the conflicts of love

September 29, 2009
By an0nym0u5 GOLD, Big Lake, Minnesota
an0nym0u5 GOLD, Big Lake, Minnesota
12 articles 0 photos 23 comments

Favorite Quote:
"all that glitters is not gold."


he was standing there just standing and he was looking right at her with his petrfyingly blue eyes she couldnt breathe she couldnt move. He had sandy blond hair cut to just the right length, and a smile that could kill. His arms were crossed and he had a sort of lethargic look about him but she knew better he was ready but for what... they were standing in the dinning hall it was 1454 they were waiting for the king to arrive lady adela and prince colin. He was the youngest of six brothers and she the oldest of three. Her parents both died of a plague along with her younger sister alison before she was old enough to remember them, and her younger brother has been lost at sea for six years.

The author's comments:
graceling. that was pretty much my inspiration...

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btdhbuyr said...
on Apr. 19 2013 at 12:51 pm
what a minute maid loooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooovvvvvvvee   awesome

on Jun. 28 2011 at 10:28 am
Ayushi_austen BRONZE, Kolkata, Other
3 articles 0 photos 54 comments

Favorite Quote:
I love my past. I love my present. I’m not ashamed of what I’ve had, and I’m not sad because I have it no longer...

ya...punctuation is important..but gr8 work!!

G-Ann BRONZE said...
on Nov. 20 2010 at 10:39 pm
G-Ann BRONZE, Springfield, Illinois
2 articles 0 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
Pretending to be normal gets tiring.
Make love,Not war!

omg  i lolve it it's so pretty!!

an0nym0u5 GOLD said...
on Nov. 20 2010 at 9:33 pm
an0nym0u5 GOLD, Big Lake, Minnesota
12 articles 0 photos 23 comments

Favorite Quote:
"all that glitters is not gold."

thank you all for your feedback(: for those who have encouraged me to continue writing i do have a conflicts of love 2 and 3 and i am currently working on a 4th. i also have other articles i think 7 more? including one called "death" that i am proud of along with the conflict of love articles (series???) and i would greatly appreciate it if you guys could tell me if i followed the story line somewhat or direct me in the right direction. thank you so much(: ps sorry for the really long comment!

on Nov. 20 2010 at 7:19 pm
aphilly DIAMOND, St. Paul Park, Minnesota
63 articles 0 photos 21 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Have you ever once in your life reached out to touch infinity?" -Ellen Hopkins

That sent shivers up my spine.  You should really keep writing that story!!!

Kary123 GOLD said...
on Nov. 20 2010 at 8:51 am
Kary123 GOLD, Chelsea, Massachusetts
13 articles 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Remember happiness doesn't depend upon who you are or what you have; it depends solely on what you think.”

you should continue the story.

amykins BRONZE said...
on Oct. 7 2010 at 5:10 pm
amykins BRONZE, Carrollton, Texas
1 article 0 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
We are all a little weird and life's a little weird, and when we find someone whose weirdness is compatible with ours, we join up with them and fall in mutual weirdness and call it love.

It was good, but I also suggest you work on your grammar. You can make grammatical errors on purpose if it's for emphasis or writing style but if the reader can't tell if it's a mistake or on purpose it's not effective.

on Oct. 7 2010 at 6:25 am
This is REALLY good. I just have two suggestions: work on your grammar, and PLEASE CONTINUE!!!!

TuffGurl said...
on Oct. 7 2010 at 6:23 am
Ok, Marastir, you're trying to correct this person's grammar when you have amazing long run-on sentences. So, I would work on some of your grammar.

on Jun. 19 2010 at 8:18 pm
OfficialApprover PLATINUM, Orefield, Pennsylvania
48 articles 0 photos 1754 comments

Favorite Quote:
Grab life by the balls. -Slobberknocker
We cannot change the cards we're dealt just how we play the hand
Experience is what you get when you didn't get what you wanted
It's pretty easy to be smart when you're parroting smart people
-Randy Pausch

This was very nice, short and sweet.  I like the last sentence, and good title.  Good job:)

Btw, will anyone who sees this check out and comment on my work?


on Jun. 19 2010 at 12:04 pm
Chinadoll BRONZE, Dallas, Texas
3 articles 0 photos 172 comments

Interesting, simple and sweet. Are you going to write some more?

Could you look at some of my work? Please and thank you.


on Mar. 22 2010 at 11:22 am
MissFaber SILVER, Wayne, New Jersey
5 articles 0 photos 156 comments

Favorite Quote:
Nothing Less.

That was cute... the fast pace made it unique. it would have been a marvelous poem.

could you comment and rate on my stories? thanx

an0nym0u5 GOLD said...
on Feb. 11 2010 at 5:23 pm
an0nym0u5 GOLD, Big Lake, Minnesota
12 articles 0 photos 23 comments

Favorite Quote:
"all that glitters is not gold."

"do I care?" is also completely mind blowing! and if only i could tell you how true it is. have you read the rest of my work? id really be greatful if someone who writes as beautifully as you do could critique my work(:

an0nym0u5 GOLD said...
on Feb. 11 2010 at 5:17 pm
an0nym0u5 GOLD, Big Lake, Minnesota
12 articles 0 photos 23 comments

Favorite Quote:
"all that glitters is not gold."

ok i just read "tough" omigodness!! i really felt the anger and rage of both characters spilling out of that piece!

an0nym0u5 GOLD said...
on Feb. 11 2010 at 5:10 pm
an0nym0u5 GOLD, Big Lake, Minnesota
12 articles 0 photos 23 comments

Favorite Quote:
"all that glitters is not gold."

its completely alright. sorry it took me so long to get back lol(:

an0nym0u5 GOLD said...
on Feb. 11 2010 at 5:09 pm
an0nym0u5 GOLD, Big Lake, Minnesota
12 articles 0 photos 23 comments

Favorite Quote:
"all that glitters is not gold."

i just finished reading "maybe" and all i can say is wow!! your writing is amazing i my writing is nothng compared to yours!!! you create the characters as if they really live separate lives and it was captivating from start to finish. you definatly have talent!!!!!

an0nym0u5 GOLD said...
on Feb. 11 2010 at 4:57 pm
an0nym0u5 GOLD, Big Lake, Minnesota
12 articles 0 photos 23 comments

Favorite Quote:
"all that glitters is not gold."

haha im both too! yea sure of coarse:)

on Feb. 5 2010 at 4:54 pm
SilverLuna SILVER, _________, Washington
8 articles 0 photos 230 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Come fairies take me out of this dull world, for I would ride with you upon the wind and dance upon the mountains like a flame.".... W.B. Yeats.
"Flying is learning how to throw yourself at the ground and miss." - Douglas Adams

Hey, loved this...haha, i used to be bookaddict but now i'm on here too. Still love this little piece! Great work! Could you read some of my work too please?(:

on Feb. 5 2010 at 11:35 am
In_Love_Loved PLATINUM, Concord, New Hampshire
24 articles 0 photos 33 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I've lost my faith in so many things but I still believe in you." -Sanctus Real

Hey, sorry it took my so long to get back.

an0nym0u5 GOLD said...
on Jan. 29 2010 at 11:21 am
an0nym0u5 GOLD, Big Lake, Minnesota
12 articles 0 photos 23 comments

Favorite Quote:
"all that glitters is not gold."

thank you! graceling is my fave book<3 yea i do do you?


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