Eternity MAG

By Caroline W., Markham, Canada

(Inspired by Twilight by Stephenie Meyer)

It’s strange that I never noticed how fast clouds move before. It was sort of frightening. I almost felt like running for cover, as though they might lose control and tumble from the sky and crush me. I might have done just that had I not been so comfortable where I was, lying in the sun in a lush meadow.

I turned to look at the beautiful, ageless being stretched on the grass beside me. His looks were deceiving, for while he appeared to be a normal teenage boy, I knew he was well over 300 years old and not human at all.

“Nathaniel,” I said, my voice sounding loud in the calm of the clearing.

“Mmm?” was his only reply. His eyes were closed and a lazy smile graced his lips as he soaked up the sun.

“I want to see you.”

He opened his violet eyes a fraction, peering at me with a look of amusement and adoration. Then, he closed them again and let out a long breath. Slowly, he started to change. The color in his skin faded until he was all white, except for his lips which remained a pale rose, and his hair became an impossible shade of black. He sat up and a set of filmy, sparkling wings sprouted from his back, the light bouncing off,sending rainbows dancing around the meadow.

I pushed myself into a sitting position and grinned when he opened his eyes, now a deep purple.

“Much better,” I said, and his lips parted in a breathtaking smile.

He lowered himself onto the grass,holding his head up with his hand, his face turned toward the sun. He looked so perfectly at ease and so easily perfect that it was hard to believe he was even real. He was so lovely that it hurt to think of what he saw in me. The ordinariness of my humanity couldn’t possibly be endearing compared to the fantastical beauty of this faerie boy.

Yet there he was, utterly content to be with me. I wasn’t sure I’d ever understand, but I didn’t mind.Having him was more than enough. To ask for an explanation would be greedy. Still, I had to wonder if there had been others before me. After all, he’d been alive for three centuries. Certainly he hadn’t spent those years alone. It hurt to think of others holding his heart, and that others would, because, of course, I wouldn’t be around forever. I would grow old and die, and he would goon.

But if he loved me as he said he did, would he be able to goon? Would he survive after I was gone? Were our positions switched, I knew I wouldn’t be able to exist. Now that I knew what it was to be with him, I don’t think I’d be able to live without him.So, did the thought of being without me frighten him? Did it scare him to think he would live forever?

“What are you thinking?” he asked softly, looking at me with curious eyes.

“Well,” I said, mirroring his position and propping my head on my elbow. I took his hand and flipped it so his palm was facing up. Running my fingers lightly up and down the inside of his arm, I looked at him. “I was wondering if it ever scares you, the thought of living forever.” I saw him frown.

“That’s a strange thing to think about.”

I shrugged. We’d long ago established the fact that my mind didn’t work the same way as everyone else’s.

“Does it?” I prodded.

With a sigh, he wrapped his arms around me.

“Sometimes, yes, the thought frightens me, mostly because of how inconceivable it is. When does forever stop? Does it stop? How do you measure an eternity?”He paused, I assumed, in thought. I saw his lovely face tighten with anguish and confusion and sorrow. “No one can even say for sure when it began. Some say billions of years; others say millions, and others believe thousands. If we don’t know where it started, how can we know where it ends?”

I’d never heard him voice his thoughts so freely. He growled in frustration and the sound was loud in my ear, sending shivers down my spine.

“Or if it ends at all! What if I just go on infinitely? What if my family and others like us never truly die? What if I am doomed to walk this Earth,to exist in this universe, ...” His eyes closed with some ancient emotion I could not comprehend.

“Forever?” I whispered.

His gaze came to rest on me and I propped my head upon my forearm, which was folded over his chest. And then his eyes met mine. The sorrow, the pain, the turmoil, the deep, heavy woe in his eyes broke my heart several times in that fraction of a second. The emotions were so strong, so inconsolable, that they shook me to my core and before I knew it, tears rolled down my cheeks. It wasn’t until I felt him wipe one away, his fingers as light as a moth’s wing,that I even realized I was crying.

I felt it, though. I felt the emotions reflected in his eyes. I felt them deep in my chest, weighing heavily on my heart, choking me. I felt the total impossibility of his existence. The uncertainty and the forlorn question of what his purpose was. I felt it all, and I nearly exploded with grief. All of the heartache bubbled over and my body shook with sobs.

I felt his arms form a loving shield around me, although the anguish was his, and not mine. I should have been protecting him, consoling him, but I couldn’t hold myself together.

