Alice is dead

May 27, 2010
ALICE!? ALICE were You? You Kept Calling Her Name ALICE!? All of a Sudden You Fall Through The Same Sweet Sacrificing Hole. IT'S A SHORT WAY DOWN YET IT FEELS LIKE FOREVER. WHEN YOU GET TO THE BOTTOM AND YOU ARE IN A ROOM FULL OF DOORS. UNSURE OF WHAT DOOR YOU WANT TO GO INTO YOU KEEP WALKING. THE HALL GETS SMALLER FOR SOME STRANGE AND UNFATHOMABLE REASON YOU GO THROUGH THE DOOR THAT IS SHORTER AND LESS DANGERIOUS LOOKING. WHEN YOU GET IN THERE YOU SEE A VILE THAT SAYS DRINK YOU DECIDE WHY WOULD THIS LITTLE VILE LIE? RIGHT WHEN YOU'RE A BOUT TO DRINK IT SOMETHING CATCHES YOU EYE. IT WAS ONE OF ALICES SHOES YOU WONDER WHY ALICE WOULD HAVE ANY REASON FOR TAKING OFF HER SHOE. I WONDER IF ALICE IS ALRIGHT. YOU ASK YOUR SELF. SHE HAS TO BE. THEN YOU REALIZE HOW COULD SHE BE OK SHE HAS BEEN GONE FOR A WHILE. THAN YOU THINK THE RABBIT AND HER COULD HAVE JUST GOT CAUGHT TALIKING AND DIDN'T REALIZE THE TIME. YOU SIT DOWN AND THINK OF WHAT TO DO ONLY IF ALICE WAS HERE SHE HAS VISITED WONDER LAND MANY TIMES. BUT ALICE ISNT HERE YOU SAY SHES BEEN GONE FOR A WEEK OR SO. THAN YOU THINK HOW LONG HAVE I BEEN GONE? YOU REACH ANOTHER LITTLE DOOR BUT YOU CANT GET THROUGH YOUR TOO BIG. SO YOU KICK THE WALL AND TO YOUR SUPPRISE IT MAKES A HUGE HOLE IN THE WALL. YOU FIT THROUGH THE HOLE IN THE WALL YOU WALK AROUND AND U GET TIERD AND A LITTLE PARCHED. YOU SIT DOWN BY A LITTLE RIVER TAKE A DRINK AND SIT AND THINK WERE ALICE COULD BE. WHEN YOU TAKE ANOTHER DRINK YOU REALIZE IT TASTE FUNNY YOU PICK SOME UP AND EXAMIN IT CAREFULLY IT HAD A REDISH SORT OF TINT TO IT. YOU STOP IN HORROR IT SUDDLEY HIT YOU ITS BLOOD. YOU RUN AS FAST AS YOU CAN AWAY FROM THERE AND YOU RUN INTO SOMETHING YOU FALL BACK. IT TAKES YOU A SECOND TO REALIZE WHAT AND WHO IT IS. IT IS ALICE LYING BY THE TREE HER COLD DEAD FINGERS WERE STARTING TO WITHER AWAY. AND SHE HAD BLOOD ON ONE SIDE OF HER FACE YOU TURN HER OVER AND GASP IN HORROR THE HALF OF HER BODY THAT YOU DIDN'T SEE WAS BONES AND ONE SIDE OF HER FACE WAS JUST BONE. YOU WALK BACK SO DISGUSTED BY THIS SIGHT YOU FEEL A BIT QUESY AND DIZZY. STILL IN SHOCK YOU SIT THER LOOKING AT THE GOOD SIDE OF HER YOU REALIZE THAN HOW BEAUTIFUL SHE WAS AND YOU REMEMBER HOW NICE SHE WAS. YOU WONDER HOW ANY ONE COULD THIS TO SOME ONE WHO WAS SO KIND AND GIVING. YOU LOOK HER OVER THE REALITY OF IT ALL HITTING YOU AT ONCE YOU CURL UP HOLD YOU SELF YOU CAN FEEL A BIG HOLE IN YOUR CHEST YOU WAIT FOR IT TO LEAVE YOU FALL ASLEEP NEXT TO ALICES BODY. WHEN YOU WAKE UP ITS NIGHT YOU GET OUT YOUR FLASH LIGHT AND SIT THERE WITH IT SHINING WAITING FOR SOME THING TO COME TO YOU A WAY TO GET OUT OF THERE. GET OUT OF THE GOD FORSAKED PLACE NEVER TO RETURN. WHEN YOU SEE THAT THERE IS SOME THING IN ALICES HAND YOU LOOK TO SEE WHAT IT IS IT WAS A RIPPED PAPER THAT SAID “KILL THE RABBIT”. YOUR SHOCKED YOU NO THAT IT WAS ALICES HAND WRITING THE BEAUTIFUL CURSUVE WRITTIN ACROSS THE PIECE OF PAPER AS IF SHE HAD TAKEN HER SWEET TIME TO WRITE IT INSTEAD OF JOTTING IT DOWN WITHOUT A MOMENTS HESITATION. YOUR SICK YOU RUN THE WAY YOU CAME WITH THE PIECE OF