Cattle Car

July 15, 2011
By torilynn400 GOLD, Poughkeepsie, New York
torilynn400 GOLD, Poughkeepsie, New York
10 articles 1 photo 41 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The only thing we have to fear, is fear itself."
-President Franklin Delano Roosevelt


They cram all of us in a cattle car. Their hands are rough with me and show no mercy. Bodies press against my own as the doors slam shut. All around is the stench of the sick, dying, dead. Occasionally someone cries out in the dark for a loved one. Low moans, stifled sobs and prayers to our God are heard. We don't know where they're taking us. We know it's another camp where we will work until we die or are set free. I can't remember how long I've been here. My back aches as I crouch to avoid the dead bodies around me. The fleas and lice bite away at my skin. I worry they will eat me until I'm only bones. Mama said to keep my faith in God. I wonder vaguely where she is or if she's even alive. I start to close my eyes but snap them open again. I'm afraid if I allow myself to sleep, I'll never wake. Papa said to live in hope that this will all be over soon. I'm not sure which is better; liberation or death- anything to get me away...


The author's comments:
I wrote this piece for a World War II English project. I feel so strongly about WWII and I feel the pain that the Jews' went through.

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on Jan. 31 2012 at 2:06 pm
torilynn400 GOLD, Poughkeepsie, New York
10 articles 1 photo 41 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The only thing we have to fear, is fear itself."
-President Franklin Delano Roosevelt

Thank you so much! And I was going to add more to this piece but I thought the same thing. You can explain and describe and make people feel so much with just a little bit. Sometimes less is more; it leaves room for thought.

on Nov. 1 2011 at 3:11 am
Garnet77 PLATINUM, Sinagpore, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"Everything's a triangle." ~ My mother

"Write what you love, write what you care about, because sometimes, it's the easiest way to be heard."

Wonderful descriptions. I think the length of the piece just makes it more powerful. Great job :)

on Jul. 21 2011 at 6:46 am
lovetildeath GOLD, Virginia Beach, Virginia
10 articles 0 photos 34 comments

Favorite Quote:
I'm selfish, impatient, & a little insecure. I make mistakes, I am out of control, & at times hard to handle. But if you can't handle me at my worst, then you sure as hell don't deserve me at my best.
- Marilyn Monroe

In very few words you captured more than some do in a etire novel.Well done.

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on Jul. 20 2011 at 7:52 am
writer015 GOLD, Howard, Ohio
11 articles 13 photos 112 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Our deepest fear is not that we are inadequate. Our deepest fear is that we are powerful beyond measure. We ask ourselves, Who am I to be brilliant, gorgeous, talented, fabulous? Actually, who are you not to be? We were born to make manifest the glory of God that is within us. And as we let our own light shine, we unconsciously give other people permission to do the same. " --Marianne Williamson

Even though this was short, it was very well done! I like it a lot! It would be awesome if you did a longer artical with the same subject. Such a horrific time period, but it interests me to.


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