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EC+AM=4ever Chapter 19

January 6, 2010
By TeamJacobArchuleta ELITE, Chicago, Illinois
TeamJacobArchuleta ELITE, Chicago, Illinois
183 articles 7 photos 484 comments

Favorite Quote:
He's the one I call in the middle of the night. He's the one who makes everything alright. He loves me with no regret...I just haven't found him yet.


June 16, 2009
Evalynne's House
6:30 p.m.


Ash and I had already picked out invitations. They were just simple ones, white with a silver outlining, the time, date, place, dress code all written in that same silver color, and EC+AM=4ever engraved at the top in silver. We would send these out tomorrow.

We had just sat down for dinner and it was time for us to tell my parents about us getting married. I just didn't know how to say it right. I was so nervous, so anxious, so worried. I just wanted to get it over with, but I couldn't even get myself to start.

My hands were shaking at my sides and I opened my mouth to speak, but nothing came out. Ash looked over at me, noticed how nervous I was, and began to tell them.

"Mr. and Mrs. Carter, there's something Evalynne and I would like to tell you." he said politely.

They both looked up at us. "What is it?" Mom asked.

Ash looked over at me and continued when I didn't say anything, "I would first just like to say that I love your daughter very much. And I'll always be there for her, no matter what. And yesterday, I asked her to marry me. And she said yes." He lifted up his hand, showing them his wedding band as proof.

Mom and Dad's eyes went wide, both of them speechless. "You proposed?" Dad finally asked in shock. Ash nodded.

"And you said yes?" Mom cried, looking at me. I swallowed hard and held up my own wedding ring.

"I love him, Mom." I said. "And it was my fault for our break up, not his. I broke up with him because I felt bad about him and his mom. He had nothing to do with it. And he only dated Julianne because he thought that I wanted him to move on."

Tears came to Mom's eyes. "Wow, you two are really in love, aren't you?" she asked.

"Yes, we are." I replied. I handed her the invitation I was holding under the table. "The wedding's July twentieth, two weeks after my birthday."

She scanned the invitation, Dad peering at it too. "You two are really serious about this. You've planned it out and everything." Dad said.

"Yeah, we actually scheduled to meet with the local priest today." Ash said.

"It's cute how you put EC+AM=4ever at the top like that." Mom commented.

"Actually, Ash carved that into a tree at the park. That's where we're getting married at." I informed her.

Dad bit his lip and stared off into space, his face completely free of any emotion.

"Oh honey, this is all so romantic!" Mom oozed. "You have to let me help you plan it!"

"Mom, it's just going to be a small wedding. There's only going to be twenty people coming. It's not going to be all fancy. We're going to have like, a forty-five minute reception at the park, probably go out to dinner, and go home."

"Have you already decided how you're going to pay for this?" Dad asked.

"No, not yet. We were kind of hoping that you guys could help pay for it, but we could always get jobs to help pay it off. We still have to finish paying off the rest of Ash's ring." I told them. "It was three hundred and fifty dollars, and we paid one hundred and fifty of it so far. The jeweler who sold it to us, said that we could pay for it in increments."

"Well that's very responsible of you two. Of course we'll help pay for it!" Mom said.

"Awesome, thanks so much!" I cried.

"Yeah, we are so grateful that you both are being so helpful. Thank you very much." Ash told them sincerely.

"Anything for our daughter and son-in-law." Mom replied.

"And I already looked it up, it only takes twenty four hours to get the marriage license here in New York." Ash said.

"Cool, that's not very long at all." I added.

"So when are we going to go pick out your dress?" Mom asked me.

"I don't know." I confessed. "How about this Saturday?"

"That's too long away from now!" she complained.

"Mom, it's Monday. That's only five days away from now." I reminded her.

"I know! And five days is too long of a wait!" she said. I smirked at her. She sighed, "Fine, we can go on Saturday."

I laughed and shook my head. "You're so impatient." I chided.