PAPER IN YOUR HAND AND YOU KEEP THINKING ALICE IS NOT DEAD THIS IS ALL A DREAM BUT YOU COULDN'T LIE GOOD ENOUGH TO YOUR SELF BECAUSE YOU ENDED UP CRYING WHILE YOUR RUNNING. YOU SLOW DOWN TO CATCH YOUR BREATH WHEN YOU RUN INTO THE RABBIT HE TAKES OFF HIS HAT AND SAYS I DON'T BELIVE I HAVE SEEN YOU AROUND HERE BEFOR MY NAME IS RABBIT. YOU GIVE HIM A COLD STARE AND HE LOOKS CONFUSED YET NOT SUPPRISED AND YOU WONDER WHY. THEN YOU SEE HES NOT LOOKING AT YOU ANY MORE HES LOOKING AT THE PIECE OF PAPER IN YOU HAND AND YOU JUST REALIZED IT HAD SOME BLOOD ON IT. HE ASKED IN NOT SO POLITE TURMES. “MAY I BE SO KIND AS TO ASK WERE YOUNG LADY DID YOU GETS THAT?” YOU TRIED TO THINK OF WHAT TO SAY SO HE DOESN'T CATCH ON THAT YOU HAVE SEEN ALICE BUT BEFOR YOU CAN STOP YOURSELF YOU SAY “IT BELONGS TO MY DEAR SISTER ALICE WHOS BODY I HAD JUST FOUND. AND YOU MISTER KILLED HER AND I AM GOING TO REPORT YOU TO THE OTHORITYS AND HAVE YOU BEHADED AND IF THEY DON'T WELL I WILL TAKE THAT INTO MY OWN HANDS AND MAKE SURE THAT YOU BECOME DEAD JUST LIKE ALICE!” WHEN YOU THINK WHY IN THE WORLD I WOULD SAY THAT YOU ARE DEBATING IN YOUR MIND WEATHER TO RUN OR STAY AND SEE WHAT HE SAYS. A SMALL PART OF YOU WANTS TO RUN BUT A BIG PART OF YOU WANTS TO SEE WHAT HE SAYS. HIS LIPS CURL UP INTO A EVIL SMILE SUCH A SMILE MADE YOU WANT TO JUMP OUT OF YOUR SKIN AND RUN TO YOUR HOME GET UNDER YOUR MOTHERS COVER WITH HER AND JUST START CRYING. THAN WITH MORE STRENGHT THAN YOU WOULD HAVE THOUGHT POSSIBLE FOR SUCH A LITTLE RABBIT HE GRABS YOU BY THE HAIR AND SLAMES YOUR HEAD AGANST A TREE YOU GO DOWN INTO A PEACEFUL DARKNESS. WHEN YOU COME TO YOUR RIGHT BY ALICE TIED TO THE TREE. THE WORST PART ABOUT IT WAS THAT YOU WERE TIED BY HER CORPS PART NOT THE GOOD SIDE. “MY DEAR I REALLY DIDN'T FEEL LIKE KILLING ANY ONE ELSE BUT YOU HAD TO BE NOSY AND LOOK FOR YOUR SISTER SO I HAVE NO CHOICE.”
“WHY ARE YOU DOING THIS RABBIT YOU AND ALICE WERE FRIENDS WHAT HAPPED?”
“I LIKED ALICE I REALLY DID, BUT SHE HAD A PROBLEM WITH STICKING HER NOSE INTO OTHER PEOPLES BISNESS. YOU SEE I AM GOING TO KILL THE QUEEN I HAVE HAD ENOUGH WITH WORKING FOR THAT OLD RECHED HAG I CANNOT TAKE IT. SO I DECIED TO GET WITH HER ENIMIES AND KILL HER ONE DAY WHEN WE HAD A MEETING ALICE FOLLOWED ME THERE TO MAKE A LONG STORY SHORT SHE HEARD OUR PLAN AND WAS GOING TO TURN US IN SO I SIMPLY HAD NO OTHER CHOICE THAN TO GET RID OF THIS MINOR GLICH IN MY MASTER PLAN. I WAS ON MY WAY TO THE BALL SO I CAN SLIT THE QUEENS THROAT AND BE RID OF HER SO WE CAN ALL LIVE IN PEACE. DON'T YOU SEE HOW BEAUTIFUL THIS PLAN IS AND WE CAN ALL BE HAPPY WHEN IT'S OVER”
“YOU'RE AN INSANE RABBIT. I HOPE THAT YOU WILL SLIP WITH THE NIFE AND STAB YOUR SELF. THAN OUT OF A RAGE OF VIOLENCE YOU SPIT ON HIM”
BEFOR YOU NO IT YOU GET A SHRP PAIN ON YOUR LIP AND THAN YOU TASTE BLOOD HE HAD PUNCHED YOU SO HARD YOUR LIP WAS BLEEDING AN D A TOOTH WAS LOOSE.
“I REALLY DON'T WANT TO HIT 11 YEAR OLD GIRLS BUT I REALLY HAD NO CHOICE YOU WERE TALKING BACK IS THAT ANY WAY TO SPEAK TO A GROWN UP?”
“I AM 13 YOU SAY IN A WHISPER.”
