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Echoes

August 20, 2010
By IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2216 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity.
~Amoniel

"Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'"
~Thesilentraven


High on the side of a great red stone canyon, as the sun climbed ever loftier in the robin egg-blue sky, a teen-age girl stood.
The wind played her shining-gold hair about her face, tendrils slid across her nose and mouth, small strands sticking to her recently chap-sticked lips. Her pastel colored skirt swirled around her legs as a few birds rode upon the summer time breeze. She seemed as if she were waiting for something; a certain time, or an appointed signal.
The girl waited for an occasion, standing still as a rose, only until the sun reached its climax in the heavens. She cupped her delicate hands around her pink mouth.
“Starboy! Where are you!” she cried into the still and sunlit canyon. Echoes played off the rosy-orange rocks, undulating back and forth, and becoming increasingly quieter.
The girl began to turn as the echoes slowly died away; her shoulders bent in defeat and betrayed hope.
As she took her first step away from the fissure, fine red dust rising from the ground underneath her bare feet, a whisper, barely audible, light and tender as a white feather, reached her curved ear.
“…here I am…”


The author's comments:
Just something that popped into my head the other day. Kind of like my quest to find Starboy.
Please try to finish the story in comments, if you like :)

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on Jul. 26 2011 at 11:39 am
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2216 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity.
~Amoniel

"Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'"
~Thesilentraven

Le Hannon :)

on Jul. 26 2011 at 7:27 am
LadyJaneGrey PLATINUM, Louisville, Kentucky
30 articles 0 photos 46 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I know it defies the law of gravity, but I never studied law." - Bugs Bunny

Wonderful descriptions. You gave the piece a very ethereal feel, which worked. Great job and keep writing!

Aderes47 GOLD said...
on Jun. 13 2011 at 8:26 pm
Aderes47 GOLD, Cambridge, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 897 comments

Favorite Quote:
You will find as you look back upon your life that the moments when you have truly lived are the moments when you have done things in the spirit of love.
Henry Drummond

Oh, I see. Cool! :) 

on Jun. 13 2011 at 2:44 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2216 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity.
~Amoniel

"Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'"
~Thesilentraven

Because of the echoes that bounce off the stone walls, I guess.

on Jun. 9 2011 at 2:14 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2216 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity.
~Amoniel

"Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'"
~Thesilentraven

Uhhhh, yes? I think. The girl kinda does represent me, and yeah, I would call my soulmate starboy :}

Thanks :)


Aderes47 GOLD said...
on Jun. 9 2011 at 2:12 pm
Aderes47 GOLD, Cambridge, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 897 comments

Favorite Quote:
You will find as you look back upon your life that the moments when you have truly lived are the moments when you have done things in the spirit of love.
Henry Drummond

Why did you call the story Echoes?

Aderes47 GOLD said...
on Jun. 9 2011 at 2:11 pm
Aderes47 GOLD, Cambridge, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 897 comments

Favorite Quote:
You will find as you look back upon your life that the moments when you have truly lived are the moments when you have done things in the spirit of love.
Henry Drummond

AWW

That just seems very cute. :)

Why did you call him starboy?

Is this girl supposed to represent you? So when you mean by looking for your starboy, you mean by looking for your soulmate? you would seriously call your soulmate starboy? I find that kind-of funny. It's a funny, cute petname. :) 


on Feb. 8 2011 at 4:44 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2216 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity.
~Amoniel

"Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'"
~Thesilentraven

Thank you so much! I'm thrilled that you like it :D

on Feb. 7 2011 at 10:39 pm
HeatherBee BRONZE, I Live In, Texas
1 article 0 photos 1985 comments

Favorite Quote:
Go on and try to tear me down. I will be rising from the ground, like a skyscraper

Love is louder than the pressure to be perfect

LLLOOOVEE THIS!!!!!!!!! ^^ you have great amazing word choice!!! the descriptions were awesomee

on Nov. 22 2010 at 5:13 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2216 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity.
~Amoniel

"Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'"
~Thesilentraven

Thankee kindly, dear dove :)

It has taken me ages to develope my sense of imagery, it was once one of my weaker spots.

Your praise is thouroughly appreciated :)


on Nov. 22 2010 at 8:52 am
A_shy_dove GOLD, Hubli, Other
10 articles 1 photo 76 comments

Favorite Quote:
Never compare your life with others, as you have no idea what their journey is all about.

A great way of description!!! i enjoyed it thoroughly. I am glad to have read such a work.. 

on Sep. 20 2010 at 4:04 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2216 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity.
~Amoniel

"Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'"
~Thesilentraven

Thank you so much :)

Your words are kind.


on Sep. 19 2010 at 4:09 pm
Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
40 articles 2 photos 1634 comments

Favorite Quote:
"il piu nell' uno," (according to Emerson, an Italian expression for beauty)

"Unable are the loved to die, for love is immortality" ~Emily Dickinson

"The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain"
~Kahlil Gibran

In short, this is a beautiful work of fiction. I immensely enjoyed reading the colorful words. The ending is a very creative way to finish an already wonderful piece. Well done, Ms. Stargirl; and I'm sure you will find your celestial companion.

on Sep. 7 2010 at 7:05 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2216 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity.
~Amoniel

"Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'"
~Thesilentraven

Thanks :)

And I would be glad to :)


on Sep. 6 2010 at 6:52 pm
fragileblackorchid SILVER, Houston, Texas
7 articles 82 photos 171 comments

Favorite Quote:
People want to know why I do this, why I write such gross stuff. I like to tell them I have the heart of a small boy... and I keep it in a jar on my desk.
-Stephen King :P
The trust of the innocent is the liar's most useful tool.
-Stephen King
Now that we're here,
It's so far away
All the struggle we thought was in vain
All the mistakes,
One life contained
They all finally start to go away
Now that we're here its so far away
And I feel like I can face the day
I can forgive and I’m not ashamed to be the person that I am today

this is great 5 starz please check out some of my work

on Sep. 4 2010 at 6:32 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2216 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity.
~Amoniel

"Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'"
~Thesilentraven

Thank you so much!! :)

on Sep. 4 2010 at 5:56 pm
Hippiechick10 SILVER, One Stoplight Town, Connecticut
7 articles 0 photos 83 comments

Favorite Quote:
Those who deny freedom to others , deserve it not for themselves. (Abe Lincoln)

Really a gorgeous piece of work! 

on Sep. 3 2010 at 8:24 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2216 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity.
~Amoniel

"Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'"
~Thesilentraven

Thank you so much! It really means a lot to me that you enjoyed it.

Ataritron said...
on Sep. 3 2010 at 3:54 pm
This is beautiful!  I can't think of anything to add.  Thank you for bringing hope to my day.


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