A soft, soothing melody came and I realized Nathaniel was humming. My heart swelled with love and a wave of ease flooded me. I clung to his shirt, wanting to be as close as possible. I wanted him to know I was there with him. His hold on me tightened and I felt him press his face into my hair.

“My lovely Delilah,” he whispered. My name on his tongue sounded wonderful, and I wanted him to say it again and again. Reluctantly, I lifted my head from his chest and the sad smile on his perfect lips brought fresh tears to my eyes. “So absurd,” he muttered,stroking my cheek with his thumb.

“Nathaniel,” I sighed his name and my voice cracked. “I -”

His exquisite lavender eyes softened and he pulled me up so that my face was level with his. He pressed his cheek to mine and said softly in my ear,“What is it?”

I pulled back to gaze at his sinfully gorgeous face. Hesitantly, I traced its contours, his smooth brow, his lavender eyelids and the circles beneath them, the bridge of his nose,the planes of his cheeks, the angles of his jaw, his soft, soft lips. I heard his sharp intake of breath and the way my name floated from his lips.


In his eyes I saw are flection of my own longings and it made my stomach flip.

“Nathaniel,” I whispered. “The thought of you ... alone forever ...” my voice trembled and I buried my face in his neck. I forced back sobs as his hands traced soothing circles on my back. I shook my head, unable to finish my sentence. I hoped he understood.

His arms enclosed me completely and he held me so tightly that I was sure I’d fall into him. Except it wasn’t tight enough. It never seemed to be. I could never be close enough to him. He pressed his cheek to my hair and I heard him inhale deeply. He sat up and I stretched my arms as far as they could go around his chest,my fingers splayed across his back, making sure not to disturb his wings.

I wasn’t sure why, but my eyes were shut tight.Maybe I was afraid that when I opened them he wouldn’t be there.How would I live without him? He’d have to move on in a few years for people would notice that he never aged, and then what would I do?

I breathed in his sweet scent and tried to commit it to memory. The thought of him having to go through infinite lifetimes in pain was unbearable. I’d only have one life without him;he’d go on eternally.

“Delilah,” his voice washed over me and warmed my heart. “Look at me.” I couldn’t disobey and leaned back to gaze at him. His eyes were full of such intensity that I melted in his arms. I leaned in and his lips met mine. He kissed me hard, harder than he’d ever kissed me,and I knew he was pouring his heart into it. I was, too.

I smiled against his mouth and felt him do the same. My grin broadened and I leaned back to look at him. His mouth spread into one of his glorious crooked smiles and I brought my hands to my face, my cheeks hurting from the strain of smiling. I laughed breathily and shook my head.

“What?” he asked, his voice husky, his lips still stretched in a smile.

I shook my head again.“It’s embarrassing.” What was I supposed to tell him?That his smile made my insides turn to mush?

He rolled his eyes good-naturedly and said, “Everything with you is embarrassing.” He grabbed my chin and drew my face closer to his.

“Tell me,” he breathed, and I was temporarily dazed.

I also totally lost all of my resolve. “Your smile,” I started.

“Yes?” he prompted.

“I love it.”

His grin grew into one of triumph and I pouted at having given in. He placed a kiss on my forehead and then on my mouth.

“I love you,” he whispered against my ear. I brushed his obsidian hair away from his forehead and smiled down on him, my face no doubt glowing bright red.

For some reason I laughed, then said quietly, “I love you, too.”

If possible, he smiled more breathtakingly than ever and pulled me to him.

“Those words from you will bring me happiness forever. No matter how long forever may be.”

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on Apr. 20 2010 at 6:32 pm
EllaMcFarley BRONZE, Madison, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
"See ya later, Herc, it's been a real slice." -Megera from Hercules (my avatar!)
"I can't turn left!" -Zoolander
"Someone get these mother f***ing snakes off this mother f***ing plane!" -Samuel L. Jackson in Snakes On a Plane (funniest movie ever)

I don't like twilight, this is better than it, cause it has a guy with purple eyes and freaking WINGS!!! good job :)

on Apr. 18 2010 at 2:11 am
Violinist SILVER, Chandler, Arizona
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It was predictable. Beautiful but very predictable. Anything you write has to have feelings not just words that expresses feeling. When you write, you to describe everything from the air breathe to grass you were lying on. You can't just make a picture in someone's head, you have to make them believe that this is real. That they are truly there to the point where they could touch his wings. Make so it will your readers turn their heads and "I cannot believe that just happened"

on Apr. 14 2010 at 6:04 pm
emoVamp247 BRONZE, Port Saint Lucie, Florida
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o.m.g i love it. it is wonderful you need to write a second part i want more!!!!!!!!

on Apr. 8 2010 at 5:18 pm
Lost_and_Insecure BRONZE, Monroe, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
"Let the rain fall down, just be ready for the lightning strike as the thunder rolls."

