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Loving you is like wanting death Ep. 1

August 27, 2009
By iPonder GOLD, Elk Grove, California
iPonder GOLD, Elk Grove, California
14 articles 0 photos 21 comments

Favorite Quote:
The bad things happen first,then the good things, then more bad things, then more good things: God helps us through the bad things so we can enjoy the good ones. :)


She tried to strike him with her bare fleshed hand. He grabbed it in mid air. "Would you like to try again?" he asked with a dark smirk across his face. Yes! She screamed within herself. She hated him and everything he did to her. She loved him but hated everything about him. He killed her hope of her father coming back to her. She looked away from the hard-chisseled face that captured her in such a trance many times before. "He will come back. He loves me, which is more than what I can say about you!" I shifted away from him. He crossed his arms and began to sigh. He leaned on the fireplace as i sat down on the piano in the middle of the living room. I shuffled through the sheet music and found a symphony from Beethoven's 3rd. I began to play. my fingers gently touching the ancient piece. I could feel his eyes burning a hole through my head. He who stole me away in the middle of the night just to tell me that my father's return was hopeless and just a fairytale. Yes, I hated him. I suddenly didnt feel the urge to play anymore and finished the symphony with my own made up tune. I gently closed the piano and walked to the door to exit this treacherous place he was trying to keep me captive in. He glided in front of the door and leaned on the handle. His face was now serious and stricken with frustration. "For the last time your not going anywhere. So sit now." he brushed his hand through his black hair and lowered his eyes at me. "Move." I said in a husk voice. It was five in the morning i had no time for this. He smiled well more of a sinical smile then a happy-go-lucky one. Jackass. "Make me." He crossed his arms back in place and began to hum the same tune i played a minmute ago. "You arrogant-" I stopped myself. "Fine Ill move you." I spoke in a low whisper. His eyes fluttered as I moved closer to him. His breath and mine lingered together as we breathed in eachothers scent. I skimmed my lips across his. He backed up. Yeah wasnt expecting that one now were you. I kept repeating that in my head. I had the control not him. He lowered his arms and then grabbed me by the waist pulling me closer to him. His rock solid chest against mine. He bit my lower lip and then devoured my lips with a need that he must have been holding back for all this time. It was our first but not our last kiss.


The author's comments:
I enjoy listening to deep and loud hard rock and love techno and alternative. Speaking as one of MANY girls who wear their hearts on their sleeves, I try to channel my feelings for a person in words, which turns into poems.

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on Mar. 4 2010 at 1:22 pm
Dutchess BRONZE, Leland, North Carolina
1 article 0 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
The least deviation from truth is multiplied later a thousand fold.
~Alexander Hamilton

Great start to a good story. if i could add a peice of constructive criticsm, don't change from 3rd person to 1st person. stay consitent. and your reader won't get so confused

on Mar. 4 2010 at 11:22 am
Darkchloe14 BRONZE, Memphis, Tennessee
1 article 0 photos 25 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be Strong"

So CUUUUTE!! And it doesnt need much else like everyone else has been posting. Just watch you're grammar. ;)

RoseRed said...
on Mar. 4 2010 at 10:35 am
I cant believe how romantic it was i loved it and i want more!

on Feb. 21 2010 at 9:59 pm
AmazingGrace88 GOLD, Lake Oswego, Oregon
13 articles 0 photos 25 comments

Favorite Quote:
No boys are worth your tears,
and the ones who are wont make you cry.

i love it!!!!!! this makes me so hungry for more keep wrighting you have talent!

twiwrite GOLD said...
on Feb. 19 2010 at 2:32 pm
twiwrite GOLD, Modesto, California
14 articles 0 photos 111 comments

Favorite Quote:
none :P

wow is there more???

on Feb. 10 2010 at 12:19 pm
JohnnyDeppLover123 DIAMOND, Holyoke, Massachusetts
54 articles 0 photos 146 comments

Favorite Quote:
Be not afraid of greatness: some are born great, some achieve greatness, and some have greatness thrust upon them.
William Shakespeare

please please please write more!!!

on Feb. 10 2010 at 12:18 pm
JohnnyDeppLover123 DIAMOND, Holyoke, Massachusetts
54 articles 0 photos 146 comments

Favorite Quote:
Be not afraid of greatness: some are born great, some achieve greatness, and some have greatness thrust upon them.
William Shakespeare

one word: AMAZING!!! well actually two words: AWESOME!!! ; ]

on Jan. 29 2010 at 8:37 pm
lily1411 BRONZE, Fargo, North Dakota
2 articles 0 photos 69 comments

Favorite Quote:
Absence sharpens love, presence strengthens it.

