Without Wings Chapter 2 -- A Maximum Ride Story

April 11, 2010
By JacobC GOLD, Belgium, Wisconsin
JacobC GOLD, Belgium, Wisconsin
10 articles 4 photos 69 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Am I indecisive? Well, yes and no." -Anonymous


Fang's Perspective:

Where is she, I thought. I couldn’t believe that she hadn’t gotten out yet.

She’s getting closer, Angel thought. She wants us to come to her, though.

Why? I thought back. Wait, can you think back? Whatever.

I don’t know.

“Hey guys,” I said, “let’s go get Max.” Iggy and Gazzy cheered. Everyone jumped into the air and we took off, heading for the School.

Iggy said, “Wow, this is like de ja vu. Except, we’re going to save Max, not Angel.”

“I can hear her thoughts. She is really close, actually,” Angel said.

“Where? I don’t see her.”

“She isn’t flying. She’s … hitchhiking?” Everyone stared at Angel. She just shrugged.

Why is she hitchhiking? I thought. Angel told us that we should land. A few minutes later a semi raced by, and it screeched to a halt. Max climbed out, and we all raced toward her.

“Max!” everyone yelled. We all plowed into her at full speed, which was the equivalent of being hit by a freight train. A freight train with a bunch of wings, that is.

I waited for the love fest to pass, then I gave her an angry look. “Why didn’t you fly?” I asked her.

“I, um, wanted to take the scenic route.”

“From inside a semi?”

“Yeah.”

“Okay, now what’s the truth?”

She paused for a few seconds, then she sighed. “They took away my wings,” she said in a small voice.

Everyone’s jaw hit the floor, err, pavement. “Huh?”

“I can’t fly.”

“W-what happened?” Stop stammering! I thought to myself.

“The whitecoats must have done it. I escaped from the lab, but I think my ankle is sprained.” I suddenly noticed that the semi was still there. I waved the guy on, but he got out instead. He walked over to us, and I noticed that he looked familiar. Way too familiar.

“Guys,” I said. “I think Jeb is paying us a visit.” Max immediately did a 180 and started walking toward the semi driver (Jeb). Jeb noticed that she didn’t look very happy.

“Max,” he warned, “don’t do anything you might regret.”

Max just kept walking toward him. She said, “Don’t worry. I won’t regret this.” Jeb was out cold after the first punch.


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Cait8Pi said...
on Mar. 3 2012 at 10:56 pm
I LOVE Max Ride!  I haven't read a fanfic yet that had them in a scenario where Max loses her wings!

on Sep. 24 2010 at 6:32 pm
CrazyWriter GOLD, Lorton Station, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"Once you have given up on the most important thing in your life, you begin to die, because then, you gradually lose your true self"~Hana Kimi
"Someone who can lie to themself. . . is lonely, and in pain"~Hana Kimi

YAY!! i love the Maximum Ride Seris!!Finally a Fanfic!!! I love it though i feel bummed for max (no wings!) and you caputered the characters perfectly btw.

~CRazYWrItER


on Jun. 30 2010 at 10:32 am
EllaMcFarley BRONZE, Madison, Wisconsin
4 articles 0 photos 34 comments

Favorite Quote:
"See ya later, Herc, it's been a real slice." -Megera from Hercules (my avatar!)
"I can't turn left!" -Zoolander
"Someone get these mother f***ing snakes off this mother f***ing plane!" -Samuel L. Jackson in Snakes On a Plane (funniest movie ever)

Both versions of the chapter i wrote are posted, you can check it out now!! :D

on Jun. 30 2010 at 10:30 am
EllaMcFarley BRONZE, Madison, Wisconsin
4 articles 0 photos 34 comments

Favorite Quote:
"See ya later, Herc, it's been a real slice." -Megera from Hercules (my avatar!)
"I can't turn left!" -Zoolander
"Someone get these mother f***ing snakes off this mother f***ing plane!" -Samuel L. Jackson in Snakes On a Plane (funniest movie ever)

Hey Max fans!! I wrote a fanfic about maximum ride too, check it out!! :D

 

GO FANG!


on May. 20 2010 at 8:17 pm
justsmile164 BRONZE, New York, New York
4 articles 0 photos 73 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Talent is nothing without character."

i've never heard of this series, but i like it :)

on May. 16 2010 at 1:47 pm
TheMalfunctioningWallflower BRONZE, Houston, Texas
1 article 0 photos 45 comments

Favorite Quote:
"GET THE CAT!!!"

"I did wood paneling."

"Do not FEAR the Crooked Zipper!! EMBRACE the Crooked Zipper!!!"

"What's better than infinity?"

"Wear your helmets, we'll be reaching speeds of three!"

"You could walk on your hands and catch up to him!"

Pleeeease write more about the flock!!!! Anything!

on May. 6 2010 at 11:19 pm
.Escape.From.This.Afterlife. GOLD, Short Hills, New Jersey
10 articles 0 photos 94 comments

Favorite Quote:
"bad blood is more satisfying to spill across the floor..."

You have a really good writing style.  :)

nutmeg212 GOLD said...
on Apr. 23 2010 at 7:44 am
nutmeg212 GOLD, Coventry, Rhode Island
11 articles 0 photos 63 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't worry about it." -V.Z.

no wings??? awww that makes me sad, but it was very well written.  The only thing i thought was that fang wouldnt stutter so much. he's supposed to be the cool, calm, collected one who has it alltogether... but i guess if the love of your life loses her wings... i am a HUGE maximum ride fan and i think you did a great job. keep wriring!!!

Valiant GOLD said...
on Apr. 22 2010 at 10:33 pm
Valiant GOLD, Richardson, Texas
13 articles 0 photos 27 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You look like a bloated, cross-eyed squid with a beard.... well, at least you hair looks right."
Me to my friend Heidi

YOU TOOK AWAY MAX'S WINGS! AHHH! THAT'S HORRIBLE! on the bright side this is very well written. But Fang wouldn't stutter no matter what.

JacobC GOLD said...
on Apr. 20 2010 at 6:56 pm
JacobC GOLD, Belgium, Wisconsin
10 articles 4 photos 69 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Am I indecisive? Well, yes and no." -Anonymous

I'll be sure to read your story.  I love Max Ride

on Apr. 20 2010 at 6:28 pm
EllaMcFarley BRONZE, Madison, Wisconsin
4 articles 0 photos 34 comments

Favorite Quote:
"See ya later, Herc, it's been a real slice." -Megera from Hercules (my avatar!)
"I can't turn left!" -Zoolander
"Someone get these mother f***ing snakes off this mother f***ing plane!" -Samuel L. Jackson in Snakes On a Plane (funniest movie ever)

aweeeesooommmmeeee!! Ahh!! max's wings!! freaky.... love the maximum ride series!! just wrote a fan fiction for it myself... :) soon to be posted!!




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