Why don't you love me?

By , keytesville, MO
Why don't you love me? Was I not good enough for you or was it you just being your selfish self. Daddy, me and mommy were scared for you being out late god only knows what you were doing. Staying up a little later to make sure you cigrette was out so nothing would burn. Daddy, you were always nicer to my brother then you were to me. Did you like him better than me or did you not know how to communicate with me. I would keep your secrets in the room when you guys went somewhere else. When you wanted to end your life with that gun and gave it to grandpa and I stepped in front of you and said " Take me instead!" I was doing it for you and only you!





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crzybookworm said...
Jul. 18, 2010 at 3:09 am
I can really relate to this. Great job! You could expand it more tho.
 
Heathurrlovesyouu said...
Jul. 16, 2010 at 5:15 pm

I like this, a lot. Short, sweet, and to the point.

Check out mine, too? : )

 
peacemaker14 said...
Jul. 15, 2010 at 10:03 pm
that was truly beautiful! it's inspiring and powerful.
 
JessieBecker said...
Jul. 14, 2010 at 9:12 pm

this is good.(:

can you check some of my work outt??

thanks(:

 
courteycat said...
Jul. 14, 2010 at 5:43 pm
Well done:) Keep writing you have talent:D
 
iDogrocker said...
Jul. 14, 2010 at 12:19 am
I feel like I really connected with your writing. The ideas and content were well done, but you should have someone help you edit some of the conventions and nuts and bolts. Other than that, keep writing! You obviously have talent.
 
groopla replied...
Jul. 14, 2010 at 10:55 am
Thanks for the criticism and comment!
 
waiting_to_be_found said...
Jul. 13, 2010 at 7:30 pm
Yeah, I have to agree with everyone else. It was so simple, innocent and yet got the point across. Beautiful. 
 
groopla replied...
Jul. 13, 2010 at 10:23 pm
Thanks everyone for your comments!
 
WeAreAllWasted said...
Jul. 12, 2010 at 10:26 pm
i love this.
 
BaileyBaby13 replied...
Jul. 12, 2010 at 11:45 pm
So do I. It's so powerful, and innocent at the same time. I can relate so much. Thank you for writing this.
 
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