Invisible.

August 19, 2011
By dancemaniac GOLD, Mansfield, Texas
dancemaniac GOLD, Mansfield, Texas
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I stroll through the halls, leisurely walking to my next class. I was aware of every person passing me, though they took no notice of me. I smiled at the thought. I could probably do anything I pleased right now. I could perform the most irate things, and it wouldn't matter.
Because I was invisible.
You know those people that as they walk by, everybody - and I mean every single person - turns heads, just to catch a glimpse. You know, the absolutely gorgeous, most popular people. The ones that always have a flock of people surrounding them, wanting numbers, or a date. The ones with way too many people trying to sit at the lunch table.
I was exactly the opposite.
I was the person who people ran into and said, "sorry, didn't see you there," without even bothering to see whose books they knocked to the ground. I was the person who sat in solitary confinement at a lunch table. Nobody noticed me, you see, because I was invisible.
It didn't use to be this way. I used to be real. But then one day everyone turned on me, and soon after that my condition became permanent.
But don't feel sorry for me. Oh no, don't feel the least bit of pity for me. After all, isn't that what high school is all about? Preparing yourself for the real world and all that crap. Plus, who would want to see your mascara run or your make-up ruin because you finally decide to look past the invisibility. That doesn't do at all.
So, you have my permission to continue everything just as it was. And I will continue to cope with the fact that I'm invisible to the world around me. Don't worry about me, I'll be fine.
Ha. Who am I kidding?



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Musika BRONZE said...
on Aug. 24 2011 at 2:21 pm
Musika BRONZE, South Lake Tahoe, California
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Favorite Quote:
"Why does one begin to write? Because she feels misunderstood, I guess. Because it never comes out clearly enough when she tries to speak. Because she wants to rephrase the world, to take it in and give it back again differently, so that everything is used and nothing is lost. Because it's something to do to pass the time until she is old enough to experience the things she writes about."
— Nicole Krauss

This was really nice to read because it was very relatable. And it kind of reminded me of how I feel about high school, how some people are so high-maintenance and don't really seem to care for those who are invisible. Good job. :)

on Aug. 24 2011 at 4:15 am
Garnet77 PLATINUM, Sinagpore, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"Everything's a triangle." ~ My mother

"Write what you love, write what you care about, because sometimes, it's the easiest way to be heard."

Wow. I really like how you went with this one. It was so relatable, the way you wrote it. And casual yet deep. Excellent! :)

on Aug. 23 2011 at 8:56 pm
CarrieAnn13 GOLD, Goodsoil, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"I love deadlines. I like the whooshing sound they make as they fly by." --Douglas Adams

"The object of life is not to be on the side of the majority, but to escape finding oneself in the ranks of the insane." --Marcus Aurelius

Wow, this is another great story!  I love how the main character goes from invisible to being bullied.

paige14 GOLD said...
on Aug. 23 2011 at 8:27 pm
paige14 GOLD, Portsmouth, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
Say what you need to say--John Mayer

This was good! I know exactly how this character felt (I also described it in one of my poems) Once again, a few sentences in this were slightly awkward, but I thought this was better. I really enjoyed it

on Aug. 23 2011 at 8:27 pm
ChocoMint SILVER, Bloomington, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
"Love is like swallowing hot chocolate before it has cooled off. It takes you by surprise at first, but keeps you warm for a long time." - Anonymous

"Love starts with a smile, grows with a kiss and ends with a tear." - Anonymous

I love the unique topic! You can definitely feel the longing for being visible, but the indifference in it as well.  Though I was wondering if you could explain the character's point of view a little more.  It would help me, personally, understand their character.  There were a few grammar issue I caught, but those are easy to fix. All in all, I really liked it.  :+)




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