ANOTHER SHARP PAIN YOU FEEL BUT THIS TIME ON YOUR CHEEK BLOOD STREAMS DOWN YOUR FACE BLOOD FROM THE RINGS ON HIS FINGERS.
“NOW WHAT DID I SAY ABOUT BACK TALIKING? NOW TELL ME ARE YOU SURE YOUR ALICES SISTER YOU TO ARE NOTHING ALIKE?”
“OF COURSE IM SURE I THINK I WOULD NO BETTER THAN YOU”
“ OF COURSE BUT YOU TO LOOK NOTHING ALIKE SHE HAS BLOND HAIR YOU HAVE BROWN YOU ARE MORE IVORY SKINNED THAN HERE AND YOU HAVE GREEN EYES SHE HAS BLUE. YOU'RE CHEEK BONES STAND OUT SLIGHTLY MORE. SHE STILL HAS THAT CHILDISH ROUNDNESS ON HER FACE YET YOU DON'T.”
HE STIFFELS A LAUGH
“ALICE IS SIXTEEN YET SHE HAS THE QUALITYS OF A CHILD SO WILLING TO HELP AND NOT TALK BACK. BUT YOU ON THE OTHER HAND HAVE THE QUALITYS OF SOME ONE WHO TAKES CRAP FROM NO ONE AND YOU ARE A BIT MOUTHY.”
HE GIVES ANOTHER LAUGH BEFORE BECOMING SERIOUSE ONCE MORE.
“TO BAD SOME ONE SO BEAUTIFUL AND SOPHISTICATED HAS TO DIE AT SUCH A YOUNG AGE. YOU COULD HAVE BEEN SOMEBODY AND MADE A DIFFRENCE IN THE WORLD. ALICE ON THE OTHER HAND WOULD HAVE GOT MARRIED AND HER HUSBAND WOULD HAVE TREATED HER LIKE A DOOR MAT SO REALLY I DID HER A FAVOR I KILLED HER SO SHE DIDN'T HAVE TO LIVE SUCH A MISSRIBLE LIFE SO DON'T BE TO MAD.”
“SHUT UP! SHUT THE HELL UP NO YOU HAVE NO IDEA WHAT YOUR TALIKING ABOUT ALICE WOULD HAVE HAD A GREAT LIFE THAN YOU GO AND CUT IT SHORT FOR HER. SO YOU CAN JUST SHUT THE HELL UP YOU DIDN'T NO HER LIKE I DID! I AM GOING TO KILL YOU ONE WAY OR ANOTHER YOU WILL DIE!”
YOU FEEL THE BLOWS AT YOUR HEAD HIS FIST NO LONGER HURT YOU BECAUSE YOU BODY AND MIND HAVE BECOME NUMB. WHEN HE FINALY STOPS YOU REALIZE HE IS FAT AND YOU CAN OUT RUN HIM YOU JUST HAVE TO GET OUT OF THE ROPES. YOU HAVE A POCKET NIFE YOU ALWAYS CARRY WITH YOU IN CASE OF EMERGENCY. YOU THINK TO YOUR SELF HEYTHIS IS AN EMERGENCY. SO YOU WAIT TILLLHE GOES BEHIND A BUSH TO PEE AND THAN YOU SAW AS FAST AS YOU CAN ON THE ROPE YOU FINALY CUT IT BUT RIGHT WHEN YOU DO HE COMES BACK .
“HEY COME HERE A SEC. I AM WITH YOU ON KILLING THE QUEEN SHE WAS MEAN TO ALICE AND I PLAN ON GETTING HER BACK”
“I am so GLAD YOU SEE THINGS MY WAY”
“Come Down HERE Closer You Never KNOW WHO MIGHT BE LISTING”
WHEN HE GETS FAR ENOUGH DOWN YOU KICK HIM IN THE FACE AND RUN HE IS CHASEING AFETER YOU CUSING YOU OUT SAYIGN YOU MADE HIM BLEED. BUT YOU ARE MUCH OT FAST FOR HIM YOU KEEP RUNNING UNTIL YOU CANT SEE HIM ANY MORE. THAN YU ENTER THIS ROOM THAT IS ALL BLACK YOU GO TO TURN AROUND BUT THE DOOR CLOSED AND WOULDN'T OPEN YOU SIT THERE ARMS WRAPED AROUND YOUR KNEES AND CRY WONDERING IF ANY ONE WOULD EVER FIND YOU OR ALICE AND GET RABBIT.? YOU FEEL SOMETHING SOFT YOU GET OUT YOUR FLASH LIGHT TO SEE WHAT IT IS. YOU SCREAM IT WAS THE HEAD OF A PEARSON. YOU WALK ALONG TRYING TO GET OUT OF THERE YOU LOOK ON AND REALIZE IT GOES ON A FAR WAY FILLED WITH BODIES OF POOR UNFORTUNATE SOULS YOU HEAR RABBITS VOICE AS IF HE WAS USING SPEAKERS “I SEE YOU HAVE FOUND MY BODIE LAYER WELL YOU WILL WONDER AROUND LIKE THEM FOR DAYS UNTIL YOU FINALY DIE. GOODBYE SAY HI TO ALICE FOR ME HA HA”.
YOU WALK SCARED ALONE AND CONFUSED WAITING FOR THE MOMENT WHEN YOU DIE.
ALL YOU KNOW IS THAT YOU ARE A GONER AND
ALICE IS DEAD.





