Pinky Promise

May 19, 2010
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"I'm sorry," he whispered, voice gentle with pain. I kept my gaze locked on the floor, fighting the urge to cry."Please, look at me," he begged, brushing his hand under my chin. I bit my lip, forcing myself to do so. No longer were his eyes depths of chocolate brown spinning with green. They were dull, but sorrowful. So sorrowful. Nothing needed to be said when I hugged his broad shoulders. A few tears slipped, but I wiped them away before he saw. He was doing this for a good reason. In a way, I was proud of him. Maybe not of picking his country over me, but either way, he was going to be gone. Far away, over the salty sea where I could only imagine what he ws doing without his hand slipped through my own. "Hey," he softly said, tender hand running over my cheek."I'm going to be fine. I pinky promise." He humored me, wrapping his large pinky finger around my own. I managed to pull up my lips up in a smile and squeezing my pinky against his. Gingerly, he kissed his cool lips on my finger. That's when I almost lost it, broke down completely. I didn't have time to cry when his lips intertwined with my own, the kiss it's own firework. For a moment in time, I felt perfect, as nothing could break me. Dread bleached my blood when I saw his camoflauge outfit disappear with the others. Not all promises can be kept.





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Emiri said...
Nov. 22, 2011 at 10:19 am
Not all promises can be kept. I liek that sentence. It's kidn of ...weird to think that every one of the hundreds of instances this happens, each one seems individual... though really, they're all teh same.
 
AsIAm This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Dec. 23, 2010 at 11:10 pm

Well, seeing as though war-torn romance is one of my favorite types of writing, I'll start with the gushing praise. :)

 

I like your word choice, and I also like the emotions you put into this.  Sounds a lot like how my mom feels when my dad deploys.  Very nice. :)  A also like that you made her fittingly upset, but not one of those whiny cliche girls who totally freak out and have a major hissy. lol  Lastly, I like how you left off, leaving the characte... (more »)

 
i.ll_be_fine_899 said...
Jul. 12, 2010 at 8:00 am
awww :/ this was really good. you hav beautiful word choice. good work :)
 
dinosaurXkid said...
Jul. 3, 2010 at 11:59 pm
sad  but good I love it love&rockets-moomoo's
 
sparkofheart said...
Jun. 7, 2010 at 8:56 pm
wow that was really good and sad but you have amazing writing skillz :)
 
iluvnacho replied...
Jun. 7, 2010 at 9:04 pm
Thank you. This is my first submission, so any incouragment is greatly apprieciated.
 
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