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Raindrops

September 27, 2009
By Vangog SILVER, Sterling, Virginia
Vangog SILVER, Sterling, Virginia
6 articles 0 photos 13 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be who you are and say what you feel, because those who mind don't matter and those who matter don't mind." -Dr. Seuss


I slam the door shut, breathing as heavily as though I’ve just run a mile. My heart is pounding so furiously I fear it will burst, my eyes blink furiously, keeping tears at bay, and my hands are trembling. I can feel it pulsing through me.
It is raging, fighting to get out of me; I don’t know what to do or where to go. I can hide it from everyone, but when I am alone, it catches up to me, tormenting and exhilarating me. The raindrops pound on the windows and lightning flashes, while thunder resounds inside my heart.
I throw myself onto the bed, ignoring the wind which has sprung up, inside and outside. It catches me, lifts me up, whips my hair around. I clap my hands over my ears in agony, trying not to give in to the longing that is so potent; I can almost taste it on my tongue. It nudges me tantalizingly, dancing just out of reach, and I clench my eyes shut in an effort to resist. But I can’t let it go, no matter how hard, how desperately I try—it won’t let me. Its grip on me is so tight, my breathing becomes shallow and I feel light-headed. Resistance is futile.
I leap from the bed, go to the glass doors, throw them open, and run out into the pouring rain. Within seconds, I am soaked, chilled to the bone, but flying, my bare feet hardly touching the ground and my long hair streaming out behind me. My feet carry me to a place I know well, a place I have gone to since I was very small. No one is outside in the rainy twilight, but I keep running, my heart pounding and my legs burning, not stopping even when I reach the woods.
It’s pulling me with a force stronger than a magnet, on and on, until at last, I reach the bridge and skid to a halt, mud spattering my clothes. The creek is swollen, and the freezing water splashes my feet. My heart is in my throat—I take baby steps onto the bridge, gasping for breath, water running down my face, shivering in the cold, my eyes fixed upon the figure waiting there.
He’s here—just as wet, just as cold, but here, smiling as I run to him and he enfolds me in his arms. It is then that my first sob escapes me. I know this can never be. But I am calm; a cloud of bliss surrounds me as we stand there on the bridge, arms around each other, for a long time, keeping the cold at bay while the falling raindrops glint like diamonds around us.



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houston SILVER said...
on Jan. 9 2015 at 10:32 am
houston SILVER, Joburg, Other
6 articles 0 photos 41 comments

Favorite Quote:
I don't know about life, there is too much to it...

the story was so gripping and beautifully written! keep writing!

bluhs said...
on Jun. 26 2012 at 4:14 pm
bluhs, E, Alabama
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It does sound like Katniss and Gale! OMG!

on Apr. 21 2012 at 5:20 pm
Kat4ever333 GOLD, Orange, California
14 articles 35 photos 104 comments

Favorite Quote:
I make dark things beautiful and beautiful things dark!
-Kerli I.L.U

Wow the ending is so not what i expected but I liked reading it there was a great build up.

on Jan. 24 2012 at 8:51 pm
Pianoartist BRONZE, Kechi, Kansas
2 articles 2 photos 16 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Give up.....on me giving up." - Naruto Uzumaki ;)

This was a really good idea considering the fact it was different then what most people write and it was very imaginative and metaphorical. It really draws the reader in and captivates them. The only critisism I have is it maybe could be polished up just a tiny bit :) otherwise wonderful job :)

on Jan. 24 2012 at 4:52 pm
MarissaWhitecloud SILVER, Oskaloosa, Iowa
7 articles 0 photos 84 comments
I loved it! It was beautifully awesome!

on Jan. 19 2012 at 2:42 pm
Goddess PLATINUM, Connellsville, Pennsylvania
27 articles 0 photos 73 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Dream as if you'll live forever, live as if you'll die today.”

thats pretty good

on Jan. 2 2012 at 7:45 pm
amanda1997 BRONZE, Yuma, Arizona
3 articles 0 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Two things are infinate: the universe and human stupidity;and I'm not sure about the universe."
-Albert Einstein

reminded me of a book.... Katnis and Gale perhaps? Love it though! =)

on Nov. 21 2011 at 7:49 pm
Jappyalldayeveryday, Detroit, Michigan
0 articles 0 photos 163 comments

