General Burgoyne Has Surrendered

July 23, 2012
By TheVoice SILVER, Marquette, Michigan
TheVoice SILVER, Marquette, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"Nature and books belong to the eyes that see them." --Ralph Waldo Emerson


October 4th, 1777

Writing is not what I do best, nor am I keen to expressing my “feelings” as my mother would call them. Well, to begin, my name is Joseph Burgoyne, and my uncle is the great general John Burgoyne. I have just recently joined the powerful British army under Uncles’ recommendation, and already I am starting to regret it.

Uncles’ army has recently taken Freeman’s Farm which lies on a rebel fortified elevation known as Bemis Heights (which is where I now sit writing). A few weeks before I arrived, Uncle had been told that Major General Clinton was just up the Hudson River, and was advancing to meet our enterprise. But Uncle told me that Clinton hadn’t reached them after nearly three weeks, so he gave up the hope.

There is illness here, and many men are deserting our army day by day. My good friend, Thomas, joined the rebel army, saying that we deserve freedom and independence. At the moment, I hadn’t thought much of what he had said, but now I am starting to think I may have chosen the wrong allies.

October 5th, 1777

Yesterday, Uncle held a war council with his senior generals. I do not exactly know what it was they were talking about, but I am under the belief that he wishes to launch an attack on the American positions that have assembled below Bemis Heights.

If what I have heard is true, then this will be my first taste of battle, and I am not certain that I will enjoy it.

October 8th, 1777

Uncle launched the attack yesterday and right now is one of the few moments of rest that I am given. I am being commanded by Brigade General Fraser. Yesterday, Fraser marched us too far to the west and south however, thus no fighting was seen by my eyes, but I could undoubtedly hear it.

Gun shots, cannon shots, the dreadful screams of the wounded. It was all too much.

October 9th, 1777

Bayonets hurt. Uncle ordered a retreat during the night, and fighting commenced later in the day. A rebel jumped me and I would have been skewered if my gun hadn’t accidentally gone off. God was with me no doubt, watching over me.

October 17th, 1777

General Burgoyne has surrendered. It is, needless to say, shameful, but I’m not complaining. I’ve been in the infirmary for three days!

A few days ago during a skirmish, rebels fired a volley of bullets in my direction. The men and areas surrounding me were peppered with holes. I didn’t get away untouched however. A bullet pierced my lower left leg.

Bleeding heavily, I crawled for cover. Luckily, a fellow solider spied me under the brush and carried me to camp. Uncle was horrified and sorry that he had dragged me into this abomination of a war. But I told him no, it was my own curiosity and excitement that came back at me in the end.

My bones ache and I am in excruciating pain. I can feel my breath, as well and my heartbeat, slowly diminish. I am sorry to say that I will never return home. I am dying.

As I lay here in the infirmary, blood oozing from the temporary stiches in my wounds, I think of the mother and brother that I am leaving behind. Mother wanted me home, not here. I shiver at the thought of leaving them. Forever.

Our army will be leaving this battle field (which I have been told is called Saratoga) in about three hours as to the surrender agreements. I do not believe that I will make it.

I will state this with my last breath: the rebels are strong, and I do believe that they will prevail.

Thomas was right. Freedom is worth fighting for…


The author's comments:
I wrote this for English class one year for a section on the Revolutionary War, and my teachers loved it. I know it's historical fiction, but give it a chance:)

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DanielM SILVER said...
on Aug. 1 2012 at 10:45 am
DanielM SILVER, Kent, Washington
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Favorite Quote:
"I would rather hated million times for what i did then loved a million times for what i didn't do." - Daniel Moto
" I've sought out to be the best i could posibly be but when i hit a roadblock in life what did i do, i had two choices either stay at the roadblock or i take this roadblock and make of it and go around it and achieve my goal. So, what will it be?"- Daniel Mathia

"People take love like its a four letter word or just a phrase that you tell people or your friends all the time. But in reality love is much bigger than a merely phrase or 4 letter word. Instead love is a genuine promise or covenant to that special person."-Daniel Mathia

“Why change yourself when you were made perfect and wonderfully by the creator of everything?” – Daniel Mathia

“If live is not hurtin then were really not living in.” – B. Reith

Being a history nerd! I really liked this piece. It was really interesting how you wrote this. I liked how I felt like I was in the story. Suggestion: why did you write in the british point of view

Varlen-Byrd said...
on Jul. 31 2012 at 5:20 pm
Varlen-Byrd, Santa Cruz, California
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Favorite Quote:
“Imperfection is beauty, madness is genius and it's better to be absolutely ridiculous than absolutely boring.”

This is an amazing story. i thought you captured the voice of the soilder perfect and it was so detailed i felt like i was really reading a real letter. keep up the good work.

Honour SILVER said...
on Jul. 29 2012 at 7:18 pm
Honour SILVER, New London, Connecticut
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Favorite Quote:
Greater love has no man than this, that a man lay down his life for his friends. ~John 15:13

"Give me liberty or give me death!" ~Patrick Henry

Be brave and steadfast; have no fear or dread of them, for it is the Lord, your God, who marches with you; he will never fail you or forsake you. ~ Deuteronomy 31:6

"I prefer dangerous freedom over peaceful slavery" ~ Thomas Jefferson

This is a great peice!! I love how you wrote it from a British soldeir's perspective, but the Brit thought tha the Yanks were right.  It's creative, and i can why your teacher loved it. 5/5 for you, Voice!!  GOD BLESS AMERICA!!!!

on Jul. 28 2012 at 3:17 pm
MakeMyWaffles GOLD, Cleveland, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
The road to success is always under construction. - Unknown (to me)
I have not failed. I've just found 1,000 ways that don't work for me. - Thomas Jefferson
So what are ninja babies just born invisible? - My BFF Quan

This was really amazing. It made me feel like i was reading about a real person in a real battle. Keep up the good work!




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