i love you?

December 4, 2009
By Babygurl_101 SILVER, N/A, California
Babygurl_101 SILVER, N/A, California
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Favorite Quote:
"Angels are the quiet girls that just havent been noticed yet"
"The past is the past, and i am your futuer." (<3<3<3<3<3)


during the school year, i really liked you... it is time to get to know you... *stis under tree with you*
"Hi..." "Whats your name?"
*looks up from book* "my name is Lilly" (wow.. a cutie is talking to me)
why dont we go to somewhere and talk... *takes her hand softly*
L- Ummm... surr, y not.. *takes hand* wat is your name?
"My name is Arrron"...
L-well it is very nice 2 meet u
A-*holds her close* "ur warm, make me warm too?"
L-"of course"... *holds Arrron*
A-well... wat wuld u say 2 a good bye kiss??? *bell rings*
L-I guess... *kisses his lips*
A- wow, that was amazing!!! *sayz goodbye*
(little did she know, she was never going to be with him again)
----weeks went by---- she sees him with another gurl... that is his girlfriend... they r done 4ever...


The author's comments:
this stroy shows that u need 2 get 2 know people 1st... dont jump the gun and hve fun... take things slowly..

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on Apr. 13 2010 at 11:07 pm
Babygurl_101 SILVER, N/A, California
8 articles 0 photos 118 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Angels are the quiet girls that just havent been noticed yet"
"The past is the past, and i am your futuer." (<3<3<3<3<3)

its fine...i dont mind, it just that im not used to writting stories yet

i appreciate the feedback


Meli138 said...
on Apr. 13 2010 at 10:10 pm
Meli138, GP, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"Like a bird with broken wings its not how high he flies but the song he sings"
"Everybody live like its the last day you will ever see tell me tell me do you feel the pressure now?"

Well thats awesome! You have a good idea here and after you get practice youll do great! im sorry i sounded so harsh earlier too.

on Apr. 1 2010 at 10:54 pm
Babygurl_101 SILVER, N/A, California
8 articles 0 photos 118 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Angels are the quiet girls that just havent been noticed yet"
"The past is the past, and i am your futuer." (<3<3<3<3<3)

thanks...

im not used to writting stories. i know this one wasnt that good...i submitted another one, just waiting for approval


Meli138 said...
on Apr. 1 2010 at 10:46 pm
Meli138, GP, Texas
0 articles 0 photos 56 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Like a bird with broken wings its not how high he flies but the song he sings"
"Everybody live like its the last day you will ever see tell me tell me do you feel the pressure now?"

Ok no offense but if you're going to write a story atleast write in real words and not in "texting" form. Besides that it was an ok story kind of pointless really there were no depth.


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