Goodbye Atlanata

August 2, 2010
By Coffee BRONZE, Tallahassee, Florida
Coffee BRONZE, Tallahassee, Florida
4 articles 5 photos 184 comments

Favorite Quote:
Your Face.


I stared out the window as our plane pulled away from the Atlanta airport.
Goodbye Atlanta….I thought sadly. I quietly read a good book as we waited for the plane to take off, getting lost in it, all my thoughts and worries disappearing for those moments. As the plan turned, and began to speed down the run way, I put the book down, not being able to read any longer. Our plane went faster, and faster, and was thinking goodbye, goodbye, goodbye.
I felt so sad to be leaving this city. It had become my home, while I’d lived there. Now I was moving back to some small, worthless town in New Hampshire that I barely remembered. I had been living in Atlanta with my mom, but she had to go teach in France, and would be traveling around a lot with no space for a thirteen year old to tag along. She’d said I wouldn’t like it there, and that I didn’t even speak French. So had to go live with my dad. It didn’t matter to me whether I moved to New Hampshire, or traveled France. Either way I had to leave Atlanta, and the wonderful life I had built there.
The plane lifted off the ground, and my heart started breaking. I didn’t want to leave, and I never would, nor would anything ever want to make me live. It was my home, and I had just been ripped away from it. I starred at the ground below now, simply observing. I saw the tiny little suburbs of my city. I had lived right in the middle, not in these little neighborhoods. I looked for swimming pools, which were so easy to spot from above, just because of their bright blue color.
Soon, clouds covered the ground below, and I thought for the last time, Goodbye Atlanta….


The author's comments:
I actually wrote this, pulling away from the airport on a plane in Atlanata.But I don't live there. It was just a connection flight. I just felt inspired.

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Coffee BRONZE said...
on Feb. 25 2011 at 12:16 pm
Coffee BRONZE, Tallahassee, Florida
4 articles 5 photos 184 comments

Favorite Quote:
Your Face.

haha I know what you mean. it wasn't exactly planned out anything, just sometihng i got sudden insparation for and wrote on the spot

on Feb. 13 2011 at 11:28 pm
SpringRayyn PLATINUM, Lakeville, Minnesota
34 articles 2 photos 658 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't punish yourself," she heard her say again, but there would be punishment and pain, and there would be happiness too. That was writing."
--Markus Zusak, "The Book Thief"

I could feel the emotion so easily in this one! I like how you described things throughout. The ending was good, if not a little clique (did I spell that right?).

Coffee BRONZE said...
on Feb. 10 2011 at 4:25 pm
Coffee BRONZE, Tallahassee, Florida
4 articles 5 photos 184 comments

Favorite Quote:
Your Face.

Thanks! and hmm i guess i never thought of that. Well if i ever edit this story, i will remember that. Well, like i'll try to remember it writing now too, but if i do edit it- oh whatever i think you know what I mean.

:)


on Feb. 6 2011 at 4:49 pm
inksplatteredfingerz SILVER, Union, New Jersey
8 articles 4 photos 48 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Where I'm from, we believe all sorts of things that aren't true--we call it history."--the Wizard; Wicked

i love the emotion in this story. good job! my only complaint is that you sometimes use too many words to say some things. "I put the book down, not being able to read any longer" could easily be "I closed the book, unable to read any longer." not a big deal, but the less syllables there are, the smoother the story becomes.

Coffee BRONZE said...
on Feb. 6 2011 at 3:12 pm
Coffee BRONZE, Tallahassee, Florida
4 articles 5 photos 184 comments

Favorite Quote:
Your Face.

yep, the only recent thing i have on here is Splash I think. and flames if it's been approved yet. Please look at those if your interested.

Thank you so much for commenting!


on Feb. 3 2011 at 1:37 am
PerfectMGymnast DIAMOND, Parker, Colorado
57 articles 25 photos 633 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you don't leap you'lll never know what it's like to fly"

i love how you put emotion into this!! i felt really bad for the character!! great job!! There are a few errors but that's understandable it happens to me too!! other then that i loved it and i really enjoy your style of writing and i would love to see more pieces of writing from you in the future!! 