"I'm just so excited! I love weddings and I love shopping. So I really love shopping for wedding dresses!"

"I know you do, Mom." I said.

After dinner, I walked upstairs with Ash and we both walked into my room. I plopped down on my bed and sighed with relief, "Wow, they took everything so well."

"I know, it's great." he added.

"Yeah, but don't you think that maybe we should go tell your mom now?" I asked.

He bit his lip and looked out my window, over at his old house. "I don't know."

"Come on, it's not going to be that bad." I assured him.

He groaned, "Fine, let's just get this over with."

So we both stood up and walked downstairs, "Where are you two going?" Mom asked us as we passed by her.

"To tell my mom about our marriage." Ash said flatly.

Mom winced, "Good luck,"

I rolled my eyes, "It's not going to be that bad!"

Mom looked at me like I was crazy, "If you say so," she murmured.

Then Ash and I walked outside and over to the front porch of his mom's house. We rang the doorbell and she answered with an annoyed look on her face. "What do you want?" she demanded.

Ash handed her an invitation. She read it over, her face expressionless. Then she looked back up at us.

"Will you come?" Ash asked. "It would mean a lot to me. And to Evalynne too." I nodded my head in agreement.

She handed him the invitation back. "I have much better things to do than watch you make a mess of your life." she remarked spitefully.

The pain on Ash's face was hard to look at. I'd never seen him so hurt. Out of everything his mom had ever said or done, this had been the cruelest. She just seemed so disgusted with him, so careless, like she truly didn't love him anymore.

"Ash loves you very much. I don't know if you can see it, but I can. And you really hurt him when you say things like that." I said. "If you love him as much as you say you do, then why don't you start acting like it? You should support him even if you don't agree with what he's doing. You should still be there for him."

She sneered, "Why would I support the fact that he's going to marry you and destroy the remainder of his life?"

"Because that's what mothers do." I snapped back.

She looked taken aback, "Don't do this, Ash." she mumbled. "Don't make the same mistake I did. You know why I don't want you doing this. Please don't do this to yourself."

For a moment it looked as if Ash were actually considering what she'd said, but that expression left his face as quick as it had came.

"I don't get it. I really don't." I said. "You should at least come. You should at least stick by his side. We love each other."

"That's the problem!" she exploded. "That's what I was afraid of!"

"You were afraid that Ash would fall in love with me?" I asked, baffled.

She looked at Ash and nodded, "But it's too late now. There's no going back. I just wanted you to be happy." Then tears started streaming down her face.

"I am happy, Mom." he said softly.

"For now you are," she replied.

"I'm marrying her so that I'll know that she'll always be mine, that we'll always love each other. Even when we're not together." he said.

A look of pain, dejection, and sadness came across her face. "Just don't blame me when things don't go as well as you expect. I care about you, Ash. And I don't want you to get hurt, but if you don't listen to me, that's exactly what's going to happen."

He swallowed hard and nodded, "I know that this is what I want, Mom."

She stared at him for a moment with tears in her eyes, "Ok, if it's really what you want then you have my permission to marry her. Not my approval, just my permission." she said.

"Thanks, Mom," he replied. Then we turned and walked back to my house. And I felt like there was more to it than his mom not liking me or being jealous that he found true love and she didn't. I felt like there was something I didn't know about that was causing Ash's mom to be the way she was. Maybe it had something to do with what he was about to tell me earlier today.

"It's kind of weird how your mom just gave us her permission to marry each other after she was so angry that we were dating." I said.

"Yeah, but I think now she realizes how much we love each other." Ash replied.

"It's still weird how she said it was ok. Almost like there was some reason that she said yes. A reason that I don't know about." I looked over at him, expecting him to tell me what that reason was. But he stayed silent. So I just came out and said it. "Ash, is there something you're not telling me?"

He bit his lip and looked back at me. Then he sighed, "Yes, there is."

