Love at First Sight

August 6, 2009
By JulieBennett BRONZE, Oxford, New Jersey
JulieBennett BRONZE, Oxford, New Jersey
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Molly was a shy girl, yet she had a presence that drew people to her like a magnet. That’s what Tom felt the first time he laid eyes on her. It was mid November when he saw her for the first time. They had been in school together for a little over three months and he never knew she existed until now. There had been a constant flurry of snow for the past hour but the white fluff wasn’t able to stick to the hard ground. Molly was perched on a stone column that was adjacent to the steps and was surrounded by a herd of guys. She was wearing a gray sweatshirt that looked brand new from where Tom was standing.
Although her cheeks and nose were red from the cold, and her brown hair was knotted from the snowy gusts, he still thought she was the most beautiful girl he had ever seen. The closer he walked toward her the more he noticed the little things that made her beautiful. Her face was a perfect oval shape and each of her features we’re perfectly placed on it like a canvas. Two rosy lips were located a flawless distance between her nose and her chin. Despite all the beautiful attributes Molly possessed, her eyes were by far the most striking.
Each eye was like a different ocean of blues and greens. They looked almost as if an artist painted them on, but Tom knew nobody could ever possess enough talent to replicate them. He slowly got lost in her eyes, and every time she laughed or smiled they glistened in the light and sucked him in more and more. Tom stood there for a few more moments, taking in everything that he was seeing. Than, it was time for him to go, and he secretively whispered ‘goodbye’ to the girl he would never see again.

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on Jul. 31 2011 at 9:10 pm
Odessa_Sterling00 DIAMOND, No, Missouri
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All gave some, some gave all. -War Veterans headstone.

Love the description in this!  Great job.

on Sep. 30 2009 at 10:18 am
Those are the exact questions that came to my mind when I read this! But what I'm thinking is he dying is he moving committing suicide u have to consider all those options does she have a bf is SHE moving?

on Aug. 10 2009 at 6:45 pm
unearthlyhaphazard GOLD, N/A, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"There are three rules for writing the novel. Unfortunately, no one knows what they are."~W. Somerset Maugham

Lots of description, and the imagery is exceptionally powerful. However, I'm a bit confused. Why won't Tom ever see her again? They go to the same school, don't they? What I'm really saying is that it seems more of a beginning than an actual story. Consider expanding it! Anyhow, good job!

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