How did you know

September 8, 2009
By liltrinhle SILVER, Raleigh, North Carolina
liltrinhle SILVER, Raleigh, North Carolina
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As soon as I took a seat on that Ferris-wheel, somehow you jumped right on, knowing that I needed some company that night. At first I frowned and said I wanted to be alone and I don’t ride with strangers. But then you laughed at me and took a seat anyway. We ended up talking and I was glad we rode together. How did you know that was just what I needed? When we got off the Ferris-wheel you asked if I wanted some cotton candy and I said, "Sure." We ended up eating two big ones. How did you know? How did you know that I love cotton candy?



When you got the nerve to ask me out on a date for the first time, instead of picking the traditional classic ‘dinner and a movie’, you took me on a walk around the lake and we both got to feed the ducks. That was the first time you held my hand. When your fingers touched mine, my heart beat a thousand times faster. I felt a rush running up and down my spine and chills all over my body. My hands were shaky, I think you noticed that because you smiled—that smile that you give when you know something, a secret. It took me about thirty seconds to realize I had that big stupid grin spread across my face. I remember your hands under mine and bread in the center of my palms, you whispered in my ear, “It’s alright, they won’t bite.” I giggled because I thought it tickled when the baby duck ate out of my hand. You simply shook your head and smiled at me. That smile that I have to keep on telling myself to breathe every time I see it.



I remember when I didn’t make the cast list for the play I auditioned for, you were there for me. You held me close as I cried, and you told me that everything was going to be okay, and I would get another chance soon. Then you took me out to get some ice cream. You made me get vanilla instead of chocolate because you thought I needed to try something new. After about twenty minutes of convincing, I finally gave in. I smiled and without a doubt, admitted that I loved it. You smiled, kissed my forehead, and said “I knew you would.” How did you know that? How did you always know what to do to make me smile?



That one time when I had to cancel our date two hours in advance. Something important came up and I had to babysit. I was ready for you to be mad at me—But no: You were so understanding, and it was almost unreal to me. You showed up at my doorstep with some Mac ‘n Cheese and two Disney classics, Peter Pan and The Aristocats. You wanted to help me babysit, and we watched the movies together with the kids. You didn’t mind at all. Why were you so understanding?



That Saturday, we were going home from the art museum you had taken me to. You stopped in the middle of nowhere, took my hand, and told me to follow you. We stopped at this huge apple tree, and as I reached for the apple within my reach, you stopped my hand. You climbed as high as you could and got me the apple from way up there. You told me apples that apples were within reach weren’t always good. You said apples were at the top were hard to get but it were worth it, and that they were always the best, and that I deserved the best. You were right about the apple tasting better. It was the best apple I’ve ever had. And in that apple, I realized I tasted love, and that I was in love with you. I was teary, and you laughed at me for being such a girl. Then you pulled me to your chest, lifted my chin, and kissed me.



Our first fight was over something silly. I don’t even remember what it was about. But what I do remember is that it was mostly my fault. I remember hanging up on you, slamming the door in your face, and yelling over the phone. How were you always so calm and never yelled at me? I remember crying. And when I got home, I opened the door, and the words 'I'm Sorry' were written out with candles on the floor. You came up from behind me with two boxes of cotton candy. How did you always manage to win my heart?


It was track season again, and you had to get in shape. I remember begging you to come and wake me up to go on a morning run with you. You told me that I wouldn’t be able to handle a three-mile run, but I begged and begged and did my best to convince you. Then the next morning you were at my house at 4:30 AM. I was so excited, but I complained that I had no make up on. You kissed my eyelids, messed my hair up a little, and told me I looked beautiful anyway. I was so excited, I told you that this three-mile run is no pressure and that was sure I could keep up with your all-star, long-distance running legs. But then to my disappointment, after one mile I was so out of breath. You laughed, and we found a bench. I sat and waited for you to finish the rest of your run. After that, I refused to go running with you, but sometimes you convinced me to walk with you the first mile, and that I was always willing to do.



But you’re not here anymore. I heard somewhere that sometimes when something too painful happens, we force ourselves to forget and trick ourselves into believing it never happened. I guess whoever said that was right, because I don’t even remember what happened. The only thing I can recall was riding in the ambulance holding your hand and… and everything else was a blur. I’m sorry that sometimes I could be a real pain and that I hurt you¬—I didn’t mean to. You were the best thing that ever happened to me. Every day I spent with you was my new favorite day. You taught me love. You believed in me when no one else did. You had faith in me when I didn’t even have faith in myself. I can still hear your soft whisper ringing in my ear, “Don’t be afraid to dream, and live. You have a big heart that will take you further than the Himalayas.” How did you know that? We have so many memories, and I promise I’ll never forget them. You are a part of me now. I love you, always and forever. Rest in peace my angel.


The author's comments:
This is a new style I'm trying out. I usually write with lots of conversations and names, but I decided to do something new and focus more on details and imagery. I hope you guys like it! Please rate and comment and tell me what you think!!

