Unknown for now

April 30, 2009
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Does he see me? Does he know who I am? I’m looking at my friend listening to her talk. I bump into him. “Oh, I’m so sorry.”

“No, it was my fault.”

“Hey, isn’t your name Melody.”


“I’m Jacobby.”

“Yeah, I know.”

“This is my friend Lizzy.”

“This is my friend Carter.”

“Hey, we’re having a party on Saturday. Would you two like to come?”

“Yeah, sure we would love to come.”

“Well, see you later.”

“Oh my gosh, we just got invited to a party.”

“Yeah, so what.”

“That means shopping.”


“Oh, come on. It’ll be fun.”

“Okay, I’ll trust you.”

“Great! Let’s go tomorrow morning at Adrian’s Clothes.”

Adrian’s Clothes
“Good morning, ladies.”
“Good morning.”

“Oh, I love this one.”

“What do you think?”


“I found mine. Now, let’s go.”
What will I say? How should I wear my make-up? How should I wear my hair? I’ll be fine. Stop getting nervous. Just be yourself.

3 Hours later

“Oh. My. Gosh?!”

“There are a lot of people here.”

“Let’s go find the boy’s.”

“There they are.”

“Hey, what’s up?”


“You two look hot!”


“You guys want to dance?”

“Yeah, let’s go.”
Okay, so maybe he does know who I am and see me. That night we danced and partied away the night, I knew I was seen.

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tor10jax said...
May 10, 2009 at 5:49 pm
I thought the idea was okay but i kept loosing track of who was speaking.
Talia R. said...
May 10, 2009 at 2:51 pm
I think the idea is good but there needs be a bit less dialogue and there should be more hints as to who is speaking. I lost track.
Graceless91 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 10, 2009 at 3:47 am
there needs to be more details...i felt like there was no point to it. idk work on it more.
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