"What is it?" I asked, judging by the look in his eyes that it wasn't good.

"Evalynne, two days after we marry, July twenty-second I have to go somewhere far away." he said.

"Like where?" I asked.

"Iraq."

My eyebrows knit together, "Why do you have to go there?"

"Because on July twenty-second, I leave to go to war. I'm in the army."


The author's comments:
Here's chapter 19, and this chapter has a surprise ending!!! :o

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on Nov. 3 2011 at 9:37 pm
Mynameislindsayy SILVER, Seattle, Washington
7 articles 8 photos 53 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I'd rather just except who I am, what's the use of trying to change?"

What a twist, I got chills when I read the last part. I can't stop reading!!!

on Mar. 21 2011 at 8:09 pm
kkayla3897 BRONZE, Ogden, Utah
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NO!!!! Don't let him die! Please don't let him die!

on Jul. 31 2010 at 6:21 pm
Still_Waters26 SILVER, Ladysmith, Wisconsin
6 articles 0 photos 88 comments

Favorite Quote:
"We few, we happy few/we band of brothers/For he to-day that sheds his blood with me/Shall be my brother"
-Shakespeare, "Henry V"

Your welcome...actually I found chapter 20 so now I'm up to chapter 35 I think.  And I know, I'm working on a novel right now, and it's so different than the first draft! So many things were changed but it's so much better now

on Jul. 31 2010 at 5:38 pm
TeamJacobArchuleta ELITE, Chicago, Illinois
183 articles 7 photos 484 comments

Favorite Quote:
He's the one I call in the middle of the night. He's the one who makes everything alright. He loves me with no regret...I just haven't found him yet.

I totally agree about the realistic thing...i actually wrote this last year & it was the 2nd story i'd ever tried to write so i definitely still needed some practice lol...but i think that i improved in the sequel (ec-am=heartbreak) and i'm already working on going back and revising everything, but thank you for the feedback! i appreaciate your honesty :)

on Jul. 31 2010 at 11:47 am
Still_Waters26 SILVER, Ladysmith, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
"We few, we happy few/we band of brothers/For he to-day that sheds his blood with me/Shall be my brother"
-Shakespeare, "Henry V"

Ok, I couldn't find Chapter 20 of this story anywhere so I'll tell you what I think of it here.  Honestly, I think the plot is way too dramatic.  If you really want this to be a tearjerker love story, make it more realistic.  And three are countless times when Ash and Evalynne's words sound like they're reading love poetry.  They don't sound like they're talking!  Make them feel real!

Also, the fact that he murdered his own dad and that his mom is so rude sounds like a little too much.  Besides, if someone really went through all that, he probably wouldn't end up as such a nice person.

Also, their love story is way too rushed.  Evalynne sees a hot guy with a six-pack and she's in love, but real love is much more deeper than that.  You have to mature their love long before they even write their initials on the three.  And we don't even know WHY Ash loves Evalynne...why does he?  Why has he sacrificed so much for her?

Lastly, the scenes where they set up those pranks and Evalynne pretended Cole was her bf was way too much.  It felt like something middle-schoolers would do, not teenagers.  And I think Kristy is way too sensitive and doesn't sound loyal to Evalynne at all.

All in all, I suggest you make the story feel more real (including the characters' dialogue), let the readers get to know the characters better before you jump into the romance, and less drama, please!  Other than that, good start on a good novel.

