Thunderstorm

March 30, 2009
By bcookie PLATINUM, Ashville, Ohio
bcookie PLATINUM, Ashville, Ohio
27 articles 5 photos 46 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Don't cry because it's over, smile because it happened.”


I look around in the quiet darkness. Sitting under my bed, I’m afraid. The frame of the bed gives me the familiar feeling of a hug. A deep sense of security.

I bet you know that feeling. The one that clouds your mind, washing away all that you know. Just like the furious rain outside the window. Staggering light flashes in the sea of stars. You wonder who turned it on. Didn’t they know it hurt? Not so much physically, but mentally. Then, there’s the unsteady beating of the drum. Can they turn it down? With each crash, each flash, your heart beats wildly. You wonder if the wind will carry you away.

The truth is, you’re terrified. The bright life that was at your finger tips, only a few hours ago, has burned. Will there be a coming day? A new tomorrow? You’ve got to stay awake and see. Soon, your eyes ache, your head heavy. The fortress that protects you and your family, makes unfamiliar noises. The roof creaks and the apple tree scratches at your window like a cat. From your mouth, dances a yawn.

The fluffy pillow is now against your cheek. But across to floor creeps a light. It moves closer and closer enveloping the darkness. Soon, it has diminished the dark shadow. Slowly, you crawl out.

From the vent comes a swirling, wispy wind like fire. Your body feels relaxed. When you peek outside, the sun is awake, and animals are rejoicing. Even the grass looks greener. You think it’s silly now. Of course, there is a tomorrow. We all need a little rain.

Finally, you’re ready for some sleep. It was just a summer storm.


The author's comments:
This story was written for one of my prompts in Power of the Pen. It reminds me of a common childhood fear that all of us can relate to.

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on Feb. 7 2010 at 3:07 pm
bcookie PLATINUM, Ashville, Ohio
27 articles 5 photos 46 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Don't cry because it's over, smile because it happened.”

Thanks! I really tried to capture those emotions. I'm glad you liked it:)

kes82 said...
on Feb. 6 2010 at 4:18 pm
I think everyone knows how it feels to be afraid of a storm. Very, very goo.:)

on Jan. 13 2010 at 4:21 pm
bcookie PLATINUM, Ashville, Ohio
27 articles 5 photos 46 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Don't cry because it's over, smile because it happened.”

I hope that's a good thing!Thanks!

on Jan. 13 2010 at 4:20 pm
bcookie PLATINUM, Ashville, Ohio
27 articles 5 photos 46 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Don't cry because it's over, smile because it happened.”

Thank you! I really appreciate it!

on Dec. 6 2009 at 4:55 pm
bcookie PLATINUM, Ashville, Ohio
27 articles 5 photos 46 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Don't cry because it's over, smile because it happened.”

Thank you so much! I am glad you enjoyed it!

on Dec. 6 2009 at 12:52 pm
Lovebeingloved SILVER, Yucca Valley, California
6 articles 0 photos 8 comments
Wow, that was terrific!! Great Job, I have absolutly nothing negative to say about your writing:)

on Oct. 10 2009 at 2:00 am
EternalMadness GOLD, Fresno, California
13 articles 1 photo 45 comments

Favorite Quote:
They say it's what you make
I say it's up to fate
It's woven in my soul
I need to let you go
Your eyes, they shine so bright
I want to save their light
I can't escape this now
Unless you show me how
When you feel my heat
Look into my eyes
It’s where my demons hide

SImply amazing.

on Jun. 25 2009 at 12:24 pm
shirl yang BRONZE, Hsinchu, Other
2 articles 0 photos 1 comment
I like the way you gradually led into the "theme" of your story, as well as the way you focused on the intangible, the emotions, the impressions, and the abstract parts that come with the experience. Well written

Jodi said...
on Apr. 19 2009 at 4:27 pm
Reminds me of my childhood days. Very good.


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