I know! lol

on Apr. 4 2010 at 10:58 am
kikigirl101 SILVER, Somewhere In, Connecticut
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Favorite Quote:
"If music is the food of love then play on" - William Shakespeare

Wow that was really good! I loved it!! It was so beautiful, I wanted to be in the meadow with them so baldy because it was so peaceful and lovely. I have to say faeries trump sparkly vampires any day! Well done, beautifully written and now I'm off to look at your other work! :)

amaranth178 said...
on Apr. 2 2010 at 1:26 pm
amaranth178, Washington, District Of Columbia
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beautiful ending

on Mar. 28 2010 at 2:18 pm
SarClark BRONZE, NC, Connecticut
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Ahhhhh!!!! Yay! Faaaavorite, suuuper well written!

LaylaViolet said...
on Mar. 23 2010 at 4:07 pm
No way are you working with faeries. I haven't seen ANYTHING about faeries since Holly Black dominated. Awesome for bringing it back!!

Riley141 GOLD said...
on Mar. 19 2010 at 3:54 pm
Riley141 GOLD, Yale, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
" Always do right. This will gratifiy some people and astonish the rest." Mark Twain

Ohh thanks..

on Mar. 19 2010 at 12:45 pm
LiveLaughSIng13 BRONZE, Scottsdale, Arizona
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Favorite Quote:
You're only as tall as the world will let you be, and you're only as small as the world will make you seem. But when the going gets rough and you feel like you may fall just look on the brightside you're roughly six feet tall."- NeverShoutNever

He's a faerie

Riley141 GOLD said...
on Mar. 13 2010 at 3:58 pm
Riley141 GOLD, Yale, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
" Always do right. This will gratifiy some people and astonish the rest." Mark Twain

P.S. SOOOO nuch bettter than Twilight!

Riley141 GOLD said...
on Mar. 13 2010 at 3:57 pm
Riley141 GOLD, Yale, Michigan
13 articles 3 photos 145 comments

Favorite Quote:
" Always do right. This will gratifiy some people and astonish the rest." Mark Twain

My first thought was amazing... I dosen't say what he was though...Id love to know, and I'd love to hear a second!

Lilly101 said...
on Mar. 1 2010 at 8:54 am
Lilly101, Rancho Cordova, California
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Favorite Quote:
"Don't stop believing"

you have an amiazing work keep u up the good work. U should keep writing u are an amaizind write. :)

on Feb. 20 2010 at 8:47 am
fyreflies BRONZE, Randolph, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
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"Oh, of course it doesn't hurt to slide in softball." (before I tore up both knees and before I slapped that person)
"Stay with me here now/And never surrender" Skillet

Hi, ImWatchingYou

Anyway, I really love this story and it beats the Twilight with sparkly vampires. Keep writing, my friend, keep writing! You may write the best romantic fantasy books since...well, I haven't read a good one yet. BUT YOU HAVE THE CHANCE! TAKE IT!!!!!

on Jan. 28 2010 at 11:02 am
Lovestonedloser GOLD, Orlando, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
If your always looking down, you'll never see the beauty of the stars.

This is breathtaking. I love love loveee it :) You're a very talented writer. Comment on some of my work if you don't mind please? I have two stories "Forever" and "A Blood promise" give opinions on if i should continue one, the other or both?

on Jan. 19 2010 at 9:27 am
this is so beautiful! I love it! This is WAY better than Twilight! You must right more! :)

on Jan. 9 2010 at 7:28 pm
Angely Diaz BRONZE, San Pedro Sula, Other
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oh dear! this was so beautiful i had a silly smile on my face all the time, headed to check your other works, hope i find more like this, congrats! XD

on Dec. 28 2009 at 12:30 am
BeckoningLovely GOLD, Wilmington, Delaware
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Favorite Quote:
"I think our favorite quotes say more about us than the people we are quoting," John Green

and the crowd resonates "SEQUEL!SEQUEL!"

on Dec. 3 2009 at 12:48 am
UncertainlyClear BRONZE, Haikou, Other
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You are a really good writer. Its nice how you were able to use twilight as a base to do show your own creativity. But it would be very cool if you were able to use your skill to develop characters from your own imagination. That would be much more fun to read.

on Nov. 27 2009 at 7:59 pm
potterlight PLATINUM, Cleveland, Ohio
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That makes sense

This is so creative! Do more works like these!!

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