I Told You

July 8, 2010
By paninilene DIAMOND, Long Beach, California
paninilene DIAMOND, Long Beach, California
55 articles 3 photos 164 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Done & Over"

"Anyone can give up, it's the easiest thing in the world to do. But to hold it together when everyone else would understand if you fell apart, that's true strength."

"People should be able to say how they feel. How they really feel. Not, you know, some words that some strangers put in their mouth."


His name was like a slap in the face. I didn’t want to hear it. First, the pain would hit me. Then, it soaked in and I was left in a bottomless pit with no way out. You shouldn’t have left ‘cuz now I’m stuck like this. No one can get me out.


You could’ve been here planning some escape mission. You could’ve been here so I wouldn’t need a shoulder to lean on or a person to just talk to, but no. You left even though I asked for you to stay- even after I BEGGED. And where are you now? Gone.


The worst part is, I was never ready for a goodbye. I was never ready for you to leave. None of us were. You left Mom and Dad broken hearted. You left our little sister Jenny and she stayed in bed for weeks just crying because of you. And I hate you so much because Jenny would ask me why.


That’s my question too, Justin. Why’d you go? Jenny needs an answer. I need an answer. That’s why I hate you. You left all of us, especially Jenny, with no answer. Our little sister! She’s only 7 years old. How could you leave her? Do you know how much she adored you? Looked up to you? CARED about you?


Even worse, you’ll never be able to tell us why. You stepped out of our house and took a cab. I don’t know where you went, but I just know you ended up dead in another country. Iraq. Dead for a cause most of us did not believe in- did not care for. But you went anyway and left us in your shadow.


I told you not to go.



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on Feb. 24 2011 at 10:14 pm
Rainbowmadhatter, Reno, Nevada
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AMEN! GOD BLESS OUR SOLDIERS TOO!!

-Monkeyface:)

 


on Aug. 9 2010 at 10:14 am
WaterGirl23 BRONZE, Nutley, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
"Some are born great, some achieve greatness, and some have greatness thrust upon them." -William Shakespeare

omfg i so know how she feels!!!! my cousin went to war n i felt like the same way i mean he didnt die but stil hahahha keep it upp!

on Jul. 26 2010 at 11:39 am
deus-ex-machina14 BRONZE, Stewartsville, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
"There are two main tragedies in life. One is not getting what one wants, and the other is getting it." -Oscar Wilde

haha great:D

on Jul. 25 2010 at 9:42 pm
paninilene DIAMOND, Long Beach, California
55 articles 3 photos 164 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Done & Over"

"Anyone can give up, it's the easiest thing in the world to do. But to hold it together when everyone else would understand if you fell apart, that's true strength."

"People should be able to say how they feel. How they really feel. Not, you know, some words that some strangers put in their mouth."

thanks! and i will try continuing it! as soon as i figure that out:) hahaha

on Jul. 23 2010 at 8:40 am
deus-ex-machina14 BRONZE, Stewartsville, New Jersey
1 article 0 photos 439 comments

Favorite Quote:
"There are two main tragedies in life. One is not getting what one wants, and the other is getting it." -Oscar Wilde

This is very well written and establishes a lot for a long story. I think you should consider adding more to it. You've already got the characters and the conflict....just keep going:D


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