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SerraAngel said...
Jul. 21, 2010 at 2:29 pm
I liked it, even with the caps. Please check out the "Eternal Night" series!!!
 
BaileyBaby13 said...
Jul. 12, 2010 at 12:30 am
I agree,(:
 
BaileyBaby13 replied...
Jul. 12, 2010 at 12:31 am
oh jeez, this was supposed to be a Reply to WindowChild, haha.
 
WindowChild said...
Jul. 11, 2010 at 7:58 am
Like everyone seems to be saying, the caps were a bit... much. But I do like the last sentence- very intense. You seem to have a lot of prospect with writing, but try checking for spelling and grammar next time (especially commas!) Also, you should separate the different paragraphs- it makes everything so much easier to read.
 
LastChapter said...
Jul. 10, 2010 at 2:55 pm
well, um, you certainly seem to have a lot of...feelings in there. The power of the caps were kind of abused, and therefor lost some of its emotion, but the actual story was pretty good.
 
mikey123 said...
Jul. 8, 2010 at 2:42 pm
I couldn't even read it--the caps is so annoying.
 
Apollo26 replied...
Jul. 14, 2010 at 6:53 pm
I completely agree, I couldn't get past the first couple of sentences with the caps.
 
Christa W. said...
Jul. 8, 2010 at 8:49 am
i like this story. keep writing these kind of stories but making characters is fun. any way good job!
 
avmbookworm said...
Jul. 7, 2010 at 1:38 pm
I liked the story, but there were so many spelling errors that it made it hard to read.
 
madmadie22 said...
Jul. 6, 2010 at 7:52 pm
Oh, wow!  The caps WERE a little much, but I think it adds to the insanity of the story.  It's so random and BAM! in your face, lol.  I love it!  Good job!  :)
 
HopelessSharpie said...
Jul. 6, 2010 at 7:35 pm
It's really good, the caps are a bit annoying, but I like the story and the ending left me a little scared, but I'm guessing it was a physiological horror so good job
 
RFrocker23 said...
Jul. 6, 2010 at 2:21 pm
WHY ARE YOU YELLING? Try toning down the Caps next time...
 
i_am_nobody replied...
Jul. 6, 2010 at 4:07 pm
ya, too much caps lock
 
Dawnheart said...
Jul. 6, 2010 at 10:41 am
Very...interesting
 
D31DR@ replied...
Jun. 6, 2011 at 11:50 am
Sorry guys about the caps. I have no idea what i was thinking. Thanks for telling me what you guys think
 
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