Someone Cared

August 1, 2009
By distant_dreamer GOLD, Belmont, New Hampshire
distant_dreamer GOLD, Belmont, New Hampshire
12 articles 6 photos 498 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life's a climb, but the view is great!"


The cold morning air awakens me. I pray to God that somehow today could be different, but doubts still run through my mind. As I slowly rise up from my stiff bed, I make sure to be very quiet, and not wake Grandfather. After slipping my backpack onto my bony shoulders, I quickly but quietly open the door and leave. On my way to school I can see the lofty glances of kids as they walk past me. I hang my head knowing that today will be the same as all the other days. Opening the school doors, I could already hear insults flying through the hallway.

“Oh, there she is again.”

“Gross, she smells!”

“What is she wearing?”

I know that I’m different from everybody else; my clothes aren’t new or fancy, neither are my shoes. My brown hair is long and straggly, and my eyes are sore and blotchy red from last night. As I try to ignore the piercing stares, I repeat to myself that it’s all going to be over with soon.

After enduring the criticizing, and everything else that came with it, the school day finally came to an end.. I walked silently home, praying that grandfather would still be there. As I got up to driveway, a sick feeling came over me, for I noticed that the car was gone. I rushed to my room, and locked the door. The day was not over yet. Grandfather sometimes goes out to the local bar and drinks.When he returns home, he usually goes up to my room, and beats me. I know that he is hurting because his wife died one year ago, and sometimes I think that when he goes out to drink, he is reminded of that horrible day. On his arrival home, he usually takes the suffering, and pain out on me. I try to endure it the best as I can, but sometimes, I just feel like sitting their, and hoping that he hits me hard enough, to the point of death, then all my misery and heartache will be gone…gone forever. But than a voice tells me to just “hold on” just for a little while longer, but I’m not sure I can. As I waited for his return, fear seemed to take over my body. My heart cried out sanctuary, but I knew it could never come. And then I heard it, the footsteps of my grandfather coming up stairs to my room. My body couldn’t seem to move. As I saw the door slam open, I could smell the strong whisky pouring out of his mouth. Then as I looked up at his angry face, I tried to find that old loving grandfather that I once knew and loved, but he was no longer their. I could tell by his eyes, that the old grandfather was replaced by a terrifying creature. That moment, I could see an object fly through the air. I felt a knife stab into my stomach, I tried to tell myself to “hold on”, but I could slowly feel myself slipping away. A sharp pain woke me up and I felt a warm sensation flow through my t-shirt. I tried to stop the blood flow with my shaking hands, but it was no use. I slipped back into unconsciousness once again.

“Dr., Is she going to be alright?”

“Yes, thanks to you.”

I slowly opened my eyes. “Where am I?”

“She’s awake!” a voice joyfully said.

“Miss, how do you feel?” The doctor asked.

“Terrible, but where am I?”

“You’re at the hospital; this young girl saved your life!”

“Hello Carter, I’m so glad you’re alive!” the gentle voice said.

“How do you know my name, and who are you?”

“I know a lot about you. We go to school together.”

“We do, how come I never saw you?”

“Well, I tried to talk to you, but you never seemed to notice me. On your way home, I saw you drop a book, so I decided to give it to you the next day. I never saw you, so I thought that I’d bring it to your house instead. I noticed that your bedroom light was on. No one else was home, so I decided to go in. I found you on the floor unconscious, and blood was everywhere. Not knowing what to do, I called 911, and an ambulance came. Luckily, you were still breathing, but barely. You were holding on to life by the thinnest thread.”

Worry creased my brow when my thought turned back to Grandfather, but my new friend tenderly took my hand and rubbed her thumb across it to calm me down.

“Don’t worry Carter, everything will be different know. The police found your grandfather and a bloody knife in his pocket. For now you’ll be living with me and my family, hopefully even after you’ve healed. I know that were going to be great friends Carter!”

Tears started running down my pale cheeks, because that day I knew that someone cared!


The author's comments:
This is a story I wrote! I got the idea from reading a story that my best friend wrote. I hope you all enjoy it, and feel free to comment, I really want to know how everyone feels about this story!! Enjoy! <3

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on Aug. 18 2010 at 12:40 pm
poeticspirit12334 PLATINUM, Groesbeck, Texas
23 articles 0 photos 179 comments

Favorite Quote:
Wearing a Christian T-shirt, and a cross necklace does NOT make you a Christian. , "For I know the plans I have for you," declares the Lord "They are plans to give you a hope and a future.'' Jeremiah 29:11

I really like this and i believe that with a little bit more "guts" as i like to say, to the story this would make a great book. great job... that comment was not to make u mad or anything the piece is great on its own... what i ment was if it was longer it would make a great book... great job!!

on Apr. 5 2010 at 6:33 pm
distant_dreamer GOLD, Belmont, New Hampshire
12 articles 6 photos 498 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life's a climb, but the view is great!"

