Shades of Uncertainty

May 15, 2010
By aaaaaqweqweqwe SILVER, Somewhere, Illinois
aaaaaqweqweqwe SILVER, Somewhere, Illinois
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I miss you, I guess.

It's unexpected; I would never miss a knife in my side or a broken bone. So how are you any different? God knows you caused me just as much pain, if not more.

Sometimes I swear I see you walk past me, that same characteristic shuffle, that same terrible, amazing smile. I always turn and look. It's never really you.

Do you miss me? Probably not. I assume you've moved on, you've dropped me like unwanted baggage, I'm history. I wouldn't be surprised to see you with someone new, your hand at her waist, her head on your shoulder. I hope you've found someone, I really do. I would be so happy for you. So incredibly, horribly, painstakingly happy.

"I just liked it better when we were friends" is what you said, "I hope we can stay close." I've run these words over in my mind countless times. What exactly did you mean by "close"? If you wanted to be close, why did you break up with me in the first place?

It kills me that I acted like I agreed with what you said. I just nodded away like an easily-influenced idiot. Maybe I could have said something to stop you from pulling away completely. Maybe if you would have known, you would have stayed.

Or maybe not.

So all I can do is remember. You and your messy hair and beat-up sneakers, you and your laughing eyes. I'll probably keep the memories longer than you will, and I'm glad for that. We had fun together, you and I.

One day I'll wake up unable to recall the sound of your voice, not quite sure of the way your hand felt in mine. It will be a happy day, a sad day, a brilliant, awful, ordinary day. Maybe I won't even notice that you are fading.

That day will be a long time from the day you left me. But for the first time, you will truly be gone.


The author's comments:
The kind of break-up emotions everyone goes through at some point.

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on May. 27 2010 at 8:20 am
Location201 BRONZE, Greensburg, Indiana
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In a world if insane people you begin to question your own sanity

AWE! I must say this is the closest piece of work to how I feel right now. This captured so much voice and really showed emotion. (much better emotion than I could show) Great job, Keep writing.

 

And suggestion: You should make this a story.


on May. 26 2010 at 6:14 pm

simon feedback (you asked for it!)

Wow. Great voice. Great syntax, consistent. Realistic, simple... but I hated it.

Don't get me wrong, this is a masterpiece. It is incredibly realistic and beautifully written even though the narrator has to use simple words. Are these the emotions people go through at some point? Absolutely. You captured it perfectly, and it reminds me of a more mature, less accusatory version of what my ex girlfriend has been saying to me all week. That's the only reason why i hated it... but you really did do a great job :) 


on May. 26 2010 at 3:56 pm
--LoveHappens--, Fairfield, Connecticut
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Favorite Quote:
"A friend is someone who knows you, but loves you anyway"

Wow great job I know a ton of people who can connect to this so good job on that. please read my piece called The Pretty One thanks so much

on May. 26 2010 at 3:19 pm
NeverCaredForKool-Aid GOLD, Elkridge, Maryland
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Favorite Quote:
I don't believe in hell but I believe in my parent's couch-- Watsky

Aww :o

Sad.  And happy.  No, no happy- hopeful? Yeah, hopeful.  Nice work, I liked the second little sentace/paragraph thing the best.  Loved the carmarison to pain.  Hope that day isn't too far away.  *dry smile* :)



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