--Benjamin Franklin

yea, i'm wondering about that too...

erika4964 said...
on Jan. 29 2010 at 9:48 am
ME TOO!!! This story was so good it gave me goosebumps!! Please write more!!

on Jan. 19 2010 at 6:26 pm
LeslieAnn BRONZE, Midvale, Utah
1 article 0 photos 47 comments

Favorite Quote:
\\\\\\\"Dream as if you\\\\\\\'ll live forever, Live as if you\\\\\\\'ll die today\\\\\\\" \\\\\\\"Life is not about waiting for the storms to pass, its about learning to dance in the rain.\\\\\\\"

It was good and I want to read more, question, you swithched POV's at the beginning, did you do it intentionally?

on Jan. 19 2010 at 5:11 pm
xxxVanessaxxx SILVER, Alexander, Arkansas
9 articles 0 photos 66 comments

Favorite Quote:
"i CaNt Be AwAy fRoM hEr BeLlA, iT hUrTs ToO mUcH." (Jacob from the breaking dawn book)

wait, wait, wait, wait!!! where'd the rest of it go?!?!?! (starting to panic) eek! gotta find it now! gotta finish this story! have to know what happens!!!

on Jan. 19 2010 at 4:55 pm
really cool. i'm slightly confused as to why you switched POVs during the beginning... more please, though!

on Jan. 19 2010 at 3:28 pm
imnotjaye SILVER, Los Angeles, California
6 articles 0 photos 22 comments

Favorite Quote:
"We live in an age when unnecessary things are our only necessities."
Oscar Wilde
Irish dramatist, novelist, & poet (1854 - 1900)

r u insane??!!!??? wers the rest of it??!!??? dont make us wait!!!!

lurve it!! u hav sooo mucho potential but watch out about ur punctuation and sentence structure

on Jan. 19 2010 at 8:19 am
ShrEk..! BRONZE, Jaipur, Other
3 articles 0 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
if ur goin through hell... keep goin!

just luv it..

please continue it.. dnt end it here..

tanaya BRONZE said...
on Jan. 10 2010 at 6:30 pm
tanaya BRONZE, Edison, New Jersey
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I really want to read more! GREAT!

iPonder GOLD said...
on Jan. 8 2010 at 6:26 pm
iPonder GOLD, Elk Grove, California
14 articles 0 photos 21 comments

Favorite Quote:
The bad things happen first,then the good things, then more bad things, then more good things: God helps us through the bad things so we can enjoy the good ones. :)

ahh sorry everybody! ive beennn so out of it lately! i have this whole story written in a notebook. I just havnt had the time to get it all on the computer! But I wont let you down! Thank you for your support! i love your comments sooooo much! hope u had happy holidays!

iPonder GOLD said...
on Jan. 8 2010 at 6:17 pm
iPonder GOLD, Elk Grove, California
14 articles 0 photos 21 comments

Favorite Quote:
The bad things happen first,then the good things, then more bad things, then more good things: God helps us through the bad things so we can enjoy the good ones. :)

  darn   shifters ep 2*

on Dec. 30 2009 at 8:35 pm
LonWolfzHowl BRONZE, Mt.morris, Michigan
3 articles 0 photos 10 comments

Favorite Quote:
Never say the world owes you anything. It was here First!!

wow im like toatlyy amazed i LOVE IT KEEP IT UP!!!!!!

on Dec. 28 2009 at 10:09 pm
littlewriter97, Dover, New Hampshire
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PLZZZ make it into a full fledged book, and can u please alert me wen u become an author??

on Dec. 28 2009 at 8:55 pm
adriannalovesanime GOLD, Reidsville, North Carolina
17 articles 5 photos 19 comments

Favorite Quote:
It's better to be hurt by the truth than to gain satisfaction from the lies.-David Allan

Wo,I love this:D


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