 22 2012 at 1:30 pm
forevermore147, Godley, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
Always remember you are braver than you believe, stronger than you seem, smarter than you think and twice as beautiful as you'd ever imagined.
- Patti Rooks

WOW that is so beautiful!!!!

on Feb. 24 2012 at 9:05 am
BlaZeStar SILVER, Alwaye, Other
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Favorite Quote:
No God,No Peace
Know God,Know Peace.

LOVE th song!!!

Eggie94 BRONZE said...
on Jan. 11 2012 at 10:41 pm
Eggie94 BRONZE, Palmdale, California
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Favorite Quote:
"With great power comes great responsibility" --Bruce Wayne

I absolutely love "White Horse" and I love how you based your story on it. Good Job! :)

on Jan. 11 2012 at 12:36 pm
DimitriLover2720 BRONZE, Manassas, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
To me, Fearless is not the absence of fear. It's not being completely unafraid. To me, Fearless is having fears. Fearless is having doubts. Lots of them. To me, Fearless is living in spite of those things that scare you to death.
- Taylor Swift

OMD! It's from "White Horse"! LOVE her and LOVE that song!

on Dec. 20 2011 at 5:26 pm
NKsunshine BRONZE, Palatine, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
"I don't need easy, I just need possible!" ~Bethany Hamilton

White Horse<3<3

This is the perfect way to put this song on paper(:


on Dec. 20 2011 at 1:32 pm
livlaughluv99, Mtn. Brook, Alabama
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Amazing! wow!

on Nov. 28 2011 at 12:36 pm
jordiebell555 BRONZE, Mauston, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
dont do anything you will have to take back or apoligize for in the future

to the world you are one, but to one u r the world

That was truly amazing!i loved it, keep writting.

 


shedevil said...
on Feb. 7 2011 at 7:44 am
shedevil, Spotsylvania, Virginia
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This is truley amazing ! It shows that sometimes making the right decision for yourself , may not be the easiest . I loved it , keep writting ! (:

on Jan. 5 2011 at 6:06 pm
Anonymousme GOLD, San Antonio, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
John 3:16
For God so loved the world that he gave his one and only son so whoever believes in hill will not die but have eternal life.

Dreams are what make us who we are, a life without dreams is like a life without air.

Hi, you commented that you wanted a story reviewed on my Free Feedback forum. I couldn't find it so I decided to reveiw this one. It is AMAZING! It reminds me of Taylor Swift's song White Horse (if you watch the music video) I love the feelings in this story and the fact that she told him she loved him, and she still didn't give him another chance. Genius, pure genius.

on Nov. 17 2010 at 8:40 pm
OfficialApprover PLATINUM, Orefield, Pennsylvania
48 articles 0 photos 1754 comments

Favorite Quote:
Grab life by the balls. -Slobberknocker
We cannot change the cards we're dealt just how we play the hand
Experience is what you get when you didn't get what you wanted
It's pretty easy to be smart when you're parroting smart people
-Randy Pausch

Yep:) We have a winner.

on Nov. 17 2010 at 3:12 pm
BeautyandBeast BRONZE, St.Peters, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
Mom: I learned my lesson, I had three of you!
Daughter: You didn't learn your lesson, you had three of us!!! lol :D

aww, u wrote this after white horse by taylor swift

on Sep. 30 2010 at 7:58 pm
OfficialApprover PLATINUM, Orefield, Pennsylvania
48 articles 0 photos 1754 comments

Favorite Quote:
Grab life by the balls. -Slobberknocker
We cannot change the cards we're dealt just how we play the hand
Experience is what you get when you didn't get what you wanted
It's pretty easy to be smart when you're parroting smart people
-Randy Pausch

Oh, thank you so much! And if I said it, I meant it.

on Sep. 30 2010 at 7:48 pm
You commented on my story "Angel Wings" that my story left you speechless. Well honey, you've done that and more to me right now! superb job, and i hope you keep it up

on Sep. 2 2010 at 7:51 pm
OfficialApprover PLATINUM, Orefield, Pennsylvania
48 articles 0 photos 1754 comments

Favorite Quote:
Grab life by the balls. -Slobberknocker
We cannot change the cards we're dealt just how we play the hand
Experience is what you get when you didn't get what you wanted
It's pretty easy to be smart when you're parroting smart people
-Randy Pausch

I'm sorry:( Mercifully this didn't actually happen to me, but it could.

on Sep. 2 2010 at 7:48 pm
SimplyRachel PLATINUM, Charlotte, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"Yesterday is history, tomorrow is a mystery and today is a gift, that's why we call it the present."
~Unknown
"Things change, friends leave, and life doesn't stop for anybody."
~Stepgen Chbosky

Something like this happened to me. When it does I listento Taylor Sift (i love her songs too) and i write it all down.

on Aug. 20 2010 at 9:40 pm
OfficialApprover PLATINUM, Orefield, Pennsylvania
48 articles 0 photos 1754 comments

Favorite Quote:
Grab life by the balls. -Slobberknocker
We cannot change the cards we're dealt just how we play the hand
Experience is what you get when you didn't get what you wanted
It's pretty easy to be smart when you're parroting smart people
-Randy Pausch

Thank you! It's no problem, people are busy:D I"m sorry for whatever happened to you.  And thanks for the suggestion:D

on Aug. 20 2010 at 9:22 pm
VictoriaStaley SILVER, Cartersville, Georgia
5 articles 0 photos 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be yourself, everyone else is already taken."- Oscar Wilde

I have really enjoyed your work. You are a fantastic writer! (Sorry it took me so long to finally comment after you commented on my short story "The High Dive.") I loved how I could so relate to this. I just went through an experience similar to this. Great description. The only suggestion I would have is to maybe cut out a little description. Personally I love lots of detail but sometimes, especially in cases of "dreamy" guys, it can be better to make his/her look more mysterious allowing the reader to picture their own version of the character. Overall, this is very impressive work and I look forward to reading some more of you stuff. ((:




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