Lack Of Attention In Everday Drivers

December 15, 2008
By Antonio Miller, Quincy, FL

It was just a normal day on December 1, 2008 and I was leaving from school. I was exhausted and weak due to the fact that I had weightlifting practice. As my dad and I traveled down highway 90, my dad began to break his speed because there was a school bus that stopped ahead. I looked around as we slowed down and approached the bus and other stopped cars. Looking to the left of me , I saw something I see very often; a driver not paying attention while behind the wheel. From the looks of it, the driver was distracted by somthing and their head dropped. I came to the conclusion that maybe they were distracted by smething on the floor. Shortly after that, I noticed that they had'nt broken their seed at all. Suddenly, the driver's head arose but it was too late to slow down, and it happened. BOOM! The car rear ended another car that had stopped behind the school bus. The wreaks impact sounded as if we were in an arena attending a monster truck rally. Glass scattered like loose puzzle pieces, and the back of the opposing vehicle was smashed in like it was made of clay due to force and sped from the other vehicle. The fumes fiels the air as a result of one of the cars gas tanks being cracked. From the looks of it, both vehicles were completely totalled. After witnessing the accident i was speechles and feild with fear. I couldn't believe what I was experiencing right before my eyes. It happened within a blink of an eye. There where nearly 6,420,000 vehicle accidnets in the Untied States in 2005 and the numbers are constantly rising. Many of thoes occurred due to lack of attention.

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on Nov. 9 2010 at 7:22 pm
skyler_anne GOLD, Brewer, Maine
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Favorite Quote:
"what doesn't kill us only makes us stronger"

"Meeting you was fate, becoming your friend was a choice, but falling in love with you I had no control over."

"To give anything less than your best is to sacrifice the gift.” -Pre

spell check next time. but besides that it was a really good piece. what might have been cool is if you took sometime to explain what happened after the accident. did anyone get hurt? was there a fight between the two owners of the cars that were wrecked? but i really did like the story. it makes a good point in how people need to pay more attention when driving.

K.N.E. said...
on May. 20 2010 at 1:21 pm
It was good and i think that you could've made it longer and u need to revise your spelling!! good job though!!! keep on writing

SelahSecrets said...
on Nov. 25 2009 at 8:52 pm
SelahSecrets, Burleson, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"Life is what happens when your busy making other plans."- John Lennon

Spell check! and i felt that you got your point across quite well. You began with a story of your own and used it as evidence to support your main idea. I feel as though you could turn this piece into an introduction and write a story from it, weaving in the message that drivers could be more careful. Job well done. I enjoyed reading your work of art.

EP123 said...
on Dec. 26 2008 at 4:14 pm
two comments- first, spell check and proof read- sloppy spelling makes your work look bad. Second, spend more time making your point- is it that you want readers to realize the importance of being careful, or is it about the trauma you experienced by being a witness? Work the message in throughout the writing! Good luck!


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