Keeper MAG

March 6, 2010
By Anonymous

It was junior-year English. His eyes were blue. Well, bluer than mine. Blue enough to be the gravity of my sight. We were reading Thoreau and were asked to imitate the master's style, so I tried to write about him, but I never got past those eyes.

Flurry of canary plume;

Boutonniere blue eyes.

It was the first F I ever received. Two lines were blasphemy for an honors class. I knew. But I couldn't get past those eyes, and it's not as if, four months later, that has changed. I like to tell myself that I'm content with admiring him from afar, that I'm not in a place where I can handle a relationship, and that in high school, it's useless to try these things because a relationship will never outlive its detrimental footprint in my academic performance. But that's a lie. Every time I look at those eyes, I know it's a lie.

After English we are walking, side-by-side to second period. This is the first day that his hand brushes mine, the first day that I see his smile blossom in his clinquant skin, and the first time that I feel hope bat around inside my patched heart.

After the final bell of the day, I vacillate on the threshold of my school's courtyard. I will wait here until 7 p.m., chat with the janitors when they pass, and finish a chunk of my homework. One of my parents will call, wondering where I am, and then he or she will drive me home, in silence, to one of two homes of silence. But as I lean against the door's molding, books splayed across my lap, the crisp April air is a lariat around my shoulders.

I leave my books behind and begin to walk, willed by the wind, the uncut grass kissing my ankles. I sit beneath the tree in the courtyard, and I let myself cry. I swear that his hand has burned a mark into mine, a brand of bitter hope. I rub the spot on my index finger where he touched me in an effort to extinguish the feeling.

“Don't you know?” I want him to appear so I can speak these words to someone besides myself. “These are not hands for you to hold. They are a net for my sin: they have held scissors to my flesh and wiped burning bile from my lips. They have denied my stomach food and found fat on a skeletal frame. They are filled with the shards of my family. They are grappling with my parents' iniquities.” My feet barely alight on the ground as I escape the courtyard.

It is days later. After English, I wait behind my classmates as they leave the room. He is, purposefully, the last one out. I have nothing to return as his smile buds again. As I turn away from the door, I begin to speak to my hunched old teacher. She is a woman of 70 with black hair of indeterminate length knotted into a chignon. I try to explain that my counselors are pulling me out of school again, and as I ask for more make-up work, she brushes her thumb across my cheek to catch the tears. I fumble with the note my counselor gave me; I drop it and a small wail escapes my mouth.

As if summoned by the sound, he reenters the room and picks up the paper. He must have been waiting just outside, ear trained on my voice. He reads it before handing it back to me. This is the note to excuse my growing list of absences; it lists my diagnoses. He hands it back to me with a still flowering smile. I begin to cry again when he loops his index finger around mine and looks at me,

Boutonniere blue eyes.

“Thank you,” I sputter, emotions broiling. I steal a glance at my teacher, who stares at our escapade peculiarly. I try to offer an explanation: “He's a–'' I pause, unsure of what to say.

“Keeper.” She slides her glasses up her nose. “He's a keeper. Keep him around.” I turn and look up into his face, and I finally get past those eyes:

Boutonniere blue eyes;

Flurry of canary plume.

Keeper of a patched heart.


The author's comments:
Only partly fiction :)

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on Apr. 20 at 1:31 pm
Dani_Higareda GOLD, Hanahan, South Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"How far you go in life depends on your being tender with the young, compassionate with the aged, sympathetic with the striving and tolerant of the weak and strong. Because someday in your life you will have been all of these." -G.Washington Carver

I love this!

on Apr. 2 2015 at 11:15 pm
BreeZephyr SILVER, Broken Arrow, Oklahoma
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Favorite Quote:
“In the moment when I truly understand my enemy, understand him well enough to defeat him, then in that very moment I also love him...it's impossible to really understand somebody, what they want, what they believe, and not love them the way they love themselves.” - Orson Scott Card, Ender's Game

This is incredible. Your word choices--wow. I'm at a loss for words. Amazing work!

on Apr. 14 2014 at 11:51 pm
jdito3339 BRONZE, Mundelein, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
"Don't cry because it's over, smile because it happened."

Some of the word choices are amazing! The grass kissing her legs and the teacher's hair really stood out. Being able to visualize the story is important; bravo!

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on Aug. 24 2011 at 8:58 pm
meera_n SILVER, Beavercreek, Ohio
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I enjoy how this story took me on a journey from just what seemed like a story about a crush, but was actually about the main character's inner problems and how she's trying to open herself up to another person. This story could really go far as a novel. Really great job! I love your vocabulary use too with words like lariat and vacillate. And they weren't awkwardly placed. It fit perfectly. 

Would you mind commenting on some of my stories too? I'd really appreciate it :)

Keep up the amazing writing!


on Oct. 10 2010 at 1:53 pm
Alice_in_Wonderland GOLD, San Clemente, California
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Favorite Quote:
“I could give up, I could stay stuck, or I could move on, So I put one foot front of the other, No no no nothing’s gonna break my stride, “ –David Archuleta (The Other Side of Down)

when i wrote in my last comment that I also the end.... I meant that I also liked the end... sorry about the typo.

on Oct. 10 2010 at 1:52 pm
Alice_in_Wonderland GOLD, San Clemente, California
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Favorite Quote:
“I could give up, I could stay stuck, or I could move on, So I put one foot front of the other, No no no nothing’s gonna break my stride, “ –David Archuleta (The Other Side of Down)

WOw! That's a really good story. I love the part when you tell the boy he can't hold your hand because it holds your sins. I also the end when the teacher finishes your sentence and says that he's a keeper. and"keeper of a patched heart." Great job and you should definitely write more.

on Oct. 7 2010 at 5:41 pm
AliceForever BRONZE, Someplace, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
"Sometimes it takes a crazy person to see the truth. If so, I'm a freaking lunatic."- Stephen Colbert

"YOU CAN'T STOP THIS TRAIN!" My friend and illustrator, CK

(low whisting sound) Wow...just wow.

on Sep. 19 2010 at 5:41 pm
PussnBoots GOLD, Tomahawk, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
"When life hands you lemons, make apple juice. Then sit back and watch the world wonder how you did it." -Unknown
"The world is my pineapple. I just have to figure out a way past the prickly parts." -Me

This is wonderful! I love the way you wrote this. ;)

on Sep. 16 2010 at 10:03 am
  I really liked this, though I'm not sure I fully understand it, still I think its quite good! Keep it up! 

on Sep. 15 2010 at 8:59 pm
Snikerdoodle PLATINUM, Leander, Texas
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Beautifully written and very heartfelt. Loved it!

on Sep. 15 2010 at 8:26 pm
inksplatters21 SILVER, Mason, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
"Character is how you live when no one is watching."

This is so cute!  Haha i love old people.  I love the way you ended it with the repeated lines.

Would you mind reading/commenting on my stuff?  Thanks!


Rosa said...
on Sep. 14 2010 at 4:06 pm
I love it! It's amazing and so sweet. Great work. I'm awwwing in my head :) Awesome.

on Apr. 8 2010 at 4:58 pm
Gosh darn it. It shouldn't be "passed," in the first couple lines, it should be "past," shouldn't it? Sorry for horrendous error lol. :P 




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