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There was this guy. And I thought he was perfect, but then I saw his closet. I was in his house because …well that’s not important. His closet’s really big (which I liked) but full of clothes—women’s clothes— and I asked him where these came from and he wouldn’t answer. So I got a little suspicious, right? I mean wouldn’t you? And I made him tell me. What he said was... well I was so disturbed I just walked out right then. I stepped out onto his porch and he comes out and he grabs my arm. And it hurt. But I like to carry a knife just in case because you never know and it’s important to be prepared. Then he was just lying there, and I felt kind of bad, trying to decide whether I should call someone to help him. I’d gotten him in the leg, but it wasn’t bleeding that much, so I just left and after I’d walked about a block I looked back and he was still lying there. He was kind of short and dressed in brown, and if you didn’t know better you would think a dog was curled up in the yard, asleep. So I waved bye to the little doggy and hailed a taxi home.

I guess you can say the other two were my fault. I might have been dating them at the same time; that’s what they said anyway. But I remember calling one of them and saying…well it’s fuzzy. But I don’t think I was quite clear as to how I felt about either, so when one said they wanted to take me to the movies I didn’t have a problem with that. And then the other one called, but I have trouble telling the difference over the phone (they sound very similar); I thought he was the same one. And I asked him for a ride to the theater. So they both end up at the movies and they yell and they scream dramatically. I told them I was going to be late for the movie (I really wanted to see it) and that they could stay and see it or just go home. They both huffed out. As I was leaving I saw them in the coffee shop across the street laughing at something. They looked like they’d known each other for years. So I guess they should be thanking me, right? Because of me, they made a new friend.

I deserve all the blame for the zoo incident.

And then there was that guy who dumped me for a girl in Paris. I don’t even want to talk about it. And the other one…well now I remember to make sure my parents aren’t home. And that it really hurts if you jump out your window.

I’ve actually learned a lot from them. I know how to change my clothes without undressing, which movie theaters will let you sneak in drinks, and the foods that will always leave a mess— no matter how hard you try to be neat.

Earlier today me and my friend, Anna, talked about something. She wanted to know something serious. She asked me, why do you see them? That guy and this guy and the other guy. The normal ones and the strange ones and the ones that you just don't understand? Why do you date them? Is it fun?

Fun…? I said. No, usually it's annoying. I don't like any of them enough for it to be fun. And even when I do it doesn't last. Then the fun's gone, and it just hurts.
She asked, Then are you looking for love?

I said, I don't think you can look for it.

But isn't that what you're doing? Looking for it over and over, but since it isn't something you can find, you fail. Over and over until you're frustrated and confused, but you still keep searching. But you won't find it.



I might, I said weakly.

And she asked, But will it be worth it?

There was a silence. I'd never thought about it before. And I was starting to feel uneasy with this conversation. I have a philosophy against thinking through these subjects too clearly. You can't change them; it just makes you depressed.

So, I said, meaning to distract her, What about your boyfriend.

We broke up, she said. And I felt awkward. So I left the room. After rummaging through her kitchen I brought back a bag of chips and some pop and fruit.

Those are my brother’s chips, she said. He’ll be mad.

I said to blame it on me.

We took turns throwing red grapes at her dog. The dog's name was Sasha, I think. Sasha started rolling the grapes back so we threw them again. They ended up crushed on the floor. So we used the green ones. Anna started to smile a little.

Really it was the most fun I’ve had in a while, but I had to leave early. I have a date tonight, and I need to do my hair.

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AntWrangler13 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 20, 2012 at 12:25 pm
Like the other comments mentioned, I wasn't sure where you were going with it, but I continued because I liked the writing style. I'm glad I did, I haven't seen anything like it on teenink, it's unique, and somewhat lighthearted. Good job, keep on writing :D
Jappyalldayeveryday said...
Feb. 20, 2012 at 8:32 am
The idea here is good, and the ending is nice, but I think the conversation about love between the girl and her friend could use a little work.
Garnet77 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 2, 2011 at 4:33 am
I just realized I actually commented on this before. But since you're wondering where it's confusing, I think maybe people were having a bit of a hard time understanding where you were going after your character went from guy after guy... And also, the knife bit was probably the part I was confused at the most. But then you brought it back together towards the middle and the end when you brought in Anna. Thinking about it, this story is kind of like a book compressed into a short story--and that... (more »)
AndRachelLovesyou said...
Jul. 14, 2011 at 5:16 pm
Thanks everyone!! The grammar mistake was intentional. The way the character phrased it wasn'y supposed to be like a question but I can totally see how that could be unclear. And I've read this so many times (plus I came up with it) that it's hard for me to see where  it's confusing. If you could point out specific parts or give ideas that would be great.
DoubleN said...
Jul. 7, 2011 at 10:40 am
I really really like this story! great job :)
WritingSpasms said...
Jul. 5, 2011 at 9:37 pm
I like this a lot! Your writing is well done, albeit a bit confusing sometimes. It's very unique. Also there's one grammar mistake I caught, something about a question mark. But anyways, good job! Keep on writing :)
Megan.J.B said...
Jul. 5, 2011 at 6:44 pm
Very well done! Your writing style is good, although as is said before, this writing style shouldn't be confusing. I've seen some really good pieces written like this that aren't confusing, that's all I'd work on. :)
Kat4ever333 said...
Jul. 5, 2011 at 4:05 pm
it was very confusing to me. at first id didnt get it but after reading all the way through i ended up getting it and liking it.
musicalmolly said...
Jul. 5, 2011 at 11:48 am
This was very unique! I don't think I've ever seen anything quite like this before. It was a little hard to follow in some places, but overall it was a funny story. Great work :)
Odessa_Sterling00 said...
Jul. 5, 2011 at 7:42 am
I have never seen a writing style like this before.  The story in general was good, but it confused me a bunch in the beginning, towards the end I could just enjoy each piece as it was, but not as a whole..
AndRachelLovesyou replied...
Jul. 5, 2011 at 12:35 pm
You should definitly read "The School". It's in the public domain so you can google it. The School deals with death while mine deals with love, and I imitated the same writing style.
Garnet77 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 5, 2011 at 12:00 am
I really like this. Your style is so unique! And it really kept me interested. And I caught that same mistake CarrieAnn13 pointed out. Other than that, this was great! :)
CarrieAnn13 said...
Jul. 4, 2011 at 7:39 pm

This is a great story!  Yes, it is funny (especially the ending), so you don't have to worry about that.  You only have one mistake in the whole thing (that I can see, at least).  You forgot to put a question mark instead of a period at the end of this sentence: "What about your boyfriend."

This was a great piece of work!  I look forward to reading more of your writing in the future. :)

awayra replied...
Jul. 5, 2011 at 11:10 am
very unfamiliar, very contemporaneous and quite original! it should be brushed a little, but other than that, it's amazing! good luck with your next project!
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