She's Gone

June 23, 2010
He stood at her bedside, rubbing her ivory, lifeless arm as tears swelled in his eyes. Blood smudged her beautiful, porcelain-like face, that looked to be almost breakable if his lips even touched hers. Her eyelids covered her beautiful, electric, bright, sapphire blue eyes. His ears begged to hear her chime-like voice, that called for attention. Her normal violet scent covered by the scent of coppery blood and he could practically feel the distasted hatred. He softly stroked her gilded brown hair, that had strokes of golden blonde within it. Finally, after an hour, it set in and he broke down sobbing. He fell to his knees, sobbing into her lavender sheets that were stained slightly with her crimson red blood. He shook, rage and sadness drowning him.

He looks at her hand, and softly takes it in his. He kisses it softly and stares at her once more. “Oh my dear, lifeless, breathless, Alireese… I swear my darling, I shall avenge whomever has done this to you….” He softly whispers, running a hand through her hair lightly. Slowly, he stands, tucking the fragile girl in with her beautiful rose pattern comforter. He takes a deep breath and turns away, shutting his golden brown eyes and leaving the dark blue room that had been drenched in sparkles.

“Luxor.” He hears his name as he is about to leave Alireese’s home. With hopes high, he whips around, just to have his hopes crushed once more. It was the girl’s mother. He softly sighs and nods.

“Yes, Mrs. Gillian?” He whispers, looking at the spitting image of Alireese. She had long, curling brown hair, and emerald green eyes, she was not tall, around 4’10” at the most. She had a soft round face that was beautifully clear.

“Luxor, I have a letter addressed to you. It was found when Alireese was found.” She says, holding up an ivory white envelope. His eyes widened and bulged from his head. He races to snatch the letter from Mrs. Gillian’s hand. His finger slices through the envelope, ripping it perfectly open. He grabs the letter from the envelope and flips it quickly open.


I told you I’d take the most precious thing from you. I told you. I warned you a thousand of times. Now lookie here. Your girlfriend is DEAD. Gone. What you going to do? Kill me? Go ahead and try to find me.


The letter flutters to the ground, his face blank. He never thought the person would…

Luxor gains the strength to pick the letter back up and shakily puts it in the pocket of his black leather coat. “Th-Thank you Mrs. Gillian.” He whispers, then swiftly running out of the house.

Into the grassy landscape, where sun always shone, he stares into the forest. “Why…” The pain that swelled inside him was taken over by the rage of this killer. Now, with the swear buzzing in his head to Alireese, he was furious. Simply furious. He was willing to kill whomever, what ever it took to revenge Alireese’s death.

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Robsessed said...
Jul. 8, 2010 at 1:31 am
i really liked this piece. it had a forceful presence that was a mix between anger, hate, and love. it made everything more real. a bit over descriptive at times, but that might be your way of having Luxor express is deep passion and commitment to Alireese. good job!
Sliva23 said...
Jul. 2, 2010 at 9:26 pm
This piece made me feel like crying soo much
I loved it tho
Gummy_Ummy_Worm replied...
Jul. 5, 2010 at 8:34 pm
Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed the peice ^_^
ForeverknownasCheyenne said...
Jul. 1, 2010 at 11:05 pm
I really really loved this. It really made me think...You never really see yourself as others can tell that Luxor really thinks Alireese was beautiful. Great descriptions, this really had a lot of emotion. & I see it was a midnight write...& if you're like can really bring out your emotions late at night...This was really good. Keep writing, and if you dont mind, i would love to hear your thoughts on some of my writing!!
Gummy_Ummy_Worm replied...
Jul. 5, 2010 at 8:34 pm
Oh gosh, thank you. :) I absolutely will check your things out :D
gymbabe This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 30, 2010 at 4:28 pm

This is incredible, very sad and angry, wonderfully described.  Excellent job. Keep writing!

Btw, will you check out and comment on my work?

Gummy_Ummy_Worm replied...
Jul. 5, 2010 at 8:35 pm
Thank you very much, and I will be sure to check out your work ^_^
gymbabe This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jul. 5, 2010 at 8:40 pm
Thanks!  And it's no problem, I enjoyed reading and commenting on this piece.
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