Coffee BRONZE said...
on Jan. 23 2011 at 1:15 pm
Coffee BRONZE, Tallahassee, Florida
4 articles 5 photos 184 comments

Favorite Quote:
Your Face.

Thanks! Yeah, it's never been edited, so it's a little rough.

And of course! I love the forums


_Mags_ SILVER said...
on Jan. 20 2011 at 6:44 pm
_Mags_ SILVER, Somewhere, North Carolina
9 articles 7 photos 436 comments

Favorite Quote:
- I stare danger in the face and giggle
- Never argue with an idiot, people might not know the difference
-R.A.P (Retards Attempting Poetry)
-Tip Cologne ryhmes with alone

btw- do you mind checking a chapter of my story that I posted on the forums entitled 'Chapter 1, please read and critique'? When you have the time. I need all the help I can get.

_Mags_ SILVER said...
on Jan. 20 2011 at 6:41 pm
_Mags_ SILVER, Somewhere, North Carolina
9 articles 7 photos 436 comments

Favorite Quote:
- I stare danger in the face and giggle
- Never argue with an idiot, people might not know the difference
-R.A.P (Retards Attempting Poetry)
-Tip Cologne ryhmes with alone

I like it though are a few mistakes/ typos. I saw a few run on sentences and some spelling mistakes but that's it.

Coffee BRONZE said...
on Jan. 9 2011 at 11:05 am
Coffee BRONZE, Tallahassee, Florida
4 articles 5 photos 184 comments

Favorite Quote:
Your Face.

Yeah it's about 6th months old and written in the summer. My spelling/gramar was a little rusty.

Thank you!!! I'm glad you all commented on my work!


on Jan. 8 2011 at 11:42 pm
lovelycheese GOLD, Cupertino, California
11 articles 0 photos 136 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you have something to do, then do it. You can't get wasted time back." ~Ben Carson.

I agree, I do like the inspiration there.

A couple of minor spelling mistakes, like "Atlanta", "plane" and some grammar issues, but it doesn't affect readability.

I think you did a good job channeling your emotions into this article. Overall, great job(:


Coffee BRONZE said...
on Jan. 8 2011 at 11:01 pm
Coffee BRONZE, Tallahassee, Florida
4 articles 5 photos 184 comments

Favorite Quote:
Your Face.

Thank you!! yeah, I was just thinking about what it would be like to be moving. For that to be your last glimpses of the place you lived. And then bam I got out my laptop. (we didn't really have much to do)

Thanks! I will consider that, actually.


on Jan. 6 2011 at 5:17 pm
Hazel-daisy GOLD, --, Other
19 articles 0 photos 324 comments

Favorite Quote:
It takes a lot of courage to show your dreams to someone else - Erna Bombeck

In three words i can sum up everything I've learned in life: it goes on -Robert Frost

Live, Love, Laugh - ______

Hope, Love, breathe <3 - Me

i like the way you got inspiration and wrote it on the plane then and there!! i always do stuff like that!! Maybe you could expand and put it into a short story or something...well done!!

Coffee BRONZE said...
on Aug. 17 2010 at 9:16 pm
Coffee BRONZE, Tallahassee, Florida
4 articles 5 photos 184 comments

Favorite Quote:
Your Face.

Thank you!

on Aug. 15 2010 at 10:31 am
ForeverWonderland BRONZE, Tallahassee, Florida
2 articles 0 photos 53 comments

Favorite Quote:
Cross me, and the protagonist dies. ...Then again, they probably will anyway.

AWESOMENESS =D

Coffee BRONZE said...
on Aug. 12 2010 at 11:29 pm
Coffee BRONZE, Tallahassee, Florida
4 articles 5 photos 184 comments

Favorite Quote:
Your Face.

Thank you!

on Aug. 11 2010 at 12:55 pm
diaphragm BRONZE, Tallahassee, Florida
2 articles 0 photos 86 comments
so pretty! and well written =)




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