Abandoned

December 30, 2010
By SpringRayyn PLATINUM, Lakeville, Minnesota
SpringRayyn PLATINUM, Lakeville, Minnesota
34 articles 2 photos 658 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't punish yourself," she heard her say again, but there would be punishment and pain, and there would be happiness too. That was writing."
--Markus Zusak, "The Book Thief"


The boy constantly carried me around with her on the streets of St. Paul. He kept me inside the hard case with several picks scattered on the bottom and poking into my back. I didn’t mind though, because he often took me out to show me the city and show others his talent. I loved him so much. He never set me down outside the case, no, he always held me in his lap, fingers tickling my neck and arms wrapped around my body. He sand duets with me often—he was an amazing singer—and sometimes when he put me back in the case there would be a few cold, metal circles or a crinkled, green piece of paper along with picks sticking into my back. He learned how to make me so happy—and he too, I’m sure—from homeless men along the street who sang duets for money with their own friends like me. They are better teachers than you would think.

One day as he carried me down the street with the neon-lighted signs he decided to do the unthinkable. He decided to ride the bus. He set me gently on the seat beside him and struck up a conversation with the person next to him. Eventually he fell asleep in the seat. I wondered where he was taking us on such a long bus ride. Finally the bus reached the end of the route and jolted to a stop. He looked like he was walking in sleep when he stood up and began to walk down the isle. But wait a second…he wasn’t stopping to pick me up! Wait! Wait for me! I want to yell to him, but without him holding me I could not speak. The bus station closed, the lights turned off, and there I sat, a lonely soul, abandoned on the seat.


The author's comments:
Okay, this totally isn't my best work, but here you go! Enjoy! Okay I'M doing 100 themes challenge now. This is supposed to be #38, abandoned. Oh yeah, and it's the point of view of a guitar. Do you like it? Feedback is wanted!

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on Mar. 22 2015 at 10:51 pm
Allen. PLATINUM, Palo Alto, California
32 articles 9 photos 525 comments

Favorite Quote:
[i]No matter how much people try to put you down or make you think other things about yourself, the only person you can trust about who you really are is you[/i] -Crusher-P

This is so sad... Ahh, but it feels so relatable. I never thought I'd relate to a guitar.

on Apr. 24 2012 at 8:06 am
Scribbler-of-Dreams PLATINUM, Brandon, Florida
23 articles 0 photos 73 comments

Favorite Quote:
Love isn't everything we want, but it's everything we need....

It's still good! :D

on Mar. 11 2011 at 7:46 am
Basketball23 SILVER, Pine Grove, Pennsylvania
8 articles 13 photos 488 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I'm living in a shell with no soul" -Three Days Grace (World So Cold)
"Time still turns the pages of the book it's burned" -Avenged Sevenfold (So Far Away)

I LOVE the piont of view!!!  It's so creative and original...LOVE IT!!!

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on Feb. 16 2011 at 5:42 pm
Coffee BRONZE, Tallahassee, Florida
4 articles 5 photos 184 comments

Favorite Quote:
Your Face.

I liked this a lot!!!! I like how it's written from the point of view of the guitar. Great work

on Feb. 6 2011 at 1:58 pm
SpringRayyn PLATINUM, Lakeville, Minnesota
34 articles 2 photos 658 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't punish yourself," she heard her say again, but there would be punishment and pain, and there would be happiness too. That was writing."
--Markus Zusak, "The Book Thief"

wow, i just realized that throughout this peice i changed the boy into being a girl...oops. this is really bad...


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