Fluttering Heart Beats

October 24, 2012
All The blood is rushing in my ears as I wait for you to stop Talking to your chums.
My mouth and throat goes dry as your friends say there goodbyes and talking about how you'll all hang out later.
'Thump thump'
I finally regain the feeling in my legs and walk up to you letter in hand.
I hand you the letter and smile. I try explaining the letter but my words just stumbled around like word vomit.
'Thump Thump'
You smile and say "Sure." with that adorable smile.
I'm so glad you can come.

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CammyS said...
Oct. 30, 2012 at 7:07 am
You'd probably want to check out some of the grammer  and spelling. And, don't get me wrong, it's great this way, but I don't kow if a poem is the best way to express this story. You shouldn't have to explain it in your sidebar. Maybe a story with more detail would better suit this plot.
LivingXPoet replied...
Nov. 1, 2012 at 5:20 pm
Thanks for the feedback! I'll keep that in mind and I'll try making this into an actual story. :)
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