Awww, well I'm glad my story touched you so deeply! :) Thanks again! :)

Love,

DD.


Valiant GOLD said...
on Apr. 4 2010 at 6:45 pm
Valiant GOLD, Richardson, Texas
13 articles 0 photos 27 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You look like a bloated, cross-eyed squid with a beard.... well, at least you hair looks right."
Me to my friend Heidi

I cried and I'm still crying

on Feb. 19 2010 at 3:34 pm
distant_dreamer GOLD, Belmont, New Hampshire
12 articles 6 photos 498 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life's a climb, but the view is great!"

Aww, thank you all for your sweet comments and rating! It means SO much to me, Really! :) Thanks again!!!

on Feb. 19 2010 at 3:23 pm
adristar96 SILVER, Miami, Florida
9 articles 4 photos 77 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is like a box of chocolate, You'll never know what your gonna get. :) Forest Gump

:') i love it!!!!!!! omg 1,000,000,000 stars!!!!!!! amazing it made me cry!!!!!!

on Feb. 18 2010 at 11:30 pm
Kayira1991 GOLD, Dhaka, Other
15 articles 181 photos 102 comments

Favorite Quote:
I have miles to go before I sleep
If there is a will, there is a way
Nothing is impossible

Your story is warm and glowing with emotions..................well written...........well done!!!!!!!!!!!!

on Dec. 25 2009 at 1:33 am
SerenityMine BRONZE, Not Saying, California
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I thought this was a great story, the storyline was very nice, and it was well written.

on Nov. 23 2009 at 5:08 pm
MeganAnne PLATINUM, Niskayuna, New York
24 articles 0 photos 157 comments

Favorite Quote:
All my life I've looked at words as if I were seeing them for the first time. ~Ernest Hemingway

This was very good, and contained a lot of emotion. Gave me hope!

on Nov. 18 2009 at 11:01 am
joshua buce SILVER, Mobile, Alabama
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wow, this story is very powerful, i actually felt for the girl. you are an amazing writer. keep it up.

on Oct. 19 2009 at 7:41 pm
BriarRose PLATINUM, Seneca, Illinois
24 articles 7 photos 162 comments

Favorite Quote:
I don't need a rose. I want a daisy you picked for my hair. I don't want some fancy box of chocolate. I want a pink frosting cookie you made just for me. Lets skip the upscale restaraunt and have a picnic in the park.

that's great work; it's always good to know someone cares

keep writing

on Oct. 3 2009 at 9:35 am
distant_dreamer GOLD, Belmont, New Hampshire
12 articles 6 photos 498 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life's a climb, but the view is great!"

Thank you so much!!!

RLJoy DIAMOND said...
on Oct. 3 2009 at 9:27 am
RLJoy DIAMOND, Glen Rock, New Jersey
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this story is very detailed and really well written. Keep up the amzaing work!!!!!!

on Sep. 20 2009 at 12:18 pm
distant_dreamer GOLD, Belmont, New Hampshire
12 articles 6 photos 498 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life's a climb, but the view is great!"

Oh, believe me I will, and I know it will be great!! :)

SarahG BRONZE said...
on Sep. 20 2009 at 10:28 am
SarahG BRONZE, Goff, Kansas
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Yea. I'm trying to get another story up, but it hasnt been approved yet. check it out sometime when it comes up please!

on Sep. 19 2009 at 4:14 pm
distant_dreamer GOLD, Belmont, New Hampshire
12 articles 6 photos 498 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life's a climb, but the view is great!"

Thanks a BILLION!

PippinP GOLD said...
on Sep. 19 2009 at 4:12 pm
PippinP GOLD, Bolingbrook, Illinois
15 articles 0 photos 67 comments

Favorite Quote:
Faith is like learning to walk; you have to fall at first, but don't stay down. When in doubt, don't stop believing.

Sweet and sad...

Good job!

on Sep. 19 2009 at 2:45 pm
distant_dreamer GOLD, Belmont, New Hampshire
12 articles 6 photos 498 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life's a climb, but the view is great!"

Thanks so much!!!!! :) I LOVE your work too! :)

SarahG BRONZE said...
on Sep. 18 2009 at 10:27 pm
SarahG BRONZE, Goff, Kansas
4 articles 0 photos 14 comments
wow, i love this story, very good!

on Sep. 14 2009 at 6:25 pm
wordweaver96 PLATINUM, Winchester, Kentucky
37 articles 2 photos 255 comments

Favorite Quote:
" It is not our abilities but our choices that show who we truly are. "
Albus Dumbledore


See, we really DON'T have anything to fear but fear itself!

:D you're welcome!

on Sep. 14 2009 at 6:24 pm
distant_dreamer GOLD, Belmont, New Hampshire
12 articles 6 photos 498 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life's a climb, but the view is great!"

Thanks so much!!!!!!! :)




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