Favorite Quote:
They say that good things take time, but really great things happen in the blink of an eye

I want there to be a backstory, it's too incomplete

on Aug. 3 2011 at 2:29 pm
singinginthegardn GOLD, Cowell, Massachusetts
16 articles 2 photos 158 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The role of a writer is not to say what we all can say, but what we are unable to say." ~Anaïs Nin

Really, really good job :) I could feel the current...the magnet pulling me as well. Congratulations <3! PLEASE check out my work, mayhaps? Keep writing!!!!!

on Oct. 21 2010 at 4:41 pm
this is so good! i like how it doesnt tell why shes in that mess. it leaves space for the reader to imagine. keep it up!

on Jul. 20 2010 at 8:44 am
deus-ex-machina14 BRONZE, Stewartsville, New Jersey
1 article 0 photos 439 comments

Favorite Quote:
"There are two main tragedies in life. One is not getting what one wants, and the other is getting it." -Oscar Wilde

That's so beautiful, you're very talented! You should definitely make it into a novel and build a really good story around it. Great:D

Vangog SILVER said...
on Jul. 2 2010 at 3:02 pm
Vangog SILVER, Sterling, Virginia
6 articles 0 photos 13 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be who you are and say what you feel, because those who mind don't matter and those who matter don't mind." -Dr. Seuss

Thank you!! :)

Vangog SILVER said...
on Jul. 2 2010 at 3:02 pm
Vangog SILVER, Sterling, Virginia
6 articles 0 photos 13 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be who you are and say what you feel, because those who mind don't matter and those who matter don't mind." -Dr. Seuss

Hahaha!! Thank you, I'm very glad you like it! :) I honestly wasn't really thinking of expanding it into a novel; I think it's just something I threw out when I was feeling really upset. But I'll think about it :)

necnec said...
on Jun. 28 2010 at 8:46 pm
necnec, Summit, New Jersey
0 articles 0 photos 24 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Malice towards none and charity towards all"

congratulations, that was beautiful, so descriptive.

It was vague yet detailed, you have amazing talent


Luvr_ Books said...
on Jun. 28 2010 at 4:42 pm
u are a beautiful writer. I love it you should make this story into a book. seriously im not joking. I love it when i read it its like im actually there, and it is amazing.  love it! Can you please make this into a book? I would be very happy if i was in borders and I saw this book! PLEASE WITH CHERRIES ON TOP! (AND IF YOU DONT LIKE CHERRIES) PLEASE WITH SOMETHING YOU LIKE A LOT ON TOP! :)

on May. 15 2010 at 7:46 pm
TheColorRose BRONZE, Springfield, Illinois
3 articles 2 photos 25 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Live deliberately." Live infinitely.
-Thoreau

incredible:) the simplicity makes it all the better. and i liked the way you described the river as "swollen." keep writing:)

on Apr. 24 2010 at 8:33 pm
Shannon_Bananon, Loveland, Ohio
0 articles 0 photos 49 comments

Favorite Quote:
About talking; why don't people ever think before they talk? It would save so much trouble; it would also save me from wanting to slap about half of the world's population.
~Fictional Character (Brilliant, but, sadly, fake.)

So descriptive. I was practically shivering as you described her flight, and suspensful atmosphere kept me on the edge. Beautiful!

Vangog SILVER said...
on Apr. 4 2010 at 2:17 pm
Vangog SILVER, Sterling, Virginia
6 articles 0 photos 13 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be who you are and say what you feel, because those who mind don't matter and those who matter don't mind." -Dr. Seuss

Thank you!! I'll be sure to take a look at it :)

on Apr. 1 2010 at 7:09 pm
DreamWriter17 PLATINUM, Marengo, Indiana
34 articles 1 photo 682 comments

Favorite Quote:
learn from your past to live for the future.

I saw nothing wrong with it!

on Apr. 1 2010 at 4:44 pm
writergirl13 GOLD, Cherry Hill, New Jersey
11 articles 8 photos 261 comments

Favorite Quote:
All are lunatics, but he who can analyze his delusions is called a philosopher.
Ambrose Bierce

Oh, and please look at some of my work, especially Fantasy of Many, Reality of Few, that's also a romance piece. :)


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