My Soldiers

November 20, 2011
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They are gone, all of them. I am sad to watch my soldiers leave me. I will miss their warm touch and their beautiful eyes. What eyes, unmoving, that stare into nothing forever more. Yes, I shall miss that very much, but I will truly miss the feeling as the fall into my arms, limp and cold. The way their body arcs as it falls is a wonderful thing. Just the thought of that makes me happy.

Though their bodies leave me, their minds I shall keep. These I will never release, for I deserve them. Long after I am dead, it is these minds that will keep me alive, for these minds will write books, and in these books, I am immortalized. Oh my soldiers, you are so good to me. I love you my soldiers, and may you will always think of me.

I know my soldiers will return, for those are their orders. Though they will groan and hang their heads, I will be delighted to see them. I will embrace them and take them in. My grip will be so tight; none of them will leave me again. They will be with me forever. Forever my soldiers.

I am not a, simply a grave. I am the battlefield.

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Inperfect_Angel said...
Jan. 5, 2012 at 10:31 pm
this is amazing piece truly one of my favorites I have read on this site in the last 20 months.. please keep writing
Donahue8 replied...
Feb. 9, 2012 at 3:04 pm
thank you so much :) i appreciate it!
naughtygirl17 said...
Dec. 2, 2011 at 6:47 pm
i loved it! the ending was amazing!
Donahue8 replied...
Dec. 2, 2011 at 6:53 pm
aww thanks!
swifthearth said...
Nov. 30, 2011 at 7:38 pm

Very good and suspensive, just perfect.


sunshine7223 replied...
Dec. 2, 2011 at 6:38 pm
I love the ending! This is really good! Great job! :))
Donahue8 replied...
Dec. 2, 2011 at 6:54 pm
thanks :) soo much
ByThisBlindingLight said...
Nov. 29, 2011 at 6:11 pm
The last line was perfect ^^ I loved it all
Donahue8 replied...
Nov. 30, 2011 at 5:50 am
thanks so much!!! actualy the last like should say "I am not a killer, simply a grave. I am the battlefield." The word killer somehow got deleted. but thanks means a lot to me. I worked really hard on this.
jcrisp said...
Nov. 29, 2011 at 2:29 pm
wow this is really powerful, really had me surprised with the last line too :)
Donahue8 replied...
Nov. 30, 2011 at 5:51 am

thanks, i tried to make it so you wouldn't be able to tell the narrator till the end.


Loki17 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Nov. 28, 2011 at 7:35 pm
Haunting! At first I thought the speaker was Death... nice twist with the battlefield.  You might want to edit more carefully before posting though.
Donahue8 replied...
Nov. 28, 2011 at 8:52 pm

I think it got a little messed up when i copied it over, like i hit buttons and stuff by mistake


BeyondTheBrooke said...
Nov. 28, 2011 at 5:43 pm
wow really good!
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