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KenzyK said...
on Oct. 11 2011 at 5:59 pm
This is so good! You are an amazing writter and this made my eyes water. This was so thoughtful, it wasnt surprising to me that he was going to die, because all good things have to come to an end.

on Oct. 11 2011 at 11:27 am
ViralGirl BRONZE, Springfield, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
"No man can be called friendless who has God and the companionship of good books."
- Elizabeth Barrett Browning

Oh, God.  I'm crying my eyes out.  This was so freaking gorgeous.

zoid123 GOLD said...
on Oct. 11 2011 at 9:53 am
zoid123 GOLD, Charlotte, Vermont
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Favorite Quote:
Trying to be someone your not is a waste of the person you currently are.

That was amazing and so thoughtful. It spoke to me so much. I give it five stars.!!

 


on Sep. 22 2011 at 12:29 am
Mangojuice BRONZE, Seoul, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Yeah you did, you did a lot.

I'm not crying... I'm not crying... I told you I'm not crying... actually, I am. They should make this into a short movie or something

on Sep. 19 2011 at 12:57 am
nikkigonefishin GOLD, Los Angeles, California
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Favorite Quote:
" A smile is worth a thousand words"
" The purpose of the writer is to keep civilization from destroying itself."- Albert Camus

This seriously brought tears to my eyes. No other poem here on TI has done that to me before. Incredible imagery by the way:)

on Aug. 28 2011 at 11:38 pm
_Maddieb PLATINUM, Carlisle, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
How will you ever reach the stars ; if you're too afraid to try.

That was so amazing. I wish I knew how he died though !

Nala96 BRONZE said...
on Aug. 28 2011 at 8:51 pm
Nala96 BRONZE, Ceres, California
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That was so beautiful!!! The characters feel real and alive! Very well done! :)

on Aug. 28 2011 at 6:55 pm
peacelovenharmony SILVER, Bay Village, Ohio
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This is a memorable story and has unforgettable characters.

on Aug. 28 2011 at 6:41 pm
billgamesh11 BRONZE, Grafton, Massachusetts
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That was beautiful! This really should have been put in the magazine!!! IT WAS AMAZING!!! Why can't every boy be like that? But even though it WAS so good,     -DreamForever- has brought up a good point: We have no idea how he died. But i guess she didn't really remember, but you could've clued us in a little with a statement like -DreamForever- said. But still, it was amazing!!! DEFINITELY going on my Favorites List!!! Keep up the excellent work!!!:):):);)


on Aug. 28 2011 at 1:01 pm
lovemenot PLATINUM, Port Angeles, Washington
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This is the most beautiful piece of writing I have ever read. You a have a gift with the written word.

on Aug. 28 2011 at 8:18 am
-BeautifulFeet- PLATINUM, Maysville, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
"Imagination is more important than knowledge. Knowledge is limited, imagination encircles the world."

I'm crying right now. I love your imagery and description. The only thing that bothered me was that we didn't know how the boy died. I know you said it was kind of all the blur, that she didn't remember, but you could have put something like "One minute he was climbing up the tree to get me an apple, the next he was on the ground." I'm sure that's not what happened, but it's just an example of a fuzzy ending that still informs the reader a little. But overall it was great. 

on Aug. 28 2011 at 7:16 am
iW0ntRunThisTime BRONZE, Paris, Other
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a-ma-zing :P

cookiegirl said...
on Aug. 28 2011 at 12:57 am
Wow. Your description and imagery is amazing. Your style is amazing:)

-Duckie- GOLD said...
on Aug. 22 2011 at 9:22 pm
-Duckie- GOLD, West Fargo, North Dakota
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Favorite Quote:
Your heart is a weapon the size of your fist. Keep fighting. Keep loving.
-Anonymous

The ending sure dropped a bomb! Fantastic! This is a good style of writing for you!

on Aug. 8 2011 at 11:58 pm
MiNdLeSsLuVeRgIrL BRONZE, Kenly, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
If you love something let it go, if it comes back its yours if it doesn't, it never was!

Three syllables a-maz-ing I absoulutly love it

on Aug. 8 2011 at 2:40 pm
DanielleK BRONZE, Palm Bay, Florida
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Considering this is a new style for you I think you did incredible. You should really continue to write like this. More practice the better it'll be.

Brizzy said...
on Aug. 6 2011 at 8:49 pm
omg! that was amazing, my eyes were creating waves down my face!

on Aug. 6 2011 at 2:33 pm
traveler03 GOLD, San Juan, Texas
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This is a memorable story and has unforgettable characters.

on Aug. 6 2011 at 1:39 pm
This is absolutely beautiful.  I love this style and you can really do it, please continue!

withAMO GOLD said...
on Aug. 6 2011 at 1:35 pm
withAMO GOLD, Satellite Beach, Florida
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i agree. the describtions were perfect, but u still need some dialogue. keep working on it, it's a beautiful story!


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