Lily and I

August 25, 2009
By mcrey-rey GOLD, Newbury, Berkshire, Other
mcrey-rey GOLD, Newbury, Berkshire, Other
11 articles 1 photo 2 comments

Sometimes when he is with Lily things aren’t quite 3D. For Lily he can become soft plastic and mould himself to fill her every crevice. He bends but never breaks because what Lily needs and wants is easiest of all to give. Flowers sometimes. Putting them into her blushing hands is like saying thank you. Watching her balance on one foot to put them in a vase is as consuming as a kiss. It is a beauty only he sees. Or so he thinks. He likes to think no one can appreciate the modest grey eyes, the rhythmic drumming of her elegant fingers like he can. He enjoys needing her.

Lily enjoys wanting him. Lily appreciates the lingering leers, the back breaking love. She thinks she does. Her beauty is selfish. Lily keeps her eyes open when they kiss. The flowers she puts out for her friends to admire. Lily wants to be able to say “Oh that? Just something he dropped round”. Lily sees him contort to place himself between her and the door, sliding it shut with his foot. She feels flattened.

Symbolic. Sinister.
Lily lets him do it.

The author's comments:
This is based on a painting I saw of a man floating and twisting round to kiss woman. I found the piece unnerving (due to the dull colouring mostly) and wanted to give the characters voices.

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on Mar. 31 2012 at 6:59 pm
Allicat001 SILVER, Waukesha, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
"Love is not someone you can live with, love is someone you can't live without."

"Always stand up for what's right even if that means you're standing alone."

Short and sweet, good job:)

on Feb. 16 2012 at 8:57 am
Miranda_K. BRONZE, Donora, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
I am only one, but still I am one; I cannot do everything but still I can do something; and because I cannot do everything I will not refuse to do something I can do.







~ Edward E. Hale

Fantastic, well written, descriptive, I loved everything about it

on Dec. 12 2011 at 11:48 pm
DreamInTheRain SILVER, Nevada City, California
5 articles 1 photo 27 comments

Favorite Quote:
Music, It Runs Through My Veins Like A River, Lyrics Flow To The Beat Of Sound.

I also got confused at the end... Why did he put himself in between them?

on Nov. 20 2011 at 8:55 am
Jappyalldayeveryday, Detroit, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
They say that good things take time, but really great things happen in the blink of an eye

It had nice descriptions of human character, but I honestly wasn't touched in any way by this piece, I think because it didn't have enough details and background about the characters.

peacerocks said...
on Oct. 7 2011 at 10:19 am
This story was great and absolutely beautiful! It was a little short however...... I would read more of this!;)

on Aug. 24 2011 at 8:21 pm
RedheadAtHeart ELITE, Mountain Home, Idaho
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Favorite Quote:
Love with open hands. - Madeleine L'Engle

That is absolutely beautiful. I'm so impressed. This piece has it all, talent, originality, fresh voice...need I go on? :)

on Jul. 11 2011 at 12:38 pm
loveibanez BRONZE, Maumee, Ohio
4 articles 1 photo 63 comments

Favorite Quote:
"When you get to the end of your rope, tie a knot and hang on!" -Ben Franklin

this was amazing. its good to finally see some quality work in the romance section, i loved how you were inspired by a painting and your word choice & the flow of your sentences was perrrrfect! great job

on Mar. 23 2011 at 11:20 pm
heiwagirl SILVER, Enumclaw, Washington
6 articles 0 photos 12 comments

Favorite Quote:
You just have to live your life not careing what they think and just shake off the drama and prove to them that you are better than they think you are.

fantastic! great! amzing! wonderful! beautiful! the list goes on and on :)

tanaya BRONZE said...
on Feb. 11 2011 at 3:07 pm
tanaya BRONZE, Edison, New Jersey
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that was amazing!

on Oct. 20 2010 at 9:04 pm
Rainbowmadhatter, Reno, Nevada
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his was really great but i got confused on the last line... when u were talking about him putting himself between her and the front door and him closing it with his foot and u said she let him

 did u mean that he left her but she let him go?


on Jun. 10 2010 at 11:31 pm
Syarra_Greenwood BRONZE, Andover, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
Smile, happy looks good on you!!! ( :

AMAZING! thats the only word to descirbe this peice

on May. 19 2010 at 10:33 pm
PoetLaureate07 PLATINUM, Aberdeen, Mississippi
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Favorite Quote:
To love is to risk not being loved in return. To hope is to risk pain. To try is to risk failure, but the greatest hazard in life is to risk nothing..

i agree... does he love her because of something bad?? maybe he dont love her for anything but her body... she dont love him.. i got tht much... but please explain...

on May. 19 2010 at 4:57 pm
SilverLuna SILVER, _________, Washington
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Favorite Quote:
"Come fairies take me out of this dull world, for I would ride with you upon the wind and dance upon the mountains like a flame.".... W.B. Yeats.
"Flying is learning how to throw yourself at the ground and miss." - Douglas Adams

This fantastic! I loved it completely...great work!

 


on Apr. 5 2010 at 12:37 am
DreamWriter17 PLATINUM, Marengo, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
learn from your past to live for the future.

Oh no!  That's so.......what's the word for it?  Sad....angry.....emotional.....wicked......realistic....

Beautiful.


PlainJane GOLD said...
on Mar. 14 2010 at 9:10 pm
PlainJane GOLD, Notown, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
...understand that the heart is as vast and wide as the universe, but that we come to know love best from here, this place of gravity and stability, where our feet can still touch ground.

I am soo sorry! But I do not understand this. It was beautiful, really it was. But I don't understand Lily's perspective. Could anyone explain?

on Feb. 20 2010 at 3:58 pm
Mykindapeopledontcarewhatyouthink BRONZE, Gueydan, Louisiana
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Beautiful, i love the way you started it

on Feb. 20 2010 at 8:59 am
fyreflies BRONZE, Randolph, Wisconsin
4 articles 0 photos 47 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't cry because it's over. Smile because it happened." Doctor Suess
"Oh, of course it doesn't hurt to slide in softball." (before I tore up both knees and before I slapped that person)
"Stay with me here now/And never surrender" Skillet

WHOA!!!!! wow. Totally amazing.

mads942 SILVER said...
on Jan. 29 2010 at 10:30 pm
mads942 SILVER, Houston, Texas
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Extremely unconventional, well-written, and gorgeous! Wow!

on Jan. 29 2010 at 8:08 pm
lily1411 BRONZE, Fargo, North Dakota
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Favorite Quote:
Absence sharpens love, presence strengthens it.

--Benjamin Franklin

loved this:) one of the best, and i admire how you got all of that from a painting...I also enjoy paintings, i think I know the one youre talking bout

on Jan. 29 2010 at 3:10 pm
FlamingTaco1479 SILVER, Spring Mills, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
"When life gives you lemons, hold onto them. They're free lemons!"

I love this. I love the subject matter and I love the imagery and I love the characters. You are phenominal.




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