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The Last Kiss

September 29, 2009
By StephenieReneeBaker SILVER, Colorado, Colorado
StephenieReneeBaker SILVER, Colorado, Colorado
7 articles 0 photos 25 comments

Favorite Quote:
Don't promise my forever when your just going to break my heart.


Jareds soft lips touch mine. I pull away slowley, and open my eyes. A small smile appers across his face. I giggle. My mother calls me in. I laugh as I run to my house. I turn around, and wave goodbye.

The bright sun rises over the moutain. I go out side to see Jared. His beautiful green eyes met mine. It's as if my heart is doing flips. He lightly kisses me, but nothing like befor. This time it was as if somethig was wrong.

As we walk to the park he seems angry, or sad I can't tell. I ask him whats wrong. He tells me he wants to talk. I try to say okay , but there is a lump in my throught inabling the word from coming out, so I just shake my head.

We get there, and sit on the hard bench wet from last nights rain. A tear falls from his eye,as I wrap him in a hug. He tells me that he is very sick, and isn't going to live much longer. I gasp as he tells me the rest. His voice cracked when he tells me we need ti brake up. I told him we need each other. Then he tells me okay, and I call my mom to pick us up.

A week later he asked me to marrie him. I say yes. We get married right there on his bed.

The day after that he tells me he is about to die right there. so I give A kiss, the last kiss.


The author's comments:
I wrote this story last year after watching "The Note Book"

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Abbz7193 GOLD said...
on Oct. 23 2009 at 11:18 pm
Abbz7193 GOLD, Denver, Colorado
17 articles 1 photo 21 comments

Favorite Quote:
Don't take life to seriously... nobody gets out alive anyways! :)

ya i know random but i just wanted to know... same with the story line.. how did you get your insipration for this wonderfully beautiful story!! :)

Abbz7193 GOLD said...
on Oct. 23 2009 at 11:16 pm
Abbz7193 GOLD, Denver, Colorado
17 articles 1 photo 21 comments

Favorite Quote:
Don't take life to seriously... nobody gets out alive anyways! :)

Howd you come up with the name Jared?? :?

on Oct. 23 2009 at 6:53 pm
Wow stef lots o ppl really like ur writing style and think you write like stephanie meyer... haha u have the same name lol!!!!! sorry i think that hilarious!! :P

on Oct. 22 2009 at 8:35 pm
bestdayever<3 BRONZE, Littleton, Colorado
2 articles 0 photos 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
Take a chance and never let go. Risk everything, lose nothing. Don't worry about anything anymore. Cry in the rain and speak up loud. Say what you want and love who you want. Be yourself and not what people want to see. Never blame anyone if you get hurt because you took the risk and you decided who was worth the while

awwwwwwwwwwwwwweeeeee! tht was SO good but also o my goodness sad!!!!

E.Lee GOLD said...
on Oct. 22 2009 at 10:42 am
E.Lee GOLD, Akron, Ohio
15 articles 0 photos 168 comments
i agree! you should continue the story, it would be really good. i like what you have so far though, so keep writing!! :D great work.

BIG_SIS_101 said...
on Oct. 20 2009 at 10:34 pm
Nice job little sister.

on Oct. 20 2009 at 10:12 pm
Omg nice i'm so happy i finally got around to reading your story i like how you began the story... oh and btw it was a really abrupt ending you should do like a... um secuil... idk how to spell it but like continue the story!! gtg love ya S!! :)

on Oct. 20 2009 at 12:01 pm
StephenieReneeBaker SILVER, Colorado, Colorado
7 articles 0 photos 25 comments

Favorite Quote:
Don't promise my forever when your just going to break my heart.

Nice name. Did you read it???

Felipe#1 said...
on Oct. 20 2009 at 11:57 am
Good intresting

on Oct. 19 2009 at 3:08 pm
StephenieReneeBaker SILVER, Colorado, Colorado
7 articles 0 photos 25 comments

Favorite Quote:
Don't promise my forever when your just going to break my heart.

Thank you.

on Oct. 19 2009 at 1:16 pm
StephenieReneeBaker SILVER, Colorado, Colorado
7 articles 0 photos 25 comments

Favorite Quote:
Don't promise my forever when your just going to break my heart.

No. It poped in to my head one day!

on Oct. 15 2009 at 9:01 pm
LeslieAnn BRONZE, Midvale, Utah
1 article 0 photos 47 comments

Favorite Quote:
\\\\\\\"Dream as if you\\\\\\\'ll live forever, Live as if you\\\\\\\'ll die today\\\\\\\" \\\\\\\"Life is not about waiting for the storms to pass, its about learning to dance in the rain.\\\\\\\"

I liked it a lot, but I just feel like it was a really abrupt ending. Maybe try easing into it a bit more.

bookworm said...
on Oct. 14 2009 at 7:44 pm
i know me 2

icemt13 said...
on Oct. 13 2009 at 2:48 pm
this story is touching i wish it could be turned into a book i would read it

on Oct. 13 2009 at 2:37 pm
its wonderful!!!!it doesnt remind me of twilight. more of a walk to remember

on Oct. 12 2009 at 11:05 am
BlossomC BRONZE, Brooklyn, New York
2 articles 0 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
A pencil and paper is the road to success.~Blossom =)

So sad but it is very moving. i like it. =')

on Oct. 10 2009 at 6:13 pm
DesertGirl BRONZE, Yuma, Arizona
2 articles 0 photos 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
payback's a b**** and so am I.

It was a good artical. Did you get that from the Twilight books?

on Oct. 10 2009 at 12:01 pm
accio-sarcasm, Nunya Effin Business, Other
0 articles 0 photos 59 comments

Favorite Quote:
"To the well organized man, death is but the next great adventure."
-Dumbledore, Harry Potter and the Sorcerer's Stone

"There's nothing wrong with you. There's just a lot wrong with the world you live in."
-Chris Colfer

Soooo sad! I cant give you a full 5 stars because it made me cry!!!!:( you are great at writing, though. Have you read the Twilight books??? You have the author's writing style. It's beautiful:)