in too deep

December 9, 2010
By cristi. GOLD, Cincinnati, Ohio
cristi. GOLD, Cincinnati, Ohio
10 articles 12 photos 1 comment

Here comes that car again. Same familiar screech of the brakes by the not-so-sober man. Same familiar slam of the car door as he stumbles out. And his polite little knock on our front door? Yeah, that phony gesture is familiar, too. This whole scene is déjà vu ×1000, considering this has been the norm for over 8 months. Maybe if I listen really closely, I’ll hear him breathing this time. It’s only happened twice before, yet it is still something that I take interest in catching the sound of. That raspy inhale…too many Pall Malls I suppose. And there goes my mom, falling for it every time with fingers crossed behind her back hoping that he’s changed. But the same disappointment is still at our doorstep. Nothing is different about him, except maybe a new shirt, but that’s highly doubtful. Even from up here I can smell the Jack Daniel’s. What does she see in him? Is it the lack of employment? The constant belittling? The fear of not knowing what will happen when he comes home? The bruises? The pain? The tears? I know, maybe it’s his smile. I mean, who doesn’t love a guy with pearly yellows? And there’s only a few missing…charming, huh? If only there was someone to write LOVE on her arms. Someone to show her true love, and treat her like she’s important. Someone to tell her that she isn’t crazy, and that she’s beautiful on the inside and out. I hate to see her like this. Thick layers of make-up covering the damage of a drunk man; thick layers of bandages covering helpless wrists that have been decorated with a razor; thick dosages of pills attempting to cover unending depression. Why does she do this to herself? Why can’t she just up and leave him already? She says it’s not that easy. She says he’s gonna change. But sadly, I don’t see that happening.

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cristi. GOLD said...
on Jan. 31 2011 at 9:13 pm
cristi. GOLD, Cincinnati, Ohio
10 articles 12 photos 1 comment
thank you everyone!

on Dec. 12 2010 at 10:26 pm
OpalFlame BRONZE, Houston, Texas
4 articles 0 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The dream of yesterday is the hope of today and the reality of tomorrow."

this really made me stop and think. i love the way i can step into your shoes, and feel the sadness you feel. great job.. please keep writing(:

Trulie GOLD said...
on Dec. 12 2010 at 4:51 pm
Trulie GOLD, Beltsville, Maryland
10 articles 10 photos 51 comments
excellent! i think we can all relate to this... i see someone who isn't with the right person but deserves someone better and they don't realize it.

on Dec. 12 2010 at 7:20 am
A.C.Worsham GOLD, Cocoa, Florida
15 articles 0 photos 19 comments

Favorite Quote:
"We can't just slay the dragon with our bear hands!"
"Yeah, we need gloves!"

This was very good I thought. You could feel the annoyance and anger the girl felt. Her sarcasm is evident. And when she talks about her mom, it really just makes you want to shake her and say "Leave the man." Idk, it was really good though.

LastChapter said...
on Dec. 12 2010 at 12:08 am
LastChapter, Hempstead, New York
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Favorite Quote:
(couldn't think of anything better at the time) "Take the first step in faith. You don't have to see the whole staircase, just take the first step."-Dr.Martin Luther King Jr.

a very insightful, moving description of the view from a desperate child helplessly watching her mother throw her life away for a man she knows is trash. its sad, but that's what made it great.

on Dec. 11 2010 at 8:06 pm
DawnMarie BRONZE, Milton, Florida
2 articles 0 photos 32 comments

Favorite Quote:
a bird doesn't sing because it has an answer,
it sings because it has a song. - lou holtz

This was very emotional...and it made me feel so sad. But very well written, and you really know how to create a mood for a piece of writing. 


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