She's a lady

August 13, 2009
By Anonymous

Whatever happened to chilvary? I thought as the bus driver pulled to a complete stop in front of the High School, I was jerked in each direction as everyone slammed off the bus.
I was the last one off, I knew I would be, I was after all the weakest link.
Stepping onto the school grounds I smiled, I had made it this far hadn't I?
Here I come, DrownWood High. I said silently in my mind and my words backfired, because when I looked up too take a deep breath I was knocked too the ground by a hurling football, and a six foot giant.
"dude, did you kill her?" a guy said as the giant football player stood up.
A large gust of air broke through me and I gasped.
"no she's fine." the huge guy said and ran off.
I sat up my head rushing, I looked every which direction, my eyes slowly focusing.
No one seemed too be looking at me, I was a outcast after all, I blew out a sigh, then stood and brushed off, rubbing my head.
I looked over too the front doors but something caught my eye by the willow tree.
It was a guy, and he was staring at me with concern, I stared back, his eye widened slightly as if he were shocked I saw him, then a finger tapped on my shoulder.
"Are you alright,KaDee?" Vyctorea asked seriously.
I'd known Vyctorea for ten years and she was one of the most serious people I knew, I watched as she blew a strand of auburn hair out of her eyes.
"I'm fine." I said then looked over to were the boy was he still gazed over at me. "do you know who that is?"
"who?" Vyc inquired.
"Him..." I murmured pointing, she looked.
"there's no one there, KaDee." she said a eyebrow raised.
"He's right there." I argued.
"maybe you bumped your head harder then you thought." Vyc said softly.
"Calling me crazy?"
"yes."
I glared but then the bell rang and the arguement was put too a stand still.


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on Dec. 27 2011 at 6:05 pm
Jappyalldayeveryday, Detroit, Michigan
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They say that good things take time, but really great things happen in the blink of an eye

Interesting...

ILYx3 said...
on Dec. 5 2011 at 7:13 am
ILYx3, Sydney, Other
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Wait so the guy is dead? :o

on Jul. 4 2011 at 12:03 pm
Stpaulian BRONZE, Kewadin, Michigan
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Bad Spellers of the world 'untie'.

Gosh it was great! I really like that her friend can't see him.

BreeLee BRONZE said...
on May. 21 2011 at 7:54 pm
BreeLee BRONZE, Springdale, Arkansas
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I'm shocked this is still popular. D: I wrote it such a long time ago!

KellyR GOLD said...
on Apr. 29 2011 at 1:02 pm
KellyR GOLD, Richmond, Virginia
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We don't read and write poetry because it's cute. We read and write poetry because we are members of the human race. And the human race is filled with passion. And medicine, law, business, engineering, these are noble pursuits and necessary to sustain life. But poetry, beauty, romance, love, these are what we stay alive for.

I really like where you are going with this. Spend some time on it, and watch your grammar. Also, spending more time making your sentences flow would help. Keep writing! I want to see this plot expand! =)

on Feb. 22 2011 at 7:28 pm
musicsinmysoul SILVER, Clermont, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
"I see my brothers giving their hearts away, and I think, Don't you know better? Hearts can be broken."
-Isabelle Lightwood

Oooh, I love that series! I can't wait until City of Fallen Angels comes out.

theLJ said...
on Dec. 18 2010 at 8:56 pm
theLJ, Somewhere, Iowa
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Please, please write more! I want to know if he's real!!!

on Dec. 18 2010 at 6:58 pm
vikesfan28 GOLD, Genoa, Nevada
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Favorite Quote:
I'm still a geek on the inside, that's the important thing.









-Wierd Al Yankovic

haha invisible people! I LOVE it!!  Ever read the Mortal Instruments series by Cassandra Clare?  They begin with invisible people too!!  :D keep it up!

on Dec. 18 2010 at 2:14 pm
MyFairyTaleEnding SILVER, Villa Ridge, Missouri
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I love this!!! Please write more!

on Nov. 26 2010 at 10:07 pm
SilverBeam BRONZE, IGH, Minnesota
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Favorite Quote:
"Depression isn't enjoyable. It feels as if there's a thousand pound weight on you. You feel like your heart will crack at any moment; so you sit and you pray it won't be in front of the guy that caused it."

Please write more! :)

on Nov. 4 2010 at 11:17 pm
Novelist05 BRONZE, -, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"Live like you're going to die tomorrow and Learn like you're going to live forever"

Is he real?

And that "Did u kill her" part was funny.

Keep writing :)


alibi SILVER said...
on Oct. 13 2010 at 5:40 pm
alibi SILVER, Corry, Pennsylvania
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"I'm always positive, except when I'm not."

please write more!!!

on Jun. 25 2010 at 8:58 am
OfficialApprover PLATINUM, Orefield, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
Grab life by the balls. -Slobberknocker
We cannot change the cards we're dealt just how we play the hand
Experience is what you get when you didn't get what you wanted
It's pretty easy to be smart when you're parroting smart people
-Randy Pausch

And btw, anyone who sees this, will you check out and comment on my work?

on Jun. 13 2010 at 7:53 pm
JamieStarr GOLD, Sevierville, Tennessee
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o! thats why i love you. :) i love you.

this was a very neat writing. it was very cool. was this for real  like did this actually see him or was it just made up?

 


on Jun. 3 2010 at 6:23 pm
KC-Dimples BRONZE, Vancouver, Washington
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Favorite Quote:
"SMILE... If you're naked!"

I think you have a good idea for this writing piece, but your writing style seems almost cheesy. Clean up your grammer a bit, and make sure you're using good word choices. I noticed you wrote "after all" twice, which would be ok if this writing piece was longer, but since it's shorter, it makes this short story unsmooth. The sentances arn't spaced far enough apart to flow correctly in your writing, so it just makes you look repetative. I like your idea, though, so continue writing. :)

on Jun. 3 2010 at 10:03 am
banditclover BRONZE, Saint Louis, Missouri
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Yeah, same. :) Good story!

on Jun. 3 2010 at 7:24 am
OfficialApprover PLATINUM, Orefield, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
Grab life by the balls. -Slobberknocker
We cannot change the cards we're dealt just how we play the hand
Experience is what you get when you didn't get what you wanted
It's pretty easy to be smart when you're parroting smart people
-Randy Pausch

Great story, just watch your grammar

 


on May. 15 2010 at 2:20 pm
Bella913 SILVER, New City, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"Death is easy, living is harder."

really good. and write more

Kat2292 BRONZE said...
on May. 12 2010 at 9:21 pm
Kat2292 BRONZE, Canfield, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
"If at first you don't succeed, call it version 1.0." ~Mark
"Life's like a novel with the end ripped out." ~Rascal Flatts

I completely agree!!! I love the beginning, very creative! I can't wait to read more!!

callmeIN GOLD said...
on May. 12 2010 at 5:23 pm
callmeIN GOLD, Atlanta, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
‘Maybe Richard will find another way. Just tell him, Alice. Tell him that his own Confessor never stopped loving him. And that if he can’t undo the magic, if he can’t return to her then, she’ll be waiting for him, in the Underworld. Forever.’
-Mother Confessor Kahlan Amnell,
Legend of the Seeker

you are so right!  I really didn't get the point of this.




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