 


on Jul. 14 2010 at 4:11 pm
pinkypromise23 PLATINUM, Cranston, Rhode Island
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i know that you believe you understand what you think i said, but im not sure you realize that what you heard is not what i meant.

whaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaat???? whyyyyyyyyyyyy????????????

on Jul. 14 2010 at 4:09 pm
pinkypromise23 PLATINUM, Cranston, Rhode Island
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i know that you believe you understand what you think i said, but im not sure you realize that what you heard is not what i meant.

 exactly!!

on Jul. 9 2010 at 2:00 pm
TeamJacobArchuleta ELITE, Chicago, Illinois
183 articles 7 photos 484 comments

Favorite Quote:
He's the one I call in the middle of the night. He's the one who makes everything alright. He loves me with no regret...I just haven't found him yet.

lol it's funny that you mentioned that carrie underwood song, "just a dream" because that's actually where i got the idea of sending him off to war from haha :)

on Jul. 8 2010 at 2:45 am
MyLifeAsCupid BRONZE, Janesville, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
"How could an Alice girl like me,
Love a Hatter as mad as you?"

what the heck, if he loved her so much then why would he be risking his life inraq, i'msort of angry right now, it makes me not want to read anymore of this book but i have to cuz i'm addicted. god y iraq y couldn't he have said something about his mom's past or something the war is a killer of love, haven't u heard or watched the music video of that one song by carry underwood. >:( uuuggghhh it waz getting good then that had to come up. But the chapters before this one were rly good

STUPID WAR!


on Jun. 25 2010 at 7:44 pm
jcl22196 SILVER, Elmont, New York
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!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

M.S.S. GOLD said...
on May. 28 2010 at 6:13 pm
M.S.S. GOLD, Lubbock, Texas
11 articles 0 photos 46 comments

Favorite Quote:
"WACKADOO!!!" "You made a funny!" "Red Seven! Red Seven!! Red Seh-ven-a!!!" "Swaaaaag!!!!" "Ratchet" "God Said No" "God Said Yes"

Whaaaaaaaaaaaaaat!!!!! you have got to be kidding me! Everything starts to get better then....WACKADOO!!! wat a heart stopper

on May. 23 2010 at 6:05 pm
ashkash95 SILVER, New Hyde Park, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"Love never fails." 1 Corinthians 13:8

OMGOMGOMGOMGOMG!!!!! I don't know whether to be angry with Ash for not telling Evalynne or to cry!

JesusRider said...
on May. 11 2010 at 7:07 pm
JesusRider, Scottsdale, Arizona
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Wait hold on, What???!!!!!!?????

twiwrite GOLD said...
on Feb. 23 2010 at 2:32 pm
twiwrite GOLD, Modesto, California
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none :P

O.O nooooooooooooooooooooo!!!!!!!!!!!!!

KellyR GOLD said...
on Feb. 10 2010 at 10:40 pm
KellyR GOLD, Richmond, Virginia
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We don't read and write poetry because it's cute. We read and write poetry because we are members of the human race. And the human race is filled with passion. And medicine, law, business, engineering, these are noble pursuits and necessary to sustain life. But poetry, beauty, romance, love, these are what we stay alive for.

wow how selfish of ash

on Feb. 10 2010 at 8:25 pm
JohnnyDeppLover123 DIAMOND, Holyoke, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
Be not afraid of greatness: some are born great, some achieve greatness, and some have greatness thrust upon them.
William Shakespeare

wow yeah i seriously really want to grab him by the neck right now!!!

J. Rae said...
on Feb. 6 2010 at 6:34 pm
I'll definitely be going to that website!

on Feb. 4 2010 at 5:36 pm
TeamJacobArchuleta ELITE, Chicago, Illinois
183 articles 7 photos 484 comments

Favorite Quote:
He's the one I call in the middle of the night. He's the one who makes everything alright. He loves me with no regret...I just haven't found him yet.

lol, thank you guys soooooo much! i'm trying to post more on here, but it takes a really long time for this website to actually upload work. but the rest of this story is posted on a website called quizilla .com if ur interested in reading the rest :)

J. Rae said...
on Feb. 4 2010 at 4:36 pm
I want more chapters too!

on Feb. 4 2010 at 1:13 pm
SaraRoxsHerSox SILVER, McVeytown, Pennsylvania
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"Brochacho!"

I love it! You should definitely post the reast of